Enter Anna Stage Left
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Comment from meeshu
Your writing is smooth and the language is colorful. I enjoyed reading this writing so much. a very romantic tale, inspiring. good luck..
reply by the author on 04-Jan-2019
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Your writing is smooth and the language is colorful. I enjoyed reading this writing so much. a very romantic tale, inspiring. good luck..
Comment Written 04-Jan-2019
reply by the author on 04-Jan-2019
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Thank you for your kind words. I appreciate you taking the time to read and review my work.
Comment from Jannypan (Jan)
I enjoyed your contest entry, Mystery Author.. Congratulations on finding the one meant for you. You told a great story in just a few words as required. There is good flow and a great message in your storyline. Best wishes. Jan
reply by the author on 04-Jan-2019
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I enjoyed your contest entry, Mystery Author.. Congratulations on finding the one meant for you. You told a great story in just a few words as required. There is good flow and a great message in your storyline. Best wishes. Jan
Comment Written 03-Jan-2019
reply by the author on 04-Jan-2019
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Thank you Jan for your kind words. I appreciate you taking the time to read and review my work.
Comment from Sarah_Goldwell
I loved your story. It is well written, well edited and had a great ending. Not sure it really meets the criteria of the contest, though. If you were flirting till you plucked up courage to ask her out, technically you weren't strangers when you kissed.
reply by the author on 04-Jan-2019
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I loved your story. It is well written, well edited and had a great ending. Not sure it really meets the criteria of the contest, though. If you were flirting till you plucked up courage to ask her out, technically you weren't strangers when you kissed.
Comment Written 03-Jan-2019
reply by the author on 04-Jan-2019
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Thank you for your kind words You were right they disqualified it. I appreciate you taking the time to read and review my work.
Comment from Thomas Bowling
If I had a six to give, you would get it for this wonderful story. This is one of the best entries I have read for this contest including mine. I only hope I come in second.
reply by the author on 03-Jan-2019
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If I had a six to give, you would get it for this wonderful story. This is one of the best entries I have read for this contest including mine. I only hope I come in second.
Comment Written 03-Jan-2019
reply by the author on 03-Jan-2019
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Thank you Thomas, I appreciate your kind words and the virtual six. Thank you for reading and reviewing my work. I hope you come in second too LOL.
Comment from Sandra Stoner-Mitchell
Aww! That was so lovely, so romantic and obviously, so true! I love that it is, it makes it so much more romantic. That was so well written, you told your whole romantic story in just one hundred words. I wish you tons more years more together, and lots of good luck in the contest. :)) Sandra xxx
reply by the author on 03-Jan-2019
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Aww! That was so lovely, so romantic and obviously, so true! I love that it is, it makes it so much more romantic. That was so well written, you told your whole romantic story in just one hundred words. I wish you tons more years more together, and lots of good luck in the contest. :)) Sandra xxx
Comment Written 03-Jan-2019
reply by the author on 03-Jan-2019
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She actually deserves 1,000 words. I appreciate you taking the time to read and my work.
Comment from Rob Caudle
Well 100 words and the complete picture of a long lasting romance. I have such respect for writers that are so succinct I can't tell a story in under 2500 words well done and good luck.
Rob
reply by the author on 03-Jan-2019
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Well 100 words and the complete picture of a long lasting romance. I have such respect for writers that are so succinct I can't tell a story in under 2500 words well done and good luck.
Rob
Comment Written 03-Jan-2019
reply by the author on 03-Jan-2019
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Thank you Rob. I appreciate you taking the time to read and review my work.
Comment from Xia Thornwood
Clearly told and not vague. You certainly managed to tell a complete story in 100 words. I like how you told the reader without telling the reader about certain parts of the story: she agreed to go out, you kissed, you got married. I especially like how the last line rounds out the story while also giving a happy ending.
Hope you do well in the competition!
reply by the author on 03-Jan-2019
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Clearly told and not vague. You certainly managed to tell a complete story in 100 words. I like how you told the reader without telling the reader about certain parts of the story: she agreed to go out, you kissed, you got married. I especially like how the last line rounds out the story while also giving a happy ending.
Hope you do well in the competition!
Comment Written 03-Jan-2019
reply by the author on 03-Jan-2019
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Thank you for your kind words. I appreciate the five star review.
Comment from Sam Saylor
This was freaking great.
The only issue i noticed was in this sentence
"We'd just sat down in the barbecue place she asked me"
I think perhaps theres should be an and?
Also I notice a few problems with punctuation.... before you mention im terrible with punctuation!
Other than that this was a really, really enjoyable read!
reply by the author on 03-Jan-2019
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This was freaking great.
The only issue i noticed was in this sentence
"We'd just sat down in the barbecue place she asked me"
I think perhaps theres should be an and?
Also I notice a few problems with punctuation.... before you mention im terrible with punctuation!
Other than that this was a really, really enjoyable read!
Comment Written 03-Jan-2019
reply by the author on 03-Jan-2019
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Thank you for your observations. I went in and fixed them. I appreciate you taking the time to read and review my work.
Comment from tfawcus
A romantic story and one with a happy ending! Just a couple of minor suggestions:
Your first sentence would be stronger if you placed 'while working in the tutoring center' after 'in college'.
'In the barbecue place (when) she asked me'
reply by the author on 03-Jan-2019
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A romantic story and one with a happy ending! Just a couple of minor suggestions:
Your first sentence would be stronger if you placed 'while working in the tutoring center' after 'in college'.
'In the barbecue place (when) she asked me'
Comment Written 03-Jan-2019
reply by the author on 03-Jan-2019
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Thank you for the writing pointers, I made the changes. I appreciate the five stars.
Comment from Sandra du Plessis
A very well-written hundred word flash fiction. When two people are meant to be together for life there will be nothing that can stop it from happening no matter how hard others try.
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reply by the author on 03-Jan-2019
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A very well-written hundred word flash fiction. When two people are meant to be together for life there will be nothing that can stop it from happening no matter how hard others try.
This rating does not count towards story rating or author rank.
The highest and the lowest rating are not included in calculations.
Comment Written 03-Jan-2019
reply by the author on 03-Jan-2019
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You're absolutelyright Sandra. I know soulmate is an overused expression, but that is what this was. I appreciate the 5 star review.
