A wasted life
Epitaph25 total reviews
Comment from LovnPeace
The story of many peoples lives. Well done. A life in short verse. My thought on death. We all die alone. I believe it is a very private thing. Hmmm, maybe not totally. I shared it with my daughter when she passed. Well done. Blessings, Barbara
reply by the author on 04-Jan-2019
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The story of many peoples lives. Well done. A life in short verse. My thought on death. We all die alone. I believe it is a very private thing. Hmmm, maybe not totally. I shared it with my daughter when she passed. Well done. Blessings, Barbara
Comment Written 04-Jan-2019
reply by the author on 04-Jan-2019
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Thank you so much Barbara for your comments.
Comment from Sarah_Goldwell
This is a very good piece of work. This kind of poetry is so difficult to write, having never mastered the art myself, I admire those that can and write it well. Good luck in the contest, you have a great entry
reply by the author on 04-Jan-2019
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This is a very good piece of work. This kind of poetry is so difficult to write, having never mastered the art myself, I admire those that can and write it well. Good luck in the contest, you have a great entry
Comment Written 04-Jan-2019
reply by the author on 04-Jan-2019
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Thank you so much for your comments. Sarah.
Comment from lyenochka
Isn't that so sad? What's even sadder is when such a person is married to a devoted person and he never thinks of or cares for her needs. Good message and story in so few words!
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Isn't that so sad? What's even sadder is when such a person is married to a devoted person and he never thinks of or cares for her needs. Good message and story in so few words!
Comment Written 04-Jan-2019
reply by the author on 04-Jan-2019
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Thank you so much for your comments.
Comment from Marc Grimaldi
What a wonderful reality portrayed here. It is so true that those who are selfish and inconsiderate of others, wind up dying alone. A life invested in self alone is a life not worth living. The middle line may be more of an 8 though, creating a 5-8-5 poem? "Never (2) returning (3) love (1), friendship (2) = 8. Check it out for yourself. It is, however, beautiful the way it is. I just don't want to see a single syllable hinder you from winning with this great piece. Keep up the great writing!
reply by the author on 04-Jan-2019
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What a wonderful reality portrayed here. It is so true that those who are selfish and inconsiderate of others, wind up dying alone. A life invested in self alone is a life not worth living. The middle line may be more of an 8 though, creating a 5-8-5 poem? "Never (2) returning (3) love (1), friendship (2) = 8. Check it out for yourself. It is, however, beautiful the way it is. I just don't want to see a single syllable hinder you from winning with this great piece. Keep up the great writing!
Comment Written 03-Jan-2019
reply by the author on 04-Jan-2019
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Thank you so much for pointing out my stupid mistake. (Must be senile). I loved your comments
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Not a stupid mistake. We all make them. But, like I said, great work!
Comment from Janice Canerdy
Your 5-7-5 makes effective use of every syllable to convey its theme.
What a sad commentary on someone's life! I wonder how many epitaphs
COULD say this!
reply by the author on 04-Jan-2019
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Your 5-7-5 makes effective use of every syllable to convey its theme.
What a sad commentary on someone's life! I wonder how many epitaphs
COULD say this!
Comment Written 03-Jan-2019
reply by the author on 04-Jan-2019
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Thank you so much for your comments.
Comment from Jannypan (Jan)
This is a sad commentary on people who do as you have written. When the end comes there is no one around. Good job with the great picture, I enjoyed reading this, Jen. Your line 2 has 8 syllables instead of 7. Suggestion: did not return love, friendship. I rate 5 because I believe you will revise, Best wishes. Jan
reply by the author on 04-Jan-2019
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This is a sad commentary on people who do as you have written. When the end comes there is no one around. Good job with the great picture, I enjoyed reading this, Jen. Your line 2 has 8 syllables instead of 7. Suggestion: did not return love, friendship. I rate 5 because I believe you will revise, Best wishes. Jan
Comment Written 03-Jan-2019
reply by the author on 04-Jan-2019
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Thank you so much for pointing out my stupid mistake. (Must be senile) I've changed it. X
Comment from Thomas Bowling
He lived a sad life. The only thing he did was take up space and use resources. He died with no benefit left behind. No wonder he died alone. He died as he lived.
reply by the author on 03-Jan-2019
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He lived a sad life. The only thing he did was take up space and use resources. He died with no benefit left behind. No wonder he died alone. He died as he lived.
Comment Written 03-Jan-2019
reply by the author on 03-Jan-2019
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Thank you Thomas
Comment from Philip O'Melia
Really liked this depressing poem (gulp! almost about me!). At least I didn't turn away friendships, they just fade away on their own. But it's hard to make an impact in just a few words, so bravo! (Alas, does it describe you?).
reply by the author on 03-Jan-2019
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Really liked this depressing poem (gulp! almost about me!). At least I didn't turn away friendships, they just fade away on their own. But it's hard to make an impact in just a few words, so bravo! (Alas, does it describe you?).
Comment Written 03-Jan-2019
reply by the author on 03-Jan-2019
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No it doesn't describe me, thank goodness. Many thanks for the review. Jen.
Comment from country ranch writer
Some men are like that selfish and self centered they care about no one and could care less if he makes any friends he has himself as a friend. It is so sad.
reply by the author on 03-Jan-2019
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Some men are like that selfish and self centered they care about no one and could care less if he makes any friends he has himself as a friend. It is so sad.
Comment Written 03-Jan-2019
reply by the author on 03-Jan-2019
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Many thanks
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Comment from RodG
One wonders how many other citizens in that cemetery warrant a similar epitaph. So often people put themselves first. thus alienating themselves from others and then dying alone.
reply by the author on 03-Jan-2019
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One wonders how many other citizens in that cemetery warrant a similar epitaph. So often people put themselves first. thus alienating themselves from others and then dying alone.
Comment Written 03-Jan-2019
reply by the author on 03-Jan-2019
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Many thanks.
