Of Nature Sing
Viewing comments for Chapter 3 "Seasonal Changes"A book about the natural world.
5 total reviews
Comment from Xia Thornwood
This poem has a nice flow and rhythm. I like how in describing the seasons of the year, the reader is drawn to consider parallels with the seasons of one's life. Because I noticed the patterns of life cycles that you put in the first three stanzas (hatching, flying, growing older), I was expecting the same in the winter one, so it felt strange that it wasn't there. But there's nothing wrong with the poem, and it is well done!
reply by the author on 03-Jan-2019
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This poem has a nice flow and rhythm. I like how in describing the seasons of the year, the reader is drawn to consider parallels with the seasons of one's life. Because I noticed the patterns of life cycles that you put in the first three stanzas (hatching, flying, growing older), I was expecting the same in the winter one, so it felt strange that it wasn't there. But there's nothing wrong with the poem, and it is well done!
Comment Written 03-Jan-2019
reply by the author on 03-Jan-2019
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I probably should have. I just couldn't find a way to fit it in and still find a way to include the other things I had to say. I really do appreciate your review and all the stars!
Comment from Barb Hensongispsaca
Wow love the abba form of writing that I have found to be very difficult for me to do. Love the divisions and the descriptions of each season and then bringing them all together
reply by the author on 03-Jan-2019
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Wow love the abba form of writing that I have found to be very difficult for me to do. Love the divisions and the descriptions of each season and then bringing them all together
Comment Written 03-Jan-2019
reply by the author on 03-Jan-2019
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I thank you so much for the rating. I also greatly appreciate the review! The abba format came about because I couldn't get the second line to say what I wanted it to and rhyme. To date this is the only poem I've written this way.
Comment from Janice Canerdy
This one makes me smile--while tearing up. It is a lovely, touching piece
that takes the reader and nature smoothly through time. I'm in my
sixties--only in my fall, God willing. I hope I have replaced youth
with wisdom, but sometimes I wonder! :-)
reply by the author on 02-Jan-2019
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This one makes me smile--while tearing up. It is a lovely, touching piece
that takes the reader and nature smoothly through time. I'm in my
sixties--only in my fall, God willing. I hope I have replaced youth
with wisdom, but sometimes I wonder! :-)
Comment Written 02-Jan-2019
reply by the author on 02-Jan-2019
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Thank you. I am most grateful for your comments and all the wonderful stars.
Comment from Michele Harber
I love your sustained metaphor of life as four changing seasons, and I respect your conclusion that, while the passing of time takes away our youth, it exchanges it for experience. This is an intelligent and wise poem, that adheres well to the abba rhyme scheme you've chosen, and reads well as a story with a beginning, middle and end.
reply by the author on 02-Jan-2019
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I love your sustained metaphor of life as four changing seasons, and I respect your conclusion that, while the passing of time takes away our youth, it exchanges it for experience. This is an intelligent and wise poem, that adheres well to the abba rhyme scheme you've chosen, and reads well as a story with a beginning, middle and end.
Comment Written 02-Jan-2019
reply by the author on 02-Jan-2019
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Thank you. You're comments and all the stars are much appreciated.
Comment from patcelaw
This is a well written rhyming poem. I wish you luck in the contest. May your new year be blessed to overflowing with joy, peace and love. Patricia
reply by the author on 02-Jan-2019
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This is a well written rhyming poem. I wish you luck in the contest. May your new year be blessed to overflowing with joy, peace and love. Patricia
Comment Written 02-Jan-2019
reply by the author on 02-Jan-2019
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Thank you for all the stars and your most gracious review, along with the well wishes.
