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Viewing comments for Chapter 57 "Scene at a Laundromat"Pons and Ned meet at different locations
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Comment from Thomas Bowling
Pons: So he was Laun --
Ned: LaundroMAT. Right!
Ouch! Bad pun. I haven't heard from Ned and Pons for awhile. It's good to see their still around And as dumb as ever.
reply by the author on 02-Jan-2019
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Pons: So he was Laun --
Ned: LaundroMAT. Right!
Ouch! Bad pun. I haven't heard from Ned and Pons for awhile. It's good to see their still around And as dumb as ever.
Comment Written 02-Jan-2019
reply by the author on 02-Jan-2019
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Ned?s been working on his tan. He lays out every night fo4 hours.
Comment from brenda faye curtis
I very much enjoyed reading this, Bill. It's been a while since you posted a Ned and Pons scene, and I appreciate having a good laugh today. I've worked a lot lately, so now is catch-up time. Hope your holidays were pleasant, and thanks again for the fun scene!
reply by the author on 02-Jan-2019
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I very much enjoyed reading this, Bill. It's been a while since you posted a Ned and Pons scene, and I appreciate having a good laugh today. I've worked a lot lately, so now is catch-up time. Hope your holidays were pleasant, and thanks again for the fun scene!
Comment Written 02-Jan-2019
reply by the author on 02-Jan-2019
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Thank you, Brenda. I hope to find them in several scenes as we go through the year.
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You're welcome, Bill.
Comment from Xia Thornwood
This is a very funny script. Unlike most humorous things, the humor isn't forced, and is, in fact, funny. It made me laugh. I did not notice any mistakes or necessary corrections. Well done.
reply by the author on 02-Jan-2019
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This is a very funny script. Unlike most humorous things, the humor isn't forced, and is, in fact, funny. It made me laugh. I did not notice any mistakes or necessary corrections. Well done.
Comment Written 02-Jan-2019
reply by the author on 02-Jan-2019
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Thank you, Xia, for the excellent review. Pons is always the regular guy who thinks like us, and Ned a bit clueless.
Comment from GregoryCody
Ha! Really well done. I love your choice of accent. The dialogue is not forced, and the conversation has a natural cadence. Not to mention it's Witty! I've Never written a script. I'm writing a book (not the stuff listed here) but never that. I'm impressed and Honestly you taught me a lot here believe it or not. Thank you.
Love this though. Very well deserved my friend.
reply by the author on 31-Dec-2018
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Ha! Really well done. I love your choice of accent. The dialogue is not forced, and the conversation has a natural cadence. Not to mention it's Witty! I've Never written a script. I'm writing a book (not the stuff listed here) but never that. I'm impressed and Honestly you taught me a lot here believe it or not. Thank you.
Love this though. Very well deserved my friend.
Comment Written 31-Dec-2018
reply by the author on 31-Dec-2018
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Thank you so much, GC
Comment from Teresa Alford
Love your creative writing style. I am enjoying your writing. Thanks for fanning me. I am going to fan you back!! I don't want to miss a writing of yours.
reply by the author on 31-Dec-2018
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Love your creative writing style. I am enjoying your writing. Thanks for fanning me. I am going to fan you back!! I don't want to miss a writing of yours.
Comment Written 31-Dec-2018
reply by the author on 31-Dec-2018
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Thanks, Teresa, for the excellent review. Bill
Comment from Earl Corp
These guys, Ned and Pons, are hilarious. A trip to the laundromat is pretty cool. The give and take kind of reminds me of the Mark Twain story A Tramp Abroad.
reply by the author on 30-Dec-2018
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These guys, Ned and Pons, are hilarious. A trip to the laundromat is pretty cool. The give and take kind of reminds me of the Mark Twain story A Tramp Abroad.
Comment Written 30-Dec-2018
reply by the author on 30-Dec-2018
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Thanks, Earl. That?s some rare air to be breathing.
Comment from Dean Kuch
Who new Ned had brudders who wuz workin' with laundro-Matt, Bill?
I wunder do they has good beneficiaries and issurance?
I'm only askin' 'cause I'm kinda' 'tween jobs right now. Workin' at McDonald's is okay as far as the free food goes. But ever time I go to grab something outta the deep fryer with my hand I have to make a trip to the hopssittal. An ambliance all ways has ta come an' git me.
An' it don't matter how good yer gloves is. You is gonna git burnt!
'Dem nurses shore is purdy, tho...heh-heh...
~Dean
reply by the author on 30-Dec-2018
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Who new Ned had brudders who wuz workin' with laundro-Matt, Bill?
I wunder do they has good beneficiaries and issurance?
I'm only askin' 'cause I'm kinda' 'tween jobs right now. Workin' at McDonald's is okay as far as the free food goes. But ever time I go to grab something outta the deep fryer with my hand I have to make a trip to the hopssittal. An ambliance all ways has ta come an' git me.
An' it don't matter how good yer gloves is. You is gonna git burnt!
'Dem nurses shore is purdy, tho...heh-heh...
~Dean
Comment Written 30-Dec-2018
reply by the author on 30-Dec-2018
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Don?t run out of hands, Dean
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Hah, easier sed then done, Bill. I only got...hmmmm...lemme see...won + won=... 3.
Comment from Joy Graham
Hi Bill,
I'm studying up on scripts so I can try to write one or two in 2019. It'll be a new adventure for me.
I'm wondering if script writing calls for a scene setting at the beginning? Like setting the stage? I like that you put in some action descriptions throughout your action.
Sincerely Joy xx
reply by the author on 30-Dec-2018
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Hi Bill,
I'm studying up on scripts so I can try to write one or two in 2019. It'll be a new adventure for me.
I'm wondering if script writing calls for a scene setting at the beginning? Like setting the stage? I like that you put in some action descriptions throughout your action.
Sincerely Joy xx
Comment Written 30-Dec-2018
reply by the author on 30-Dec-2018
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Yes it should. I am a minimalist for these guys. If the story were longer, the setting and scene would be laid out better. Stage movements would be included as well as all characters? movements.
Comment from judiverse
Pons seems to be encouraging Ned in his foolishness in this episode. Ned seems to be seeing every item in the laundromat as a person. Love the Out of Order brother. Lots of fun with the words such as Fritz and the names of the detergents, etc. Great last line. Comedians of the past would have eaten up material like this. Now we have not=so-great comedians. judi
reply by the author on 30-Dec-2018
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Pons seems to be encouraging Ned in his foolishness in this episode. Ned seems to be seeing every item in the laundromat as a person. Love the Out of Order brother. Lots of fun with the words such as Fritz and the names of the detergents, etc. Great last line. Comedians of the past would have eaten up material like this. Now we have not=so-great comedians. judi
Comment Written 30-Dec-2018
reply by the author on 30-Dec-2018
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Thanks,Judi. Pons might be sliding into the Ned zone.
Comment from Y. M. Roger
How fun! :) A needed smile as I'm hiding out with my phone for a break (at my mother-in-law's for the weekend...ugh!). :) ;) You always have such a wonderful way of writing 'plays on words' into funny conversations! :) Thanx for sharing! :) ;) Yvette
reply by the author on 30-Dec-2018
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How fun! :) A needed smile as I'm hiding out with my phone for a break (at my mother-in-law's for the weekend...ugh!). :) ;) You always have such a wonderful way of writing 'plays on words' into funny conversations! :) Thanx for sharing! :) ;) Yvette
Comment Written 30-Dec-2018
reply by the author on 30-Dec-2018
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Thanks, Yvette
