Life Streams
A 5-7-5 poem23 total reviews
Comment from Jaye Bennett
This 5-7-5 poem flows as well as the rivers of which the poet wrote. Yes. Flowing water smooths stones, but it isn't gentle water. It is the strong, swift water that tests our mettle and tumbles the stones wearing them down, but as the poet says they flow incessantly. Nice contender in the 5-7-5 contest. Good job.
reply by the author on 30-Dec-2018
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This 5-7-5 poem flows as well as the rivers of which the poet wrote. Yes. Flowing water smooths stones, but it isn't gentle water. It is the strong, swift water that tests our mettle and tumbles the stones wearing them down, but as the poet says they flow incessantly. Nice contender in the 5-7-5 contest. Good job.
Comment Written 29-Dec-2018
reply by the author on 30-Dec-2018
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Thank you very much.
Comment from Janice Canerdy
Your 5-7-5 and the chosen artwork make a beautiful pair!
The "streams" of faith, acceptance, love, and endurance do indeed
serve to smooth out the rough patches in life--and in us.
reply by the author on 29-Dec-2018
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Your 5-7-5 and the chosen artwork make a beautiful pair!
The "streams" of faith, acceptance, love, and endurance do indeed
serve to smooth out the rough patches in life--and in us.
Comment Written 29-Dec-2018
reply by the author on 29-Dec-2018
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Thanks very much, Janice. I enjoyed reading your comments and opinions.
Melissa
Comment from Mistydawn
What a well-written poem, kind of mystical in a way. Your metaphor golden river and pebbles could mean so many different things. My first thought was the people in our life, how each one effects us in some way. The second though was life itself with all of it's ups and downs. The poem is a very interesting, thought- provking little piece. Great job as always.
reply by the author on 29-Dec-2018
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What a well-written poem, kind of mystical in a way. Your metaphor golden river and pebbles could mean so many different things. My first thought was the people in our life, how each one effects us in some way. The second though was life itself with all of it's ups and downs. The poem is a very interesting, thought- provking little piece. Great job as always.
Comment Written 29-Dec-2018
reply by the author on 29-Dec-2018
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Thanks for the great review... I meant to be a little vague and allow the reader to interject their own perceptions. I am very glad you did.
Melissa
Comment from lyenochka
So simple and yet it could mean so much. The "golden rivers" could be the flow of time, or events that are either refreshing or difficult and as they pass, the smoothen our rough spots, which could be negative things or even rough parts of our own personalities. Well done in creating a thought-provoking little poem, Melissa!
reply by the author on 29-Dec-2018
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So simple and yet it could mean so much. The "golden rivers" could be the flow of time, or events that are either refreshing or difficult and as they pass, the smoothen our rough spots, which could be negative things or even rough parts of our own personalities. Well done in creating a thought-provoking little poem, Melissa!
Comment Written 29-Dec-2018
reply by the author on 29-Dec-2018
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Thank you, Helen, I left the interpretation up to the reader so it might mean anything that flows through life to smooth our rough edges. I appreciate your comments.
Melissa
Comment from Joan E.
I admired your "rivers/pebbles" metaphor and the matching photograph. Your 5-7-5 is quite philosophical and hopeful at the same time. Big cheers- Joan
reply by the author on 29-Dec-2018
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I admired your "rivers/pebbles" metaphor and the matching photograph. Your 5-7-5 is quite philosophical and hopeful at the same time. Big cheers- Joan
Comment Written 28-Dec-2018
reply by the author on 29-Dec-2018
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Thanks for your review, Joan, and I wish you a wonderful 2019.
Melissa
Comment from BeasPeas
Nicely composed. I think as we age our "pebbles" are smoothed over, just by living. The analogy of stones in a stream is a good one. Good luck in the contest. Marilyn
reply by the author on 29-Dec-2018
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Nicely composed. I think as we age our "pebbles" are smoothed over, just by living. The analogy of stones in a stream is a good one. Good luck in the contest. Marilyn
Comment Written 28-Dec-2018
reply by the author on 29-Dec-2018
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Thank you, Marilyn.. My original thought is that maturity is what flows through our lives and smooths our rough edges, but there could be other things too... hence the golden rivers... I appreciate your thoughts.
Melissa
Comment from jmshumate
This poem is a good 5/7/5 I had to think about this one. Are golden rivers like the lessons in life that God uses to mold and shape us into the people He knows we can be "smoothing rough pebbles"? Thank you for sharing this.
reply by the author on 28-Dec-2018
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This poem is a good 5/7/5 I had to think about this one. Are golden rivers like the lessons in life that God uses to mold and shape us into the people He knows we can be "smoothing rough pebbles"? Thank you for sharing this.
Comment Written 28-Dec-2018
reply by the author on 28-Dec-2018
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Hello, JM... I originally had the thought of maturity flowing and smoothing the rough pebbles, but there are so many factors that flow through our lives that I decided to be a bit ambiguous and let everyone draw their own conclusions. Thanks for the great review.
Melissa
Comment from Irish Rain
Yes!!
I look at each day as a 'golden ribbon.'
Another chance to get it right, done, whatever.
A day to soften the yesterdays.
Love this!!
Blessings...
reply by the author on 28-Dec-2018
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Yes!!
I look at each day as a 'golden ribbon.'
Another chance to get it right, done, whatever.
A day to soften the yesterdays.
Love this!!
Blessings...
Comment Written 28-Dec-2018
reply by the author on 28-Dec-2018
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Thanks so much for the lovely review. I am grateful for your comments and time.
Melissa
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You're most welcome!
Comment from donette1914
very nice of golden rivers
love the way your words draw ones in
it becomes alive and really touches one's heart
very well penned
it was a pleasure
donette1914 12/28 /2018
reply by the author on 28-Dec-2018
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very nice of golden rivers
love the way your words draw ones in
it becomes alive and really touches one's heart
very well penned
it was a pleasure
donette1914 12/28 /2018
Comment Written 28-Dec-2018
reply by the author on 28-Dec-2018
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Thank you, Donette, for the great review.
Melissa
Comment from CD Richards
I think this is a very strong entry for the 5-7-5 contest, Melissa. Your poem, like the rivers it describes, flows gracefully and easily. Well done, and best of luck with it. Cheers, Craig
reply by the author on 28-Dec-2018
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I think this is a very strong entry for the 5-7-5 contest, Melissa. Your poem, like the rivers it describes, flows gracefully and easily. Well done, and best of luck with it. Cheers, Craig
Comment Written 28-Dec-2018
reply by the author on 28-Dec-2018
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Thanks so much, Craig!!! I appreciate your great review.
Melissa
