A Christmas drowning
A rondel9 total reviews
Comment from Miss Sherry
What a very sad happening. Life is not very fair sometimes. There were some rough spots in your form that could be smoothed to improve your poem. But you write with compassion and caring. I hope the next poem you write is on a much less painful subject.
reply by the author on 25-Dec-2018
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What a very sad happening. Life is not very fair sometimes. There were some rough spots in your form that could be smoothed to improve your poem. But you write with compassion and caring. I hope the next poem you write is on a much less painful subject.
Comment Written 25-Dec-2018
reply by the author on 25-Dec-2018
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Thank you OldPoet for your review Do you have any suggestions as to how I can smooth this out?
Comment from Janice Canerdy
This piece is SO well-written and heart-wrenching! Loss
of a loved one is always grievous, but such loss at Christmas . . .!
Disaster is no respecter of Christmastime!
reply by the author on 25-Dec-2018
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This piece is SO well-written and heart-wrenching! Loss
of a loved one is always grievous, but such loss at Christmas . . .!
Disaster is no respecter of Christmastime!
Comment Written 25-Dec-2018
reply by the author on 25-Dec-2018
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Hi Janice, Thank you for your review much appreciated This story touched my heart
Comment from Jaye Bennett
The poet has given us a sympathetic overview of a sad happening in a well-constructed Rondel. The picture is appropriate, but gruesome. The words tell the whole sad story. No suggestions. Good job.
reply by the author on 25-Dec-2018
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The poet has given us a sympathetic overview of a sad happening in a well-constructed Rondel. The picture is appropriate, but gruesome. The words tell the whole sad story. No suggestions. Good job.
Comment Written 25-Dec-2018
reply by the author on 25-Dec-2018
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Hi Jayne, Many Thanks for reading my poem A tragic story
Comment from Jraokmepala
What a terrible occurrence! Thank you for honoring them with your poetry, and you did a good job of it too. Great poem!
-Jr
reply by the author on 25-Dec-2018
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What a terrible occurrence! Thank you for honoring them with your poetry, and you did a good job of it too. Great poem!
-Jr
Comment Written 25-Dec-2018
reply by the author on 25-Dec-2018
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Hi Jr, Thank you for your
review amd ues a sad story I felt compelled to write this
Comment from Y. M. Roger
Wow, an unusual implementation if the rondel, but you have certainly designed a rhythm and for the rhyme scheme, but it certainly serves to emphasize the heartbreak of the situation! ;) Great job! :) Thank you for sharing and good luck in the contest! ;)
reply by the author on 25-Dec-2018
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Wow, an unusual implementation if the rondel, but you have certainly designed a rhythm and for the rhyme scheme, but it certainly serves to emphasize the heartbreak of the situation! ;) Great job! :) Thank you for sharing and good luck in the contest! ;)
Comment Written 25-Dec-2018
reply by the author on 25-Dec-2018
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Hi Y.M Roger, Thank you for yoir review and when I heard of this on the news I thought I would write this in this format
Comment from Sandra du Plessis
A very well-written Rondel. It is better to stay away from the ocean when the sea seems rougher than the normal currents. Rather have fun with the family at another location.
reply by the author on 25-Dec-2018
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A very well-written Rondel. It is better to stay away from the ocean when the sea seems rougher than the normal currents. Rather have fun with the family at another location.
Comment Written 25-Dec-2018
reply by the author on 25-Dec-2018
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Hi Sandra, Thanks for reading my entry for this contest and yes the ocean can be treacerous
Comment from kiwijenny
Christmas will always be scarred by this tragedy for her.
Poor woman and now her life must change forever. But beciase of a Savior's love there is the hope of heaven
God bless you for your poem. I wish you could send it to her
Merry Christmas
reply by the author on 25-Dec-2018
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Christmas will always be scarred by this tragedy for her.
Poor woman and now her life must change forever. But beciase of a Savior's love there is the hope of heaven
God bless you for your poem. I wish you could send it to her
Merry Christmas
Comment Written 25-Dec-2018
reply by the author on 25-Dec-2018
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Hi Kiwijenny Thank you for your review and i can not begin to know what she must have felt watching them drown in the rough sea. Poor woman
Comment from Alcreator Litt Dear
This speaks a tribute to father and his son died drowning in the sea on the eve of Christmas, a shocking news appeared on television; well said, well done. Keep Writing, Keep Inspiring -- DR ALCREATOR Merry Christmas! Happy New Year!
reply by the author on 25-Dec-2018
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This speaks a tribute to father and his son died drowning in the sea on the eve of Christmas, a shocking news appeared on television; well said, well done. Keep Writing, Keep Inspiring -- DR ALCREATOR Merry Christmas! Happy New Year!
Comment Written 25-Dec-2018
reply by the author on 25-Dec-2018
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Hi Dr Alcreator Thank you for ypur review and yes it was a very sad news item to hear after ai had such a lovely day here woth my family Cheers
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
This is a very sad poem and tragedies always seem more profound at Christmas and this is terrible news, I hope your Christmas is joyful, a poignant write, love Dolly x
reply by the author on 25-Dec-2018
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This is a very sad poem and tragedies always seem more profound at Christmas and this is terrible news, I hope your Christmas is joyful, a poignant write, love Dolly x
Comment Written 25-Dec-2018
reply by the author on 25-Dec-2018
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Hi Dolly, Thank you for reading my Rondel Yes a very sad day for this family after I had such a lovely day with my family This made me quite sad to jear of this tragedy yesterday So one must make the best of every
minute Cheers
