~ My Private Garden ~
5 Line Poem (2,2,5,7,5)14 total reviews
Comment from rama devi
Simply lovely. Voiced with simplicity and sincerity, lending it even more potency to make reader sigh or smile. Lovely presentaiton too. Fine flow. Fine form. Fine alliteraiton of L and M. My only suggestion (optional) is to consider a dash instead of ellipses (but either is fine).
Good luck!
Warmly, rd
reply by the author on 19-Dec-2018
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Simply lovely. Voiced with simplicity and sincerity, lending it even more potency to make reader sigh or smile. Lovely presentaiton too. Fine flow. Fine form. Fine alliteraiton of L and M. My only suggestion (optional) is to consider a dash instead of ellipses (but either is fine).
Good luck!
Warmly, rd
Comment Written 17-Dec-2018
reply by the author on 19-Dec-2018
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Thank you RD for your review and suggestion. Your comments are always welcomed. ~DD
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Comment from Pantygynt
Now that (what is shown in your picture) is what I call a riot of colour. Aptly entitled from within your five liner as memory's garden. It is quite magnificcent .
reply by the author on 19-Dec-2018
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Now that (what is shown in your picture) is what I call a riot of colour. Aptly entitled from within your five liner as memory's garden. It is quite magnificcent .
Comment Written 17-Dec-2018
reply by the author on 19-Dec-2018
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Thank you Pantygynt. As always, your comments are very much appreciated. ~DD
Comment from Mark D. R.
The illustration is truly outstanding.
Coincidentally, 'Memory Gardens' is a cemetery near my home. So, for those visitors to their loved ones, this poem may have another meaning for them.
Mark
BTW ... I do like flowery text and it is most appropriate to your verse. However, their may be more than a few FanStorians who have difficulty in seeing/reading your current font and they may be turned off by this font choice. Consider changing your font style to attract more readers to your verses.
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reply by the author on 20-Dec-2018
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The illustration is truly outstanding.
Coincidentally, 'Memory Gardens' is a cemetery near my home. So, for those visitors to their loved ones, this poem may have another meaning for them.
Mark
BTW ... I do like flowery text and it is most appropriate to your verse. However, their may be more than a few FanStorians who have difficulty in seeing/reading your current font and they may be turned off by this font choice. Consider changing your font style to attract more readers to your verses.
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Comment Written 17-Dec-2018
reply by the author on 20-Dec-2018
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Thank you Mark for your thoughtful review. I apologize for the late response but do appreciate your comments. ~DD
Comment from F. Wehr3
I enjoyed the metaphor of memories being lush flowers in your own private garden. It made me smile as well. Best of luck in the contest!
Take care,
Russell
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reply by the author on 20-Dec-2018
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I enjoyed the metaphor of memories being lush flowers in your own private garden. It made me smile as well. Best of luck in the contest!
Take care,
Russell
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Comment Written 17-Dec-2018
reply by the author on 20-Dec-2018
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Hi Russell, I do apologize for the delayed response to your comments on my 5 line poem. Thank you very much for taking the time to review. It is very much appreciated. ~DD
