Oh, them elves
a penance poem10 total reviews
Comment from Pearl Edwards
Love your Hail Mary's Red, you had me chuckling right from the start. Great interpretation of Santa's toy shop elves and their revenge.
still smiling,
cheers,
valda
reply by the author on 22-Dec-2018
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Love your Hail Mary's Red, you had me chuckling right from the start. Great interpretation of Santa's toy shop elves and their revenge.
still smiling,
cheers,
valda
Comment Written 22-Dec-2018
reply by the author on 22-Dec-2018
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Thanks very much for reading and reviewing my suspicions about elves. Maybe we should fear the day some elfin Moses tells Santa to "Let my People go!" I bought the first two versions of Nintendo and loved them...
Comment from Phyllis Stewart
Good one! Makes sense too. Somebody has to make all those techie toys. It's not like you could just buy one in a store. Only elves know how to make them, which is why they cost more. But that will soon change with Trump's new USETA (US and Elf Trade Agreement).
reply by the author on 17-Dec-2018
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Good one! Makes sense too. Somebody has to make all those techie toys. It's not like you could just buy one in a store. Only elves know how to make them, which is why they cost more. But that will soon change with Trump's new USETA (US and Elf Trade Agreement).
Comment Written 17-Dec-2018
reply by the author on 17-Dec-2018
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No rainbow to slide down...how about an elfin Trail Of Tears to the polar ice pack? I haven't had video games since the Nintendo version with the big ape,,,Donkey Kong and Diddy...hey, I loved 'em. Thanks for the idea and for reading and reviewing.
Comment from country ranch writer
Well, that is one way to get even with those pesky elves always getting into trouble making them work for their time served for Santa.
reply by the author on 17-Dec-2018
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Well, that is one way to get even with those pesky elves always getting into trouble making them work for their time served for Santa.
Comment Written 16-Dec-2018
reply by the author on 17-Dec-2018
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I was thinking about writing Polar Exodus about Moses the elf who slaughtered Claus and led his people to freedom. Nah, that plot has been used before. Thanks very much for reading and reviewing.
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smiles
Comment from damommy
Hahaha! So that's how those things came about??? Good rhyme and meter with alliteration and internal rhyme throughout. A pleasure to read. I think you've done your penance very well. 8-)
reply by the author on 16-Dec-2018
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Hahaha! So that's how those things came about??? Good rhyme and meter with alliteration and internal rhyme throughout. A pleasure to read. I think you've done your penance very well. 8-)
Comment Written 16-Dec-2018
reply by the author on 16-Dec-2018
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I think my penance may have been more grievous than the first sin, but it's all dark humor...Santa the whip-cracking overseer of a slave labor camp on the polar ice pack...nah, I doubt it...thanks for reading and reviewing.
Comment from RodG
You are having a delightful time here, both describing those "mean wee things" called elves and lampooning X boxes, the menace of this generation. Flawless rhythm and well-chosen rhymes. All ages will enjoy this poem. Rod
reply by the author on 16-Dec-2018
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You are having a delightful time here, both describing those "mean wee things" called elves and lampooning X boxes, the menace of this generation. Flawless rhythm and well-chosen rhymes. All ages will enjoy this poem. Rod
Comment Written 16-Dec-2018
reply by the author on 16-Dec-2018
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Elves and fairies and leprechauns all have a dark side in legend...smartphones and videogames and boom boxes are all melting together into AI, which Hawking and others thought most sinister...thanks very much for reading and reviewing.
Comment from Sandra du Plessis
A very well-written penance poem about the hard work the elves have to do to get everyone's presents right on time they have to work long hours until they find x-box will keep everyone happy for a long time.
reply by the author on 16-Dec-2018
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A very well-written penance poem about the hard work the elves have to do to get everyone's presents right on time they have to work long hours until they find x-box will keep everyone happy for a long time.
Comment Written 16-Dec-2018
reply by the author on 16-Dec-2018
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So the Little People toil in bondage sore in Santa's slave labor camp on the polar ice pack. Isn't that much more cheerful than a child dying of neglect in a crack house? Enough! I am working on something jolly for my next post...thanks very much for reading this poem...
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
I loved this little write! So clever and you hit the spot! Your presentation has no frills, but your words speak for themselves, cleverly rhymed with great sentiments! My first six of the week, Love Dolly x
reply by the author on 16-Dec-2018
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I loved this little write! So clever and you hit the spot! Your presentation has no frills, but your words speak for themselves, cleverly rhymed with great sentiments! My first six of the week, Love Dolly x
Comment Written 16-Dec-2018
reply by the author on 16-Dec-2018
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So the Little People toil in bondage sore in Santa's slave labor camp on the polar ice pack. Isn't that much more cheerful than a child dying of neglect in a crack house? Enough! I am working on something jolly for my next post. Thanks very much for reading and reviewing my unwarranted attack on the X-boxes...I enjoy video games...and the exceptional rating is a boon to my vanity! Thanks again!
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Don?t worry I don?t have an X-box! He he he he x
Comment from Jannypan (Jan)
Haha, what a fun poem, Red. I enjoyed reading it. The rhymes are good, the flow is great, and the storyline is clever. Your words are descriptive, too. I could envision the scene as I read this. Thanks for sharing. Jan
reply by the author on 16-Dec-2018
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Haha, what a fun poem, Red. I enjoyed reading it. The rhymes are good, the flow is great, and the storyline is clever. Your words are descriptive, too. I could envision the scene as I read this. Thanks for sharing. Jan
Comment Written 15-Dec-2018
reply by the author on 16-Dec-2018
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So the Little People toil in bondage sore in Santa's slave labor camp on the polar ice pack. Isn't that much more cheerful than a child dying of neglect in a crack house? Enough! I am working on something jolly for my next post. Maybe an elfin Moses crossing the arctic circle, leading his caravan into Canada? Thanks for reading my comic poems...
Comment from robyn corum
Red,
Clever... cleeevvver.
No surprise there, though. At some point, it would probably be quite intriguing to tiptoe through your entire portfolio and see what wonders can be found within. Ha!!
But that's another day...
Enjoyed!
reply by the author on 16-Dec-2018
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Red,
Clever... cleeevvver.
No surprise there, though. At some point, it would probably be quite intriguing to tiptoe through your entire portfolio and see what wonders can be found within. Ha!!
But that's another day...
Enjoyed!
Comment Written 15-Dec-2018
reply by the author on 16-Dec-2018
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So the Little People toil in bondage sore in Santa's slave labor camp on the polar ice pack. Isn't that much more cheerful than a child dying of neglect in a crack house? Enough! I am working on something jolly for my next post. I never look back at my past efforts, I pretend that every day I am better and better. Again, ha! Thanks very much for reading my poem, penned in jest, I assure you...
Comment from Sugarray77
Too funny! You are on a roll for bad holiday poems. ....2 for 2. Lol. Thanks for showing a great spirit of fun and maybe you all will keep the challenges going.
Regards
reply by the author on 16-Dec-2018
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Too funny! You are on a roll for bad holiday poems. ....2 for 2. Lol. Thanks for showing a great spirit of fun and maybe you all will keep the challenges going.
Regards
Comment Written 15-Dec-2018
reply by the author on 16-Dec-2018
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So the Little People toil in bondage sore in Santa's slave labor camp on the polar ice pack. Isn't that much more cheerful than a child dying of neglect in a crack house? Enough! I am working on something jolly for my next post. Although both my sour ones were meant for dark humor...thanks very much for reading and reviewing.
