Oblivion Calling
Rock Ballad [Lyrics About Addiction Contest Entry]25 total reviews
Comment from Pamusart
Hi Yvette. This is a great entry for the contest. A solid sixer for me. I am so sorry for your loss. Do you have a photo array of memories of good times with her? Do you collage? Or just photo album. I hope you can concentrate on those this holiday season. You had me in tears. I have been in the pain your daughter had several times. I do think of those who would be left behind and the pain it would cause them. I do wish you all of the best. Good luck in the contest. Thank you for sharing
reply by the author on 15-Dec-2018
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Hi Yvette. This is a great entry for the contest. A solid sixer for me. I am so sorry for your loss. Do you have a photo array of memories of good times with her? Do you collage? Or just photo album. I hope you can concentrate on those this holiday season. You had me in tears. I have been in the pain your daughter had several times. I do think of those who would be left behind and the pain it would cause them. I do wish you all of the best. Good luck in the contest. Thank you for sharing
Comment Written 15-Dec-2018
reply by the author on 15-Dec-2018
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Oh, Pam -- I'm so glad you seemed to enjoy the lyrics, but please know...they are just that: lyrics. All of those words and stuff that follow the write (where the author notes usually go)...that's ALL part of what the sponsor of the competition put in the 'directions/instructions' for the contest! You are the third person to say something regarding the content of those words so I went back in and put my VERY small TRUE author notes in ALL CAPS. Of course, they are still at the bottom following all those 'directions/instructions', but at least I hope they catch the reviewers' eyes now....although the reviewer still has to scroll quite a bit to get there...sigh.
I hope you enjoyed my actual lyrics, although they are certainly not in the same vein as the 'directions/instructions' part, but I am truly glad that you stopped in just the same! :) ;) :) Thank you again for your wonderful heart -- I am so very blessed to be among so many people with the ability to be empathetic to so many different 'human conditions' ..... may you have a wonderful remainder of the weekend!! :) ;) Yvette :)
Comment from Sandra du Plessis
Very well-written song lyrics. When we have an addiction to anything we became its slave no matter what the addiction may be that is the only thing that really matters to you.
reply by the author on 15-Dec-2018
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Very well-written song lyrics. When we have an addiction to anything we became its slave no matter what the addiction may be that is the only thing that really matters to you.
Comment Written 14-Dec-2018
reply by the author on 15-Dec-2018
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Thanx for stopping by, Sandra, and I'm glad the lyrics worked for you -- I absolutely love the lyric competitions...they get to that little part of me from 'waaaay back when' when I actually wanted to be a songwriter! :) ;) Take care and have a wonderful evening! :) :) Yvette ?
Comment from aryr
Good luck in the Lyrics about addiction. You definitely depicted the anguish, the sorrow, the dependency of addiction. An interesting rhyme pattern was created. Very well done Yvette.
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Good luck in the Lyrics about addiction. You definitely depicted the anguish, the sorrow, the dependency of addiction. An interesting rhyme pattern was created. Very well done Yvette.
Comment Written 14-Dec-2018
reply by the author on 15-Dec-2018
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Thanx so very much for stopping by, aryr! :) ;) Again, I so very much appreciate you stopping in on the poetry 'stuff' -- you are awesome! ;) ;) You know, I absolutely love the lyric competitions...they get to that little part of me from 'waaaay back when' when I actually wanted to be a songwriter! :) ;) Take care and have a wonderful evening! :) :) Yvette ?
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You are so welcome Yvette, mmm a songwriter, you might just make it.
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LOL! Yeah, that ship has sailed, but it's fun to imagine with these little contests now and then....the music's always there in my head! :) :) I'm hoping that's a good thing....LOL! :) Take care! :) Yvette
Comment from poetwatch
Oblivion's hold... where there is no control, when that sweet lady sings all hell she will bring. Shall we sing a duet and rock the house? It'll get rid of all that dread as I lie on my bed. This is a good entry for the Lyrics about addiction writing prompt. Thank you Yvette for sharing your song, must be mystical cause we ain't alone. :)
reply by the author on 15-Dec-2018
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Oblivion's hold... where there is no control, when that sweet lady sings all hell she will bring. Shall we sing a duet and rock the house? It'll get rid of all that dread as I lie on my bed. This is a good entry for the Lyrics about addiction writing prompt. Thank you Yvette for sharing your song, must be mystical cause we ain't alone. :)
Comment Written 14-Dec-2018
reply by the author on 15-Dec-2018
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Hell, yeah, Jose! Bring on the band! :) :) :) So glad the lyrics worked for you -- I absolutely love the lyric competitions...they get to that little part of me from 'waaaay back when' when I actually wanted to be a songwriter! :) ;) Take care and have a wonderful evening! :) :) Yvette ?
Comment from Jesse James Doty
I love the lyrics to Oblivion Calling. I love the artwork you chose for this piece. I am very taken with the lyrics, and how, they express how an addict feels. The movement is there. The repetitive chorus, with the third line different in each one, is very effective. The ending of each chorus is excellent and drives the message home. I am a little confused by the Author's notes. It appears to be another poem about addiction, and it, too, is very good. My favorite is the first one which I believe is the one we are judging. I love it. It digs deep into the psyche of what drives the addict to the chosen drug. I think you should have a band do this one. It deserves to be heard by the public. Well written and gritty and deep. This is very thought-provoking and profound. Thanks for sharing your talent.
Take care, Jesse
reply by the author on 14-Dec-2018
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I love the lyrics to Oblivion Calling. I love the artwork you chose for this piece. I am very taken with the lyrics, and how, they express how an addict feels. The movement is there. The repetitive chorus, with the third line different in each one, is very effective. The ending of each chorus is excellent and drives the message home. I am a little confused by the Author's notes. It appears to be another poem about addiction, and it, too, is very good. My favorite is the first one which I believe is the one we are judging. I love it. It digs deep into the psyche of what drives the addict to the chosen drug. I think you should have a band do this one. It deserves to be heard by the public. Well written and gritty and deep. This is very thought-provoking and profound. Thanks for sharing your talent.
Take care, Jesse
Comment Written 14-Dec-2018
reply by the author on 14-Dec-2018
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My author notes, Jesse are simply the credits for my image waaaaay down at the bottom below the contest stuff.....in fact, the only thing the contest definition is is the words that you see there...no instruction, no nothing. I just went with a complete song because of the NAME of the contest...I'm hoping it's what they were looking for....click on the contest name and you'll see what I'm talking about...it's all those words and nothing else! :) :) :) Anyway....I'm glad you liked it, sir -- I absolutely love the lyric competitions...they get to that little part of me from 'waaaay back when' when I actually wanted to be a songwriter! :) ;) Take care and have a wonderful evening! :) :) Yvette -
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Hi Yvette
I'm not sure what to say, except that, I think you'd make a great songwriter! Don't give up the dream! Anyway, you have a great and fantabulous evening!
Jesse
Comment from lyenochka
You have done a really artistic job in creating the effects of addiction and the strong pull to whatever the substance is (Oblivion is a good name for it!) Wish you well in the contest!
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You have done a really artistic job in creating the effects of addiction and the strong pull to whatever the substance is (Oblivion is a good name for it!) Wish you well in the contest!
Comment Written 14-Dec-2018
reply by the author on 15-Dec-2018
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Thanx for stopping by, Helen! :) ;) You know, I absolutely love the lyric competitions...they get to that little part of me from 'waaaay back when' when I actually wanted to be a songwriter! :) ;) Take care and have a wonderful evening! :) :) Yvette ?
Comment from country ranch writer
People on drugs or alcohol do not see the Jekyll side of themselves or realize that they are hurting those they love. It is very hard to let go.
reply by the author on 15-Dec-2018
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People on drugs or alcohol do not see the Jekyll side of themselves or realize that they are hurting those they love. It is very hard to let go.
Comment Written 14-Dec-2018
reply by the author on 15-Dec-2018
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Thanx for stopping by, Country Ranch -- I absolutely love the lyric competitions...they get to that little part of me from 'waaaay back when' when I actually wanted to be a songwriter! :) ;) Take care and have a wonderful weekend! :) :) Yvette ?
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Comment from Mustang Patty
Hi, Yvette,
Your work makes us think hard about those who are caught up in addiction. I never know whether to blame the addict or the drug - but it is just one big question like, which came first - the chicken or the egg?
My son suffers from an addiction to meth, and I worry every day. Always afraid of the phone call...
~Mustang Patty~
reply by the author on 15-Dec-2018
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Hi, Yvette,
Your work makes us think hard about those who are caught up in addiction. I never know whether to blame the addict or the drug - but it is just one big question like, which came first - the chicken or the egg?
My son suffers from an addiction to meth, and I worry every day. Always afraid of the phone call...
~Mustang Patty~
Comment Written 14-Dec-2018
reply by the author on 15-Dec-2018
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You're so right about the blame game, Patty -- used to play it with my brother....he's still around (mostly), but I settled the 'blame' thing within me so we'll just leave it there. :) ;) ;) I am so sorry to hear about your son...there are no words I can offer here. I do want to thank you for stopping in, though -- I absolutely love the lyric competitions...they get to that little part of me from 'waaaay back when' when I actually wanted to be a songwriter! :) ;) Take care and have a wonderful weekend! :) :) Yvette -
Comment from Dean Kuch
Wow!
This is a bit of a different kind of post for you, Yvette.
You're always so bright and bubbly--so upbeat.
But how would it look to pen lyrics on addiction and portray them in a positive vein (no pun intended)?
This is hard-hitting--like a sucker punch to the solar plexus.
Exceptionally well done.
Here's my last six of the week...
Oblivion...
~Dean
reply by the author on 15-Dec-2018
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Wow!
This is a bit of a different kind of post for you, Yvette.
You're always so bright and bubbly--so upbeat.
But how would it look to pen lyrics on addiction and portray them in a positive vein (no pun intended)?
This is hard-hitting--like a sucker punch to the solar plexus.
Exceptionally well done.
Here's my last six of the week...
Oblivion...
~Dean
Comment Written 14-Dec-2018
reply by the author on 15-Dec-2018
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Sorry for the delay --exam week here so, my apologies. :) ;) I'm really glad you liked this one, Dean -- I absolutely love the lyric competitions...they get to that little part of me from 'waaaay back when' when I actually wanted to be a songwriter (before reality and 'folks' said that Physics was my ticket not writing)! :) ;) And, yeah, I guess I do tend to lean toward the bright...hope I don't come across as the bubble-head blonde (lol!) although I guess there's always that chance (c'est la vie)...but there's just something about classic rock music running through my head when I pen something that allows me to be 'anything'. Anyways, I promise not to get all nostalgic and sh#@. So, is that a challenge to pen lyrics on addiction in a positive sense....or, perhaps, I read that wrong....? :) :) ;)
Your stars mean a lot on this end, Dean, and I am very honored that you chose to award them. :) :) Thank you and have a wonderful weekend! :) :)
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Nope, not a challenge, just an observation, Yvette.
Again...good job,
~Dean
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My apologies, Dean...did not mean to misinterpret. Yvette
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No apologies necessary.
Comment from meeshu
well, it is good to see that you figured out the rules for this contest. this is really a great song. I like verse two and the chorus in particular. you made a strong statement without being obvious, I venture the other entries will not be as clever or subtle. awesome, Yvette..................meeshu
reply by the author on 14-Dec-2018
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well, it is good to see that you figured out the rules for this contest. this is really a great song. I like verse two and the chorus in particular. you made a strong statement without being obvious, I venture the other entries will not be as clever or subtle. awesome, Yvette..................meeshu
Comment Written 14-Dec-2018
reply by the author on 14-Dec-2018
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You know, I never actually did figure it out....Michael Cahill (?) answered my inquiry with a statement that he figured she was looking for a song about addiction (don't know how he and the contest person relate, but c'est la vie) ..... then I just looked at the two entries that were already there and that's what they were....:) ;) So, I just gave it go here! :) ) I absolutely love the lyric competitions...they get to that little part of me from 'waaaay back when' when I actually wanted to be a songwriter! :) ;) Take care and have a wonderful evening over there! :) :) Yvette :)
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you are a good songwriter.
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LOL! Yeah, that ship has sailed, but on here I can be a big kid playing 'pretend'! :) ;) Take care out there! :) ;) Yvette
