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Viewing comments for Chapter 51 "Scene on an Empty Street"Pons and Ned meet at different locations
15 total reviews
Comment from nomi338
Hmm... although he never came out and admitted anything, it seems that Pez knew an awful lot about that coin collection. Could it be...? I'm not making any accusations here, but for someone who is supposedly innocent, Pez is starting to look just a bit suspicious to me.
reply by the author on 17-Dec-2018
Hmm... although he never came out and admitted anything, it seems that Pez knew an awful lot about that coin collection. Could it be...? I'm not making any accusations here, but for someone who is supposedly innocent, Pez is starting to look just a bit suspicious to me.
Comment Written 17-Dec-2018
reply by the author on 17-Dec-2018
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Pez knows things.
Comment from BeasPeas
An interesting script of a conversation between two brothers. Well, I guess we know who took Ma's coins then. Pez seems to have all the knowledge of them.
reply by the author on 16-Dec-2018
An interesting script of a conversation between two brothers. Well, I guess we know who took Ma's coins then. Pez seems to have all the knowledge of them.
Comment Written 16-Dec-2018
reply by the author on 16-Dec-2018
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Pez has a lot of hidden stories.
Comment from Shirley E Kennedy
Hi Bill,
You have set the background and individual scene well.
The scene unfolds with clarity and focus and has a very realistic feel about it.
Well done.
Blessings
Shirley
reply by the author on 16-Dec-2018
Hi Bill,
You have set the background and individual scene well.
The scene unfolds with clarity and focus and has a very realistic feel about it.
Well done.
Blessings
Shirley
Comment Written 16-Dec-2018
reply by the author on 16-Dec-2018
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Thanks, Shirley
Comment from nancy_e_davis
Seems there was a little bit of soul searching going on there for Pez. Funny what we remember when we think back. Guess Pallas knows who really took the coins now and Pa wasn't guilty. LOL Good job. Nancy:)
reply by the author on 15-Dec-2018
Seems there was a little bit of soul searching going on there for Pez. Funny what we remember when we think back. Guess Pallas knows who really took the coins now and Pa wasn't guilty. LOL Good job. Nancy:)
Comment Written 15-Dec-2018
reply by the author on 15-Dec-2018
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Thanks, Nancy.
Comment from Y. M. Roger
Yeah, Pez knew right where those coins HAD been... :) ;) :) And they say that kids are not the root of the problem in most cases...ha! :) ;) :) A fun little bro-to-bro interaction demonstrating the differences in the 'homes' in which each matured -- lol! :) ;) Thanx for sharing! :) Yvette ;)
reply by the author on 15-Dec-2018
Yeah, Pez knew right where those coins HAD been... :) ;) :) And they say that kids are not the root of the problem in most cases...ha! :) ;) :) A fun little bro-to-bro interaction demonstrating the differences in the 'homes' in which each matured -- lol! :) ;) Thanx for sharing! :) Yvette ;)
Comment Written 15-Dec-2018
reply by the author on 15-Dec-2018
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Thanks, Yvette, for giving this a look. Bill
Comment from judiverse
Now we know who the thief was. He gives a clue, though, when he mentions taking Yvonne on the rides. It's interesting what things people remember. I don't get a sense of who these two new characters are. Maybe include a little about them. About all we know is that one is the younger brother. judi
reply by the author on 15-Dec-2018
Now we know who the thief was. He gives a clue, though, when he mentions taking Yvonne on the rides. It's interesting what things people remember. I don't get a sense of who these two new characters are. Maybe include a little about them. About all we know is that one is the younger brother. judi
Comment Written 15-Dec-2018
reply by the author on 15-Dec-2018
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This is their second appearance. Sceneat a Funeral is still up.
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
Well we know who took the coins then! He he he, an interesting chat between old friends reminiscing, I've never seen old US coins, only English ones, much enjoyed, love Dolly x
reply by the author on 15-Dec-2018
Well we know who took the coins then! He he he, an interesting chat between old friends reminiscing, I've never seen old US coins, only English ones, much enjoyed, love Dolly x
Comment Written 15-Dec-2018
reply by the author on 15-Dec-2018
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I coll3ct them nowadays.
Comment from Phyllis Stewart
So Pez is the bad brother. That's how he paid for all those rides. Terrible! He'll end up in prison someday.
What happened to Ned and Pons? I like these guys too. Just hope to see N and P again.
reply by the author on 15-Dec-2018
So Pez is the bad brother. That's how he paid for all those rides. Terrible! He'll end up in prison someday.
What happened to Ned and Pons? I like these guys too. Just hope to see N and P again.
Comment Written 15-Dec-2018
reply by the author on 15-Dec-2018
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Thanks, Phyllis. I was airing out some issues with these two. Pez is based on a real person
Comment from Earl Corp
Methinks Pez stole the coins. Hard to believe he admitted to it to his brother. I have to admit I looked up what tarvy meant. Nice foray into script writing.
reply by the author on 15-Dec-2018
Methinks Pez stole the coins. Hard to believe he admitted to it to his brother. I have to admit I looked up what tarvy meant. Nice foray into script writing.
Comment Written 14-Dec-2018
reply by the author on 15-Dec-2018
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I like to drop the plot device at the end without too much warning. I feel that Pez is just subconsciously revealing the location of the coins and still not tying together his parents' near divorce, theft, or other concerns we might have for his soul.
Comment from Pamusart
Hi Bill. Here is the $64,000 question. I assume Pez took the coins. And used them at the carnival. Did you enter something else into the Dialogue only contest? Nice job. Thank you for sharing
reply by the author on 14-Dec-2018
Hi Bill. Here is the $64,000 question. I assume Pez took the coins. And used them at the carnival. Did you enter something else into the Dialogue only contest? Nice job. Thank you for sharing
Comment Written 14-Dec-2018
reply by the author on 14-Dec-2018
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This isn't part of a contest.
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I know it is not a contest entry. It reminded me of that contest. But it is dialog only. Maybe there was not such a contest for script writing. Sorry if I missed something