The Crime Before Christmas
A Dynamic Duo, BOO ghost and Sally Law31 total reviews
Comment from Kathleen Washnis
An enjoyable read of scary proportions! Did your grandson draw the picture? Reminds me of when I was little, I was really good at drawing! My only suggestion is to perhaps capitalize the first letter in each beginning word to keep it more consistent (?). A clever little tale no less!
reply by the author on 16-Dec-2018
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An enjoyable read of scary proportions! Did your grandson draw the picture? Reminds me of when I was little, I was really good at drawing! My only suggestion is to perhaps capitalize the first letter in each beginning word to keep it more consistent (?). A clever little tale no less!
Comment Written 16-Dec-2018
reply by the author on 16-Dec-2018
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Thank you so much for the excellent review! I did the suggested repairs capitalizing at the beginning of each line. I want it consistent and thank you very much for the critique, as well.
All my Christmas best,
Sally
Comment from Lady Jane
Only one suggestion, darken the font, or make it bigger. It was a bit hard on me ole eyes, pardner'. :)
Great entry into the contest, Sally. "Twas the Night Before Murder...haha. Is it sick I read this to that age old poem? Hehe. And reference to, Boo Ghost, the writer on this site? Fun
This was amazing. Great verbiage and presentation. The meter seemed good and the image you chose worked well with the chosen presentation. I am a little envious I didn't see this contest. This one shall surely fare well, dear. Yes, it shall!
reply by the author on 16-Dec-2018
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Only one suggestion, darken the font, or make it bigger. It was a bit hard on me ole eyes, pardner'. :)
Great entry into the contest, Sally. "Twas the Night Before Murder...haha. Is it sick I read this to that age old poem? Hehe. And reference to, Boo Ghost, the writer on this site? Fun
This was amazing. Great verbiage and presentation. The meter seemed good and the image you chose worked well with the chosen presentation. I am a little envious I didn't see this contest. This one shall surely fare well, dear. Yes, it shall!
Comment Written 15-Dec-2018
reply by the author on 16-Dec-2018
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Thank you, dear Janelle. I just changed the background color since I am out of time this week. You were right, a bit too dark. It made a big difference. I did not do this in advanced editor, either. I probably should have. Oh well, I had fun and joined this contest in the last hour with Boo. I am so glad you enjoyed it!
All my Christmas best,
Sal
Comment from Mustang Patty
Hi, Sally,
Such a cute story and well crafted to meet the rhyme and meter of the poem we are all familiar with.
Thank you for sharing and good luck to you in the contest,
~patty~
reply by the author on 15-Dec-2018
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Hi, Sally,
Such a cute story and well crafted to meet the rhyme and meter of the poem we are all familiar with.
Thank you for sharing and good luck to you in the contest,
~patty~
Comment Written 15-Dec-2018
reply by the author on 15-Dec-2018
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Thank you so much, Patty! It is a lark, but tons of fun. I am so glad you enjoyed it!
All my best,
Sal
Comment from Mastery
Well, this is certainly different, Sal. I can't help but wonder if it was Dean who dreamed up this contest. LOL It is not befitting of Christmas but is certainly rhyming good fun.
Bless you and yours, my dear friend and Happy holidays to all. :) Bob.
reply by the author on 15-Dec-2018
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Well, this is certainly different, Sal. I can't help but wonder if it was Dean who dreamed up this contest. LOL It is not befitting of Christmas but is certainly rhyming good fun.
Bless you and yours, my dear friend and Happy holidays to all. :) Bob.
Comment Written 15-Dec-2018
reply by the author on 15-Dec-2018
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Thank you for the excellent review and kind comments. Yes, Dean is the author of this contest. It was done in good fun, really a lark and not very scary at all.
All my best to you at Christmas and always,
Sal
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Same to you, Sal. Bob):
Comment from Dean Kuch
Ah, Sally.
Thanks for joining in the fun and getting involved in this very different type of contest.
This entry has shades of Poe, Dicken's 'A Christmas Carol', and Arthur Conan Doyle's 'The Adventures of Sherlock Holmes'.
Oh, by the way, you DO realize that Boo Ghost and I are two completely different people, right?
I mean, if I were Boo Ghost, that would require me having two separate Fanstory accounts which is a violation of site policy.
The only reason I brought this up at all is because a member sent me a PM and asked me how I was able to have two Fanstory accounts.
I explained to them I didn't and I hadn't the slightest idea what they were talking about.
Odd...
So, you and Boo co-authored this?
Funny, he never mentioned it.
Good luck
~Dean
reply by Dean Kuch on 15-Dec-2018
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Ah, Sally.
Thanks for joining in the fun and getting involved in this very different type of contest.
This entry has shades of Poe, Dicken's 'A Christmas Carol', and Arthur Conan Doyle's 'The Adventures of Sherlock Holmes'.
Oh, by the way, you DO realize that Boo Ghost and I are two completely different people, right?
I mean, if I were Boo Ghost, that would require me having two separate Fanstory accounts which is a violation of site policy.
The only reason I brought this up at all is because a member sent me a PM and asked me how I was able to have two Fanstory accounts.
I explained to them I didn't and I hadn't the slightest idea what they were talking about.
Odd...
So, you and Boo co-authored this?
Funny, he never mentioned it.
Good luck
~Dean
Comment Written 15-Dec-2018
reply by Dean Kuch on 15-Dec-2018
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Dean, thanks for the review. I may have to remove myself from the contest as I am completely and utterly confused. I thought I was to write this and Boo was to give alterations and emblishments of some kind. He has not yet responded to my mail concerning this. I included his name already as prompted by others here at FanStory. Please let me know what to do, otherwise, I will gladly disqualify myself from the contest. I am new to FanStory and this process was not clear to me. I did not mean to upend the contest. I apologize. Thanks so much, Sal
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Just ask Boo if he has a problem with you listing him as your co-author in your author's notes.
If he says it's okay then you're fine.
Good luck, Sally!
~Dean ...
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Thank you, Dean. He said he was fine with it yesterday. I fan mailed him again just to make sure. Thank you for being so kind. Sal
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No worries, Sally.
All my best...
~Dean
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Resolved and he is credited with me at the top of the post. He is a gracious ghost, that Boo. Reminds me of you although not you. Someone close to you, maybe?
Thanks so much,
Sal
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Yeah, Boo and I go wayyyyyyyy back on FanStory.
Gungalo (Pam), adewpearl (Brooke Baldwin), Mikey Cahill and BooGhost (Rickey) were the first friends I had here.
I'm glad everything is resolved, Sally.
Good luck,
~Dean...;}
Comment from Janice Canerdy
This is a GREAT narrative poem--smoothly flowing, well-plotted,
and entertaining, with interesting characters, especially the headless
ghost. I admire your imagination!
reply by the author on 14-Dec-2018
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This is a GREAT narrative poem--smoothly flowing, well-plotted,
and entertaining, with interesting characters, especially the headless
ghost. I admire your imagination!
Comment Written 14-Dec-2018
reply by the author on 14-Dec-2018
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Thank you so much Janice for the wonderful review and comments. I appreciate your kindness so much. I am glad you enjoyed this.
All my best,
Sally
Comment from Kerry Foley Robinson
Hello there, Sally, I enjoyed this take on Twas the night before Christmas, very cute indeed. I am not seeing your co-authors name in the title area though, it should be posted on top where you wrote "a boo Christmas". I gave you 5 stars because I'm sure you'll fix that to give credit to your co-author. Merry Christmas, my friend.
~Kerry
reply by the author on 14-Dec-2018
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Hello there, Sally, I enjoyed this take on Twas the night before Christmas, very cute indeed. I am not seeing your co-authors name in the title area though, it should be posted on top where you wrote "a boo Christmas". I gave you 5 stars because I'm sure you'll fix that to give credit to your co-author. Merry Christmas, my friend.
~Kerry
Comment Written 14-Dec-2018
reply by the author on 14-Dec-2018
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Thank you so much for the excellent review. Thank you for the pointer about Boo?s name, I got it fixed. This is my first tandem project and was not sure of all the ins and outs. This was all Boo?s idea. He likes to challenge me to try new things...stretching me. How could I not help him find his murderer?
All my best,
Sally
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No disrespect, Sally. I actually just finished a text on the phone with Boo, he wasn't aware you posted yet and said he didn't even write any of it. This is a co-authored poem and I would suggest contacting him and pulling this down until you have a co-authored write. He was co-authored with Gloria and claims he just changed to you.
Comment from poetwatch
Did you find his head, Sally? I believe in justice and I do implore did you find the evidence within all that gore? it is a sad Christmas if one cannot enjoy the cookies and milk meant for the chimney sweep, after all the mess. :) Good entry for A Very Scary Christmas.
reply by the author on 14-Dec-2018
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Did you find his head, Sally? I believe in justice and I do implore did you find the evidence within all that gore? it is a sad Christmas if one cannot enjoy the cookies and milk meant for the chimney sweep, after all the mess. :) Good entry for A Very Scary Christmas.
Comment Written 14-Dec-2018
reply by the author on 14-Dec-2018
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Thank you for the kind review of my silliest piece yet. Justice will be served in the days to come. It?s not in my wheelhouse to write horror, so I had to make this a parody. A bit of a lark, but all in good fun. So glad you enjoyed it and wishing Christmas cookies and milk for all, even poor Boo!
All my best,
Sal
Comment from meeshu
This is a pleasure to read. Your writing is smooth and the language is colorful. Very well penned, Sal. I am not real familiar with this mysterious BooGhost..................meeshu
reply by the author on 14-Dec-2018
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This is a pleasure to read. Your writing is smooth and the language is colorful. Very well penned, Sal. I am not real familiar with this mysterious BooGhost..................meeshu
Comment Written 14-Dec-2018
reply by the author on 14-Dec-2018
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Thank you for your kind review of my silliest piece to date. So glad you liked it. BooGhost comes and goes here on FanStory. He is really Dean Kuch. He was supposedly murdered while out chopping wood and was decapatated. Boo is his ghost seeking revenge and his lost head. Catch up with his poetry if you can.
All my best,
Sal
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I Knew It Was Kuch!!
Comment from lyenochka
Well, I was hoping that there would be a parody of the Night Before Christmas this year. I am guessing that you and Boo worked together on this one? Hope the culprit will be caught and best wishes to you both!
reply by the author on 14-Dec-2018
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Well, I was hoping that there would be a parody of the Night Before Christmas this year. I am guessing that you and Boo worked together on this one? Hope the culprit will be caught and best wishes to you both!
Comment Written 14-Dec-2018
reply by the author on 14-Dec-2018
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I am glad you like this! A lark for sure. Boo invited me to do this with him and then disappeared. Oh well. I did not want to miss the deadline and I was not sure how these tandem writing things work. I thought I would give it a try. I had fun and a good laugh is always appreciated. I am not sure if this is scary enough. I am not really a horror writer.
All my best,
Sal
