When Cancer Wins
Six word story11 total reviews
Comment from WryWriter
I'd say you've captured the beast in these six words. But it really doesn't win. Death has been defeated, Great job with this story!
reply by the author on 28-Dec-2018
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I'd say you've captured the beast in these six words. But it really doesn't win. Death has been defeated, Great job with this story!
Comment Written 25-Dec-2018
reply by the author on 28-Dec-2018
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Many thanks
Comment from Bill Schott
This six-word story, When Cancer Wins, meets the challenge's word requirement and presents all the negative aspects of a cancer diagnosis.
reply by the author on 24-Dec-2018
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This six-word story, When Cancer Wins, meets the challenge's word requirement and presents all the negative aspects of a cancer diagnosis.
Comment Written 24-Dec-2018
reply by the author on 24-Dec-2018
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Many thanks
Comment from C. Gale Burnett
This is really, really good! You told a whole story in 6 words.
What I enjoyed most (even though it is a sad story, but that's life, isn't it?) is that how you described the reality of cancer. It is an uphill battle; much of the time, there is a rapid decline, and death follows. What I'm trying to say is, I like the image of up, down, stop.
Great job and a perfect contest entry. I wish you the very best!!!!
reply by the author on 24-Dec-2018
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This is really, really good! You told a whole story in 6 words.
What I enjoyed most (even though it is a sad story, but that's life, isn't it?) is that how you described the reality of cancer. It is an uphill battle; much of the time, there is a rapid decline, and death follows. What I'm trying to say is, I like the image of up, down, stop.
Great job and a perfect contest entry. I wish you the very best!!!!
Comment Written 23-Dec-2018
reply by the author on 24-Dec-2018
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Many thanks and yes unfortunately sad
Comment from Shirley E Kennedy
In just six words the enormity of the impact cancer has on the lives of individual victims is well documented.
Sadly this scenario is all too often the rise and fall of this disease.
Well done.
reply by the author on 24-Dec-2018
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In just six words the enormity of the impact cancer has on the lives of individual victims is well documented.
Sadly this scenario is all too often the rise and fall of this disease.
Well done.
Comment Written 23-Dec-2018
reply by the author on 24-Dec-2018
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Many thanks
Comment from PoemsOfDD
kahpot, six words is all it takes to describe a scene that has no win or way out in the end. A very effective and succinct short piece that really carries home how one cannot control the outcome no matter how hard we try. ~DD
reply by the author on 15-Dec-2018
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kahpot, six words is all it takes to describe a scene that has no win or way out in the end. A very effective and succinct short piece that really carries home how one cannot control the outcome no matter how hard we try. ~DD
Comment Written 15-Dec-2018
reply by the author on 15-Dec-2018
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Thank you and yes unfortunately it does win sometimes****kahpot
Comment from Phyllis Stewart
Good job with a very difficult challenge.
Rapid decent <-- Spelling: descent=going down | decent=polite, moral, tasteful
I had a decent time on my trip.
Our plane went into a rapid descent, but the pilot pulled out of the dive.
reply by the author on 13-Dec-2018
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Good job with a very difficult challenge.
Rapid decent <-- Spelling: descent=going down | decent=polite, moral, tasteful
I had a decent time on my trip.
Our plane went into a rapid descent, but the pilot pulled out of the dive.
Comment Written 13-Dec-2018
reply by the author on 13-Dec-2018
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Many thanks, correction made
Comment from Sally Law
Excellent six-word poetry. You conveyed your message quite well in such a short piece.
My only critique is to post with a picture or art of some kind. This will help for frame your fine work and get a higher score. There are many good selections on fanart; just browse, select and paste when you are posting your article. Make sure your article is in preview mode, that way you can view what is going to look like and also choose a nice color for your formatting, as well. Read other people's posts and look at what they used. Outstanding formatting is given the higher rating and typically a contest winner.
I hope this helps. I want you to do well and be recognized.
All my best,
Sally
reply by the author on 13-Dec-2018
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Excellent six-word poetry. You conveyed your message quite well in such a short piece.
My only critique is to post with a picture or art of some kind. This will help for frame your fine work and get a higher score. There are many good selections on fanart; just browse, select and paste when you are posting your article. Make sure your article is in preview mode, that way you can view what is going to look like and also choose a nice color for your formatting, as well. Read other people's posts and look at what they used. Outstanding formatting is given the higher rating and typically a contest winner.
I hope this helps. I want you to do well and be recognized.
All my best,
Sally
Comment Written 13-Dec-2018
reply by the author on 13-Dec-2018
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Thank you, unfortunately this is a no image contest
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I see said the blind girl!
Comment from rspoet
This is a excellent, though sad, six word story and entry for the contest
It has a beginning middle and end, and good contrast between up and descent
Well done
Good luck in the contest
RS
reply by the author on 13-Dec-2018
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This is a excellent, though sad, six word story and entry for the contest
It has a beginning middle and end, and good contrast between up and descent
Well done
Good luck in the contest
RS
Comment Written 13-Dec-2018
reply by the author on 13-Dec-2018
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Thank you
Comment from Galactia
Hi
Sad story.
I did like the pun with dead end. I have had a friend die from cancer and two people that were like familt die from cancer. Skin cancer, lung cancer and cervical cancer. Its terri le.
Great job
Regards
Tia
reply by the author on 13-Dec-2018
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Hi
Sad story.
I did like the pun with dead end. I have had a friend die from cancer and two people that were like familt die from cancer. Skin cancer, lung cancer and cervical cancer. Its terri le.
Great job
Regards
Tia
Comment Written 13-Dec-2018
reply by the author on 13-Dec-2018
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Thank you. yes that is where this comes from
Comment from Sugarray77
You have written a very vivid and abrupt six words... this is a very good entry for the Six Words contest. You make a great point, even thought it is a sad point, the finality of a terminal illness. Well done.
Melissa
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reply by the author on 13-Dec-2018
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You have written a very vivid and abrupt six words... this is a very good entry for the Six Words contest. You make a great point, even thought it is a sad point, the finality of a terminal illness. Well done.
Melissa
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Comment Written 13-Dec-2018
reply by the author on 13-Dec-2018
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Thank you, much appreciated
