She Lives A Life That Was Changed
How faith can change a life.14 total reviews
Comment from susand3022
Good evening Pat, I really enjoyed the message that your poem conveyed to me. I'm not sure if you meant for it to have a specific meter or not but I expect that you did because it has a specific form and rhyming scheme.
When reading your poem I lost the flow. Your meter kept changing throughout until the last line was literally twice the length of the first. This is a fairly easy fix.
Your poem has a lovely sentiment and a beautiful story to tell. It is a gentle but true reminder of the things people should not do to others!
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reply by the author on 24-Dec-2018
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Good evening Pat, I really enjoyed the message that your poem conveyed to me. I'm not sure if you meant for it to have a specific meter or not but I expect that you did because it has a specific form and rhyming scheme.
When reading your poem I lost the flow. Your meter kept changing throughout until the last line was literally twice the length of the first. This is a fairly easy fix.
Your poem has a lovely sentiment and a beautiful story to tell. It is a gentle but true reminder of the things people should not do to others!
This rating does not count towards story rating or author rank.
The highest and the lowest rating are not included in calculations.
Comment Written 14-Dec-2018
reply by the author on 24-Dec-2018
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Thank you for the review.
Comment from BeasPeas
Hi Patricia. Your computer artwork is striking and the entire presentation of your well written poem is excellent. Well described flaws in the first two stanzas and change comes in stanza three. Nicely done. Marilyn
reply by the author on 13-Dec-2018
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Hi Patricia. Your computer artwork is striking and the entire presentation of your well written poem is excellent. Well described flaws in the first two stanzas and change comes in stanza three. Nicely done. Marilyn
Comment Written 12-Dec-2018
reply by the author on 13-Dec-2018
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Thank you for the review, Marilyn.
Comment from Barb Hensongispsaca
The 'coming of age' in Jesus. What a metamorphosis told as you passed God's test to acknowledge your rebirth. The picture is just perfect as the butterfly emerges.
reply by the author on 13-Dec-2018
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The 'coming of age' in Jesus. What a metamorphosis told as you passed God's test to acknowledge your rebirth. The picture is just perfect as the butterfly emerges.
Comment Written 12-Dec-2018
reply by the author on 13-Dec-2018
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Thank you for the review, Barb.
Comment from Roxanna Andrews
It is amazing what the Love of God can do. I have seen people completely transformed by it. How fortunate we are to have a God who loves us so and forgive every sin. Well done Pat. Rox
reply by the author on 13-Dec-2018
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It is amazing what the Love of God can do. I have seen people completely transformed by it. How fortunate we are to have a God who loves us so and forgive every sin. Well done Pat. Rox
Comment Written 12-Dec-2018
reply by the author on 13-Dec-2018
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Thank you for the review, Rox.
Comment from Cindy McIntyre
What a wonderful biographical poem. Your words are powerful and inspiring. Sharing the story of how Gods love can transform is such a beautiful testimony of your faith.
reply by the author on 13-Dec-2018
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What a wonderful biographical poem. Your words are powerful and inspiring. Sharing the story of how Gods love can transform is such a beautiful testimony of your faith.
Comment Written 11-Dec-2018
reply by the author on 13-Dec-2018
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Thank you for the review, Cindy.
Comment from Mistydawn
What a wonderful poem, a story in a poem. I like how you you first descibed the character, and then how her life changed. Your artwork is beautiful perfect for the poem. I never looked at it like that, but you're right.
reply by the author on 13-Dec-2018
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What a wonderful poem, a story in a poem. I like how you you first descibed the character, and then how her life changed. Your artwork is beautiful perfect for the poem. I never looked at it like that, but you're right.
Comment Written 11-Dec-2018
reply by the author on 13-Dec-2018
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Thank you for the review, Misty.
Comment from Sugarray77
Very good, Patricia. I love the meaning of restoration and grace that your verse gives to the reader. Very lovely and uplifting. I also am stunned at the beautiful artwork that you have created. Very impressive.
Melissa
reply by the author on 13-Dec-2018
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Very good, Patricia. I love the meaning of restoration and grace that your verse gives to the reader. Very lovely and uplifting. I also am stunned at the beautiful artwork that you have created. Very impressive.
Melissa
Comment Written 11-Dec-2018
reply by the author on 13-Dec-2018
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Thank you for the review, Melissa.
Comment from fm wright
It is so true. Once we meet Him, we are no longer the same. The words of your poem express this beautifully. It flows wonderfully in both rhythm and thought. After reading your notes, I can see why you chose to use the butterfly. It fits perfectly. Well written!
reply by the author on 13-Dec-2018
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It is so true. Once we meet Him, we are no longer the same. The words of your poem express this beautifully. It flows wonderfully in both rhythm and thought. After reading your notes, I can see why you chose to use the butterfly. It fits perfectly. Well written!
Comment Written 11-Dec-2018
reply by the author on 13-Dec-2018
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Thank you for the review, fm.
Comment from lyenochka
Great job in illustrating how a life can be completely changed by Jesus. You give us great examples in the before and after and the verses are very well rhymed!
reply by the author on 13-Dec-2018
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Great job in illustrating how a life can be completely changed by Jesus. You give us great examples in the before and after and the verses are very well rhymed!
Comment Written 11-Dec-2018
reply by the author on 13-Dec-2018
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Thank you for the review, Helen.
Comment from Joan E.
I could hear a bit of autobiography and admired your rhymed quatrains plus "iceberg" and "sword" similes. Thank you for complimenting your sonnet with your intriguiging "Butterfly Dance". Smiles- Joan
reply by the author on 13-Dec-2018
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I could hear a bit of autobiography and admired your rhymed quatrains plus "iceberg" and "sword" similes. Thank you for complimenting your sonnet with your intriguiging "Butterfly Dance". Smiles- Joan
Comment Written 11-Dec-2018
reply by the author on 13-Dec-2018
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Thank you for the review, Joan.
