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5-7-5 (macaw makes a moue)

alliterations for the letter 'm'

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Comment from Teresa Alford
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Cute, cute cute and clever as well. Love it. Aside from writing, it looks like you like to review too. I don't know about you, but I find reviewing helps me with my writing. TA ";~)

 Comment Written 06-Jan-2019

reply by the author on 06-Jan-2019
    Teresa,

    THANK YOU for your generous rating. Unfortunately, the only way on FS to boost your own efforts is to review others. I agree that giving/getting feedback helps to improve our own efforts.

    The m-letter has a FS companion with the b-letter. The illustrations for both are included in my e-book, "Animals Become Chatty." I think it appeals to children from ages two to eight or so. The hard cover is not in the works because to do so requires major revisions for an accompanying page to describe the alliterative contents for each illustrated page. To be published made my bucket list. LOL

    Mark
Comment from tfawcus
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Perhaps the pernicious parrot pooped, prompting the houseproud primates to pretty up the place. Pooh, they proclaimed, possibly relieved it wasn't a pachyderm.

 Comment Written 04-Jan-2019

reply by the author on 04-Jan-2019
    Some of those animals were considered but the artist who did my illustrations had limited space (-:

    Regardless Inaporeciate your alliterative comments. I am personally very proud of your word performance.

    Mark
reply by the author on 06-Jan-2019
    BTW ... to extend your alliterative comments, the p-letter in my e-book, Animals Become Chatty, has as its title: "Penny Penguin peeps, 'Pretty piñata.' " Your pachyderm is shown as an elephant on the e-letter page. There are no poops on the page, but there are petunia and pansy flowers.

    And in researching all the animals for my book, I rediscovered the two names for camel: Bactrian camel and Dromedary. With the initial letter of each name, you may now know which one has one hump and the other two ... LOL
Comment from Teri7
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This is a very cute and very well written 5-7-5 poem you have penned for the contest. I love the art work you used and the descriptive words also. Best wishes in the contest. Blessings, Teri

 Comment Written 04-Jan-2019

reply by the author on 04-Jan-2019
    Teri,

    Thanks, but it is NOT entered in any contest. It was just something I posted on FS. If you have or know young children, ages 2-8, they may like to 'see' my e-book, Animals Become Chatty, which is available from Amazon.

    I do appreciate your review of this verse and its illustration.

    Mark
Comment from Michele Harber
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Hi Mark. I had no idea you were going to publish these on FanStory. I like your alliteration, particularly the little cheat on "a-musing," which worked well. You made good use of the 5-7-5 format, and I like this particular picture, especially the bright colors on the macaw.

 Comment Written 04-Jan-2019

reply by the author on 04-Jan-2019
    HI Michele!

    I did one for the letter b too on FS.

    It was likely your inspiration that makes me think of those little cheats. So a-musing can be in your credit column. If you or your daughter have not seen Rio and Rio 2, they are fun movies to watch and enjoy.

    Take care.

    Mark
reply by Michele Harber on 04-Jan-2019
    That's sweet, Mark, but I give you full credit. I'll have to look up your "B" post, but I'm glad to see you getting yourself (and your book) some more exposure on FanStory. Re: Rio (like that one?), Leah's seen both, and I've seen most of the first one.
reply by the author on 04-Jan-2019
    My granddaughter is Lea Adi; her identical twin is Eva Sophia. But ' Eva' is pronounced as 'Ava.'

    Lea is the lefty; Eva is righthanded. Both are 1st graders now. My daughter chooses to NOT dress them with identical clothes.
reply by Michele Harber on 04-Jan-2019
    My Leah is left-handed too. Your daughter is probably making the right choice in not dressing the twins alike. They may not care one way or the other at this age, but they will when they get older. My friend has identical twins as well, now high school seniors. One is named Violet so, to tell them apart, she always dressed Violet in some shade of blue or purple. The one not in blue or purple was Kathryn by default. Now that they're older, they choose their own clothing and the "violet rule" no longer applies.
Comment from Artasylum
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doesn't seen to be a contest? The image is great, all the m's fly off of my delighted tongue to read this very fun poem... I am really looking forward to 2019 antics... yours diana

 Comment Written 04-Jan-2019

reply by the author on 04-Jan-2019
    Diana,

    THANKS for your compliment about the illustration and verse. It was not submitted to any contest.

    Take a look at: "5-7-5 (bumblebees buzz by)" posted in December and let me know which is better - m or b? LOL

    Mark
Comment from Donka Kristeva
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Amusing. The lines with the repetition of the letter "m" sound like a tongue twister, but without being an expert, this is probably intentional.

 Comment Written 16-Dec-2018

reply by the author on 16-Dec-2018
    Donka,,
    Thank you for your 'mirthful' review. It was not intentionally written to be a tongue twister, but with all those 'm' sounds it almost is (-: If you search FS, I did another for the b-sound.

    Enjoy the upcoming holidays.

    Mark
Comment from way2gokevs
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Well done, great illustration, actually I thought the other so called mouse looked like our Australian Wallaby. Good luck in the competition and thanks for sharing.
Cheers for now.
Kev.

 Comment Written 16-Dec-2018

reply by the author on 16-Dec-2018
    Kev, Thank you for your thoughts and generous rating. My e-book, Animals Become Chatty, does not have a wallaby, but for my letter-k page it has 'kute-looking' kangaroo. LOL

    I agree, my illustrator did a great job displaying my alliterative ideas.

    Enjoy your holidays.

    Mark

    BTW .... About 180 degrees away from my Albany, New York home is your Albany in Australia's south western corner. And your Esperance, Australia is 180 degrees from my nearby Esperance, NY. Those Brits were everywhere.
Comment from donette1914
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very cute poem
I like how you write and draws ones in
you took some time on this and it shows
this is a well-penned poem
very nice artwork
it was a pleasure
donette1914 dec 15 2018
- 15-Dec-2018

 Comment Written 15-Dec-2018

reply by the author on 15-Dec-2018
    Thanks Donette for your comments and generous rating for this short verse. While other letters are now on vacation, I had posted on Dec 13th another alliterative poem as ?5-7-5 (bumblebees buzz by)?

    Mark
Comment from SueZen
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Made me laugh and want to be with them all, having fun mopping up mud and making mischief, making the moment marvelous ! Great pic and I did notice the different heads, before reading the author notes.
I believe it is the inner child that keeps us bright and breezy, curious and creative.
The behaviour of the animals around me is often so funny and why I love watching documentaries of the natural world.
I enjoyed reading the author notes too and shall see if I can find the Rio movie on YouTube.

 Comment Written 13-Dec-2018

reply by the author on 13-Dec-2018
    Susan,

    We are both children of the 1940s. Honestly writing my 5-7-5 style verses or Haiku is something that keeps my creative mind filled with a little mischief. I honestly started with a FanStory at the end of October. If you like Haiku, you might be interested in going to a 'free' site, theHaikuFoundation.org. I have had a few of my Haiku posted there in the last three months. FanStory lets me use the 5-7-5 syllable style for the verse you just commented on.
    Mark
reply by SueZen on 14-Dec-2018
    And so good, we take nothing for granted and count our blessings. I like short poems and writing them too - not necessarily easier though to say as much as possible in a few words. Thank you for mentioning the Haiku Foundation. Happy day, Susan
Comment from Gert sherwood
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Smiles Mark D. R.
Your 5-7-5 macaw makes a moue
along with the graphic was so much fun to read you had my tonuge twining trying to say your (tonuge twister) Gert

 Comment Written 12-Dec-2018

reply by the author on 12-Dec-2018
    Gert,

    Thanks for your laughs and rating.

    As interested, you can search Kindle or Amazon books for my e-book, Animals Become Chatty. If you do, you will see the cover page (c-letter) and the back page cover (o-letter). The entire e-book has animals and the letter alliterations for the entire alphabet.

    My verse may be a tongue twister. The very limited text title for each letter tries to give a voice-verb to the animal 'speaking.'

    Mark
reply by Gert sherwood on 12-Dec-2018
    You are welcome Mark
    Gert