Tanka (sere the blood red leaves)
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Comment from LIJ Red
I feel like a mechanic with a drawing and a scale, determining that the machine is correct in all dimensions and wondering what it supposed to do...hey, looks fine to me...
reply by the author on 10-Dec-2018
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I feel like a mechanic with a drawing and a scale, determining that the machine is correct in all dimensions and wondering what it supposed to do...hey, looks fine to me...
Comment Written 08-Dec-2018
reply by the author on 10-Dec-2018
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Thank you for your review, Red. Appreciated. Best wishes, Tony
Comment from susand3022
Hello Anthony, What a nice Tanka. Blood red leaves and autumn splendor, so vividly descriptive. Makes me think of my red oak out back, just not right now.
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Hello Anthony, What a nice Tanka. Blood red leaves and autumn splendor, so vividly descriptive. Makes me think of my red oak out back, just not right now.
Comment Written 08-Dec-2018
reply by the author on 10-Dec-2018
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Thank you for your review, Susan, and for your comments. Some of the autumn trees are quite splendid. All the best, Tony
Comment from RGstar
Something so beautiful in so few words. As many know, hard for me to give such short poems a six star for the ease in which can be written. Yet, ease has nothing to do with quality and utmost skill.
This has both.
Let me wish you well with this sixth star.
Magic.
My best wishes.
RG
reply by the author on 10-Dec-2018
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Something so beautiful in so few words. As many know, hard for me to give such short poems a six star for the ease in which can be written. Yet, ease has nothing to do with quality and utmost skill.
This has both.
Let me wish you well with this sixth star.
Magic.
My best wishes.
RG
Comment Written 08-Dec-2018
reply by the author on 10-Dec-2018
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Very many thanks, Roy. This one took me a few days and several re-writes. I seldom venture into the Japanese short forms. They are difficult to do well, and poles apart from the typical Western view of life. I appreciate your kind words and the sixth star for this brash invasion into their realm. All the best, Tony
Comment from krys123
Cheers, Tony;
> with a pivot line such as "autumn splendor falls" opens up all kinds of imagery and reflections of that time of the season.
> Also this line structurally holds together grammatically the first and last two lines of your writing. This forms an enjambment that flow smoothly without any hiccups or syntactical breaks in the grammar.
> I like your little retrospect and "poem from an old man's pen" and adding a little personal touch.
> I really enjoyed this one, Tony, and take care and have a good one but especially good luck in the contest my friend.
Alx
reply by the author on 10-Dec-2018
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Cheers, Tony;
> with a pivot line such as "autumn splendor falls" opens up all kinds of imagery and reflections of that time of the season.
> Also this line structurally holds together grammatically the first and last two lines of your writing. This forms an enjambment that flow smoothly without any hiccups or syntactical breaks in the grammar.
> I like your little retrospect and "poem from an old man's pen" and adding a little personal touch.
> I really enjoyed this one, Tony, and take care and have a good one but especially good luck in the contest my friend.
Alx
Comment Written 08-Dec-2018
reply by the author on 10-Dec-2018
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Very many thanks, Alx. This one took me a few days and several re-writes. I seldom venture into the Japanese short forms. They are difficult to do well, and poles apart from the typical Western view of life. I appreciate your kind words and your comments about the structure of this one. All the best, Tony
Comment from mermaids
Congrats on your book being published. "Nourishment for unborn years" is a marvelous line, I can relate to it. All of us have unborn years. There is a good feeling in your poem.
reply by the author on 10-Dec-2018
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Congrats on your book being published. "Nourishment for unborn years" is a marvelous line, I can relate to it. All of us have unborn years. There is a good feeling in your poem.
Comment Written 08-Dec-2018
reply by the author on 10-Dec-2018
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Very many thanks, Mermaids, both for your congratulations, and for your kind words about my poem. Much appreciated! All the best, Tony
Comment from lyenochka
Congratulations, Tony! Is this your third book that's published. Loved that you alluded to Hopkins' poem in your title. Good use of a tanka for the announcement!
Minor point: your name is misspelled in the Author's Notes.
reply by the author on 10-Dec-2018
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Congratulations, Tony! Is this your third book that's published. Loved that you alluded to Hopkins' poem in your title. Good use of a tanka for the announcement!
Minor point: your name is misspelled in the Author's Notes.
Comment Written 08-Dec-2018
reply by the author on 10-Dec-2018
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Thanks, Helen. My name was misspelled on the front cover of the book, and I did not notice until one or two reviewers, such as yourself, pointed out the discrepancy. Thank you! It has been corrected now. All the best, Tony
Comment from Sandra Stoner-Mitchell
It's lovely to read a poem of yours again, Tony. I am going to make time to write some again in the new year. This is a lovely Tanka, I've been reading loads of Jim's and got quite into them now. Not that I could write one, but I love to read them. I love the words in this one, the reds of autumn are truly something to see, and I enjoyed the part about an old man's pen, LOL. that is definitely not you! Well done. :)) Sandra xxx
reply by the author on 10-Dec-2018
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It's lovely to read a poem of yours again, Tony. I am going to make time to write some again in the new year. This is a lovely Tanka, I've been reading loads of Jim's and got quite into them now. Not that I could write one, but I love to read them. I love the words in this one, the reds of autumn are truly something to see, and I enjoyed the part about an old man's pen, LOL. that is definitely not you! Well done. :)) Sandra xxx
Comment Written 08-Dec-2018
reply by the author on 10-Dec-2018
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Thanks, Sandra. I shall look forward to reading more of your poems next year. I, too, have been reading quite a few of Jim's Tankas. I am in awe of his persistence in fulfilling his self-imposed task of one a day for a year. I couldn't do that! I, too, hope to return to writing more poetry next year, but am finding The French Letter is much more time-consuming than I had imagined! You're right - the old man is definitely not me! - I still have plenty of puff left to blow out my seventy five candles on the cake next week - even if I do leave an embarrassing number of old flames burning! LOL
Comment from A. Willow Bends
I have no sixes left to give. Congrats on your recent accomplishments! This is a lovely piece, your words, of course and the visual you chose to accompany. It is so obvious to see why you have had success in your field. Always appreciated are author notes, in my opinion, which you graciously provided. I find there is much to learn there. Best of luck! Great piece of work.
Wendy
reply by the author on 11-Dec-2018
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I have no sixes left to give. Congrats on your recent accomplishments! This is a lovely piece, your words, of course and the visual you chose to accompany. It is so obvious to see why you have had success in your field. Always appreciated are author notes, in my opinion, which you graciously provided. I find there is much to learn there. Best of luck! Great piece of work.
Wendy
Comment Written 08-Dec-2018
reply by the author on 11-Dec-2018
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Very many thanks, Wendy, for your kind comments and suggestion of six-worthiness. Much appreciated. Tony
Comment from apky
Oh my, you're a man of many talents, Tony.
I adored this tanka. It all fitted so well - the artwork (you?)
And of course I read all of your author's notes.
Unfortunately, this is quite frankly beyond me. Some
great poets here try to encourage me to write poetry,
and of course I plough on, trying to make poetry out
of my prose. But I shy away from something this marvellous.
reply by the author on 11-Dec-2018
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Oh my, you're a man of many talents, Tony.
I adored this tanka. It all fitted so well - the artwork (you?)
And of course I read all of your author's notes.
Unfortunately, this is quite frankly beyond me. Some
great poets here try to encourage me to write poetry,
and of course I plough on, trying to make poetry out
of my prose. But I shy away from something this marvellous.
Comment Written 08-Dec-2018
reply by the author on 11-Dec-2018
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Thanks so much for your kind comments, apky. Very much appreciated. Best wishes, Tony
Comment from royowen
Congratulations Tony, I'm sure your collection of poems would be first class reading, simply because your poetry is like none other. Beautifully written tanka mate, excellent language and work, well done, good luck, blessings, Roy
reply by the author on 11-Dec-2018
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Congratulations Tony, I'm sure your collection of poems would be first class reading, simply because your poetry is like none other. Beautifully written tanka mate, excellent language and work, well done, good luck, blessings, Roy
Comment Written 08-Dec-2018
reply by the author on 11-Dec-2018
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Very many thanks for your kind comments, Roy. Appreciated. All the best, Tony
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