Jolly Happy Merry Joy
six quatrains11 total reviews
Comment from Joan E.
Thank you for sharing this very personal poem about the loss of loved ones. I admired your heartfelt, rhymed quatrains. It must be a difficult time of the year to deal with your memories. Try to focus on the joyful times you shared. Warm regards- Joan
reply by the author on 12-Dec-2018
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Thank you for sharing this very personal poem about the loss of loved ones. I admired your heartfelt, rhymed quatrains. It must be a difficult time of the year to deal with your memories. Try to focus on the joyful times you shared. Warm regards- Joan
Comment Written 11-Dec-2018
reply by the author on 12-Dec-2018
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I personally could do without holidays altogether, now that I am retired and live alone....but I do not wish to sound like a scrooge, I hope everyone has a blast this Christmas....thanks for reading my verses...
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I just read Skankey?s Scrooge-like response to the holidays?he agrees! Cheers- Joan
Comment from Sandra du Plessis
A very well-written heartfelt six quatrain poem. It seems they look after you, and keep you on your toes. They are not physically there anymore but they stayed solid on your mind and in your heart.
reply by the author on 06-Dec-2018
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A very well-written heartfelt six quatrain poem. It seems they look after you, and keep you on your toes. They are not physically there anymore but they stayed solid on your mind and in your heart.
Comment Written 06-Dec-2018
reply by the author on 06-Dec-2018
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I hope no one is eavesdropping, to hear me talk to the dogs and cats and ghosts, mainly because I talk like an old sailor and biker. I don't think about them as much anymore, but the poems keep coming...thanks for reading and reviewing this one.
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
These are such meloncoly words and the story told in your unique style that gives this poem such a raw and honest feeling, I loved every word and the last line is so true, we are here for such a short time, we should dwell on the best of times, love Dolly x
reply by the author on 06-Dec-2018
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These are such meloncoly words and the story told in your unique style that gives this poem such a raw and honest feeling, I loved every word and the last line is so true, we are here for such a short time, we should dwell on the best of times, love Dolly x
Comment Written 06-Dec-2018
reply by the author on 06-Dec-2018
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I sat down to write when it was too chilly to enjoy being outside, and realized I was pouring out my mood on my keyboard...thanks for reading and reviewing the result.
Comment from Sandra Stoner-Mitchell
Dear Llj, I am so sorry for you losses. Yes, we are 'born to die sometime' but that doesn't make it any easier to have to say goodbye. To lose your wife and mother in such a short space of time ... I can't imagine the pain you went through. Losing my husband was bad, it was 25 years later that I lost my mum, she was my angel and helped me through it all.
I like how you have admitted shouting at Got and didn't get any answer; been there and the result was the same.
Your last stanza says it all. The short lime we are here, make the most of every minute and let the rubbish go it's own way.
Big hugs! Sandra x
reply by the author on 06-Dec-2018
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Dear Llj, I am so sorry for you losses. Yes, we are 'born to die sometime' but that doesn't make it any easier to have to say goodbye. To lose your wife and mother in such a short space of time ... I can't imagine the pain you went through. Losing my husband was bad, it was 25 years later that I lost my mum, she was my angel and helped me through it all.
I like how you have admitted shouting at Got and didn't get any answer; been there and the result was the same.
Your last stanza says it all. The short lime we are here, make the most of every minute and let the rubbish go it's own way.
Big hugs! Sandra x
Comment Written 06-Dec-2018
reply by the author on 06-Dec-2018
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Thank you very much for reading my poem. Scholars say that iambic pentameter is better for somber poems, but these lines came to me as they are...I just hope something humorous or heroic comes my way...ya can only whine for so long...
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Personally, my poetry is like yours, what I write is what you get, it's what you put into the words that count. That's my opinion, anyway! lol. You carry on doing what you do, it was perfect. :)) xx
Comment from Liz O'Neill
I really like the 3rd to the last stanza. This makes it a universal poem. We all grieve the years passing and the losses that we experienced. May there be healing as the reader joins in reflecting their grievings. The last stanza gives courage, support and motivation to all who are open to receive it.
reply by the author on 06-Dec-2018
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I really like the 3rd to the last stanza. This makes it a universal poem. We all grieve the years passing and the losses that we experienced. May there be healing as the reader joins in reflecting their grievings. The last stanza gives courage, support and motivation to all who are open to receive it.
Comment Written 06-Dec-2018
reply by the author on 06-Dec-2018
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Thanks very much for reading and reviewing. I hope something humorous or adventurous comes my way, folks will get tired of hearing me groan...
Comment from Phyllis Stewart
Bravo! Loud applause. You nailed it. This is exactly how it is. The last stanza is right on target, and the final line is perfect. I sent this to my husband, because he had a hard day. I hope it gives him a sense of perspective. A hard is better than no day. :)
reply by the author on 05-Dec-2018
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Bravo! Loud applause. You nailed it. This is exactly how it is. The last stanza is right on target, and the final line is perfect. I sent this to my husband, because he had a hard day. I hope it gives him a sense of perspective. A hard is better than no day. :)
Comment Written 05-Dec-2018
reply by the author on 05-Dec-2018
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I like this internet bit, I can say what I think about my life and times without embarrassment, no tough guy mask to wear...and if I want to do it in ballad meter, I do it. Yeah, this was a poem right from my thumping gizzard(Jojo's words). Thanks for reading and reviewing, and the kind words!
Comment from BeasPeas
This is a very well composed piece, Red. Tender and loving, it tells of the deaths of two important people within a few months of each other. Word choices, rhyming and flow are wonderful. Your final line is where it's at. Make the best of every day.
How important is it? Marilyn
reply by the author on 05-Dec-2018
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This is a very well composed piece, Red. Tender and loving, it tells of the deaths of two important people within a few months of each other. Word choices, rhyming and flow are wonderful. Your final line is where it's at. Make the best of every day.
How important is it? Marilyn
Comment Written 05-Dec-2018
reply by the author on 05-Dec-2018
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I wrote what was rattling through my head on this one. Usually that's not wise, but my writing practice had parts of it moving in ballad meter... thanks very much for reading and reviewing.
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Hi Red. If it's pressing on our mind, struggling to get out, it's time to post. Marilyn
Comment from Gloria ....
Ha, this is signature you, Ellijay, which means a little irreverent, a lot image and emotion filled and an all around terrific read.
You might want to toss on a little language warning, not that it bugs me, because it doesn't, but you know how the small stuff goes.
Much enjoyed this one. :)
Gloria
reply by the author on 05-Dec-2018
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Ha, this is signature you, Ellijay, which means a little irreverent, a lot image and emotion filled and an all around terrific read.
You might want to toss on a little language warning, not that it bugs me, because it doesn't, but you know how the small stuff goes.
Much enjoyed this one. :)
Gloria
Comment Written 05-Dec-2018
reply by the author on 05-Dec-2018
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Yeah, and those language and sex warnings are so complicated and expensive, being safe and not sorry seems prudent...thanks very much for reading my rather heartfelt little poem...
Comment from Jannypan (Jan)
Your poem flows well, Red, with a sad, but true message. Good job on the rhymes and the message. Thanks for sharing. I see you as one who would go out Christmas Eve and look to Heaven and the stars and talk to your beloved ones who are gone. Take care. Jan
reply by the author on 06-Dec-2018
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Your poem flows well, Red, with a sad, but true message. Good job on the rhymes and the message. Thanks for sharing. I see you as one who would go out Christmas Eve and look to Heaven and the stars and talk to your beloved ones who are gone. Take care. Jan
Comment Written 05-Dec-2018
reply by the author on 06-Dec-2018
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An only child and later barracks dweller, I do very well on my own, but I sure do miss all those that "have gone home." Thanks very much for reading my verses, I am hoping muse drifts back into town with something more cheerful and heroic...
Comment from Mrs. KT
Hello Friend,
I would have to say that this is one my all-time favorite poems that you have penned. It flows so well although it contains some very pointed and keen visual and emotive imagery. One stanza stands out for me - so much so I read it three times:
The years rush at us, mad and blind,
nobody's keeping track.
I know they live just in my mind
they're never coming back.
Memorable...
Thank you for sharing...
diane
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reply by the author on 06-Dec-2018
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Hello Friend,
I would have to say that this is one my all-time favorite poems that you have penned. It flows so well although it contains some very pointed and keen visual and emotive imagery. One stanza stands out for me - so much so I read it three times:
The years rush at us, mad and blind,
nobody's keeping track.
I know they live just in my mind
they're never coming back.
Memorable...
Thank you for sharing...
diane
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The highest and the lowest rating are not included in calculations.
Comment Written 05-Dec-2018
reply by the author on 06-Dec-2018
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Maybe my errant muse will wander back into town with something humorous or romantic or heroic before I get lynched for whining. Thanks very much for reading and reviewing my verses.
