Comment from Anntonette

Excellent

This is an emotionally and well expressed piece! Love the alliteration and repetition of words at the beginning, alliteration being my favorite poetic device. You kept the image, color, background simple. Simplicity and complexity in one.
- Anntonette J

 Comment Written 02-Dec-2018

Comment from Dolly'sPoems

Excellent

This is a bit of tongue twister with a mix of negatives and positives to confuse even further, I wish you luck with the contest, your poem amused me, love Dolly x

 Comment Written 02-Dec-2018

Comment from Galactia

Excellent

Hi

This is different, new form?

I liked the internal rhyme as throughout this poem.

1st Stanza...

Can I not want nothing never too....? Was it meant to be too or do?

Can I not want nothing never do.?

A fantastic poem. Good luck in the contest.

Regards
Tia

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 Comment Written 02-Dec-2018

Comment from kiwisteveh

Excellent

I wouldn't nor couldn't not never refuse to not give you an unglowing review for this not never hilarious piece!

If you can untangle all the double and triple negatives, you're a better man than I am, Gunga Din!

I was just thinking about this method of poetry-writing yesterday, where the flow of the rhymes seems to lead the poem in various directions, rather than the poet controlling the meaning. It sometimes leads to a piece that is unsettling and original, as you have achieved here.

Good luck. Surely the committee can't not never refuse to not award you the prize.

Steve

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 Comment Written 02-Dec-2018