Perennials of War
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Comment from c_lucas
I think Drew should tell Emily that her mother is dead. This is very well written with a smooth flow of words, making for a very interesting read. There is very good imagery.
reply by the author on 25-Nov-2018
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I think Drew should tell Emily that her mother is dead. This is very well written with a smooth flow of words, making for a very interesting read. There is very good imagery.
Comment Written 25-Nov-2018
reply by the author on 25-Nov-2018
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One would think so, but logical would say he needs to tell her in person. Thank you for the kind review.
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You're right.
Comment from Ulla
Hi Barbara, So now Shana has got herself a kitten. It's obvious she's delighted about it and her tlephone conversation with Emily was endearing. I really think it's time Shana gets over the religious obstacles and get her act together before it's too late. All the best. Ulla:)))
reply by the author on 25-Nov-2018
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Hi Barbara, So now Shana has got herself a kitten. It's obvious she's delighted about it and her tlephone conversation with Emily was endearing. I really think it's time Shana gets over the religious obstacles and get her act together before it's too late. All the best. Ulla:)))
Comment Written 25-Nov-2018
reply by the author on 25-Nov-2018
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Thank you for the kind review. We are coming to an end, so we'll see what Shana decides.
Comment from judiverse
Introducing the kitten was a great idea. I wondered what the surprise was going to be. I bet the dogs will love it. Sweet phone call with Emily. Shana can't help but feel Emily's love for her. Maybe that will push Shana to put aside her religious differences. Shana has made a hit with all of Drew's family. Excellent dialogue, and great characterization of Shana. She's so good with Emily. Certainly rates 6 stars. judi
reply by the author on 25-Nov-2018
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Introducing the kitten was a great idea. I wondered what the surprise was going to be. I bet the dogs will love it. Sweet phone call with Emily. Shana can't help but feel Emily's love for her. Maybe that will push Shana to put aside her religious differences. Shana has made a hit with all of Drew's family. Excellent dialogue, and great characterization of Shana. She's so good with Emily. Certainly rates 6 stars. judi
Comment Written 25-Nov-2018
reply by the author on 25-Nov-2018
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Thank you for the kind review. I think Emily will make a huge impact on Shana.
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You're welcome. I take it Emily doesn't know about her mother's death. She will really want to cling to Shana when she finds out. judi
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Emily doesn't know about her mom's death and Drew made the decision to wait until he's with her to tell her.
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I like how Shana's connecting more and more with Emily. The kitten was part of that, as well as the swim suit. judi
Comment from Gert sherwood
Hello Barb
I'm so glad that Shana was given such a cute Tabby kitten to me it somehow will bring a closer loving relationship between Anderson
and Emily. I hope so.
Gert
reply by the author on 25-Nov-2018
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Hello Barb
I'm so glad that Shana was given such a cute Tabby kitten to me it somehow will bring a closer loving relationship between Anderson
and Emily. I hope so.
Gert
Comment Written 25-Nov-2018
reply by the author on 25-Nov-2018
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I think so too. Thank you for the kind review.
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You are welcome
Smiles Gert
Comment from Tootsie55
First SIX from my sweetheart. Another excellent chapter. This is how we will build up funny money in here so we can promote the Trip Book for any who have not read it yet. Now suggestions and spags...Suit yourself on the following...A couple (of) men and I searched
Shana sat with (the)kitten
Not error what does the following mean? I have done video with Louise on Facebook or seeing we are reviewing in Louise's account...Geoff and Louise have done it....Facetimed Philip
reply by the author on 25-Nov-2018
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First SIX from my sweetheart. Another excellent chapter. This is how we will build up funny money in here so we can promote the Trip Book for any who have not read it yet. Now suggestions and spags...Suit yourself on the following...A couple (of) men and I searched
Shana sat with (the)kitten
Not error what does the following mean? I have done video with Louise on Facebook or seeing we are reviewing in Louise's account...Geoff and Louise have done it....Facetimed Philip
Comment Written 25-Nov-2018
reply by the author on 25-Nov-2018
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GRRRRR, why do I leave out those little words. I edited this hundreds of times and never caught it. DARN!!!! Thank you for the help.
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Yeah I often go back in and find stuff missing even after a few reviews sigh!
Comment from robyn corum
Barbara,
Another nice chapter to add to your novel. I am always so impressed with the way you are able to struggle along (making it seem like no struggle at all!) with continuous chapters. Go, you!
Sorry, I evidently didn't see the issue you were referring to - though I did spot one tiny nit:
1.) "I think we've narrowed the name to either Simba or (Aslan). Any thought(s)?" Shana faced Anderson.
2.) "Maybe (Aslan) would be a better name. He's going to grow up to be a great lion.
Thanks!
reply by the author on 25-Nov-2018
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Barbara,
Another nice chapter to add to your novel. I am always so impressed with the way you are able to struggle along (making it seem like no struggle at all!) with continuous chapters. Go, you!
Sorry, I evidently didn't see the issue you were referring to - though I did spot one tiny nit:
1.) "I think we've narrowed the name to either Simba or (Aslan). Any thought(s)?" Shana faced Anderson.
2.) "Maybe (Aslan) would be a better name. He's going to grow up to be a great lion.
Thanks!
Comment Written 25-Nov-2018
reply by the author on 25-Nov-2018
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Thank you for the kind review. I appreciate the help.
Comment from royowen
It seems that Emily is having an affect on Shana's emotions, and the poor child is separated from her dead mother, and her father, and with an attachment to Shana, it is further complications things. A good connecting episode Barbara, an emotional one, it's near to my heart this one, well done, Barbara, blessings, Roy
Typo : A couple (of) of men and I. 2: He said, it'll probably (need nursing) for a least another week.
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reply by the author on 25-Nov-2018
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It seems that Emily is having an affect on Shana's emotions, and the poor child is separated from her dead mother, and her father, and with an attachment to Shana, it is further complications things. A good connecting episode Barbara, an emotional one, it's near to my heart this one, well done, Barbara, blessings, Roy
Typo : A couple (of) of men and I. 2: He said, it'll probably (need nursing) for a least another week.
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Comment Written 25-Nov-2018
reply by the author on 25-Nov-2018
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Thank you for the help. I have made the corrections.
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Most welcome
Comment from Phyllis Stewart
Yes, Shana, you can't ignore what you feel. You're trying, but it won't work. You need to stop hiding behind religious differences and admit you love Drew and want to be with him. No need to feel guilty. Your father loves you and will understand. If not, he'll come around once he realizes it's your happiness at stake. :)
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reply by the author on 25-Nov-2018
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Yes, Shana, you can't ignore what you feel. You're trying, but it won't work. You need to stop hiding behind religious differences and admit you love Drew and want to be with him. No need to feel guilty. Your father loves you and will understand. If not, he'll come around once he realizes it's your happiness at stake. :)
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Comment Written 25-Nov-2018
reply by the author on 25-Nov-2018
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I wish Shana would talk your advice. She NEEDS too. Thank you for the kind review.
