Haiku and Senryu Suites
Viewing comments for Chapter 21 "To Change The World"Book of Haiku, Senryu & Lanturne Suites
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Comment from irishauthorme
I sit in my cubicle and read your lines, more concise and meaningful, your continuing effort to reach out and influence the influential are more than commendable, and I see that this time you reached more readers, no small feat.
The message I gain from your efforts is:
There is still hope for this miserable, crawling, complaining, concealing, conspiring, compromising, congealing mess we call The Human Race.
In spite of all of the Christian Principles we are exposed to growing up, the Rich and Influential continually conspire to cheat the "Lower Classes" out of their just reward.
The currant cost of living in the "Good Ol' US" has been estimated at $50,000 per year, and the average family makes just $44,500 per year. WTF?
You are making a difference, Keep writing!
irish
reply by the author on 30-Nov-2018
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I sit in my cubicle and read your lines, more concise and meaningful, your continuing effort to reach out and influence the influential are more than commendable, and I see that this time you reached more readers, no small feat.
The message I gain from your efforts is:
There is still hope for this miserable, crawling, complaining, concealing, conspiring, compromising, congealing mess we call The Human Race.
In spite of all of the Christian Principles we are exposed to growing up, the Rich and Influential continually conspire to cheat the "Lower Classes" out of their just reward.
The currant cost of living in the "Good Ol' US" has been estimated at $50,000 per year, and the average family makes just $44,500 per year. WTF?
You are making a difference, Keep writing!
irish
Comment Written 29-Nov-2018
reply by the author on 30-Nov-2018
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I would like to convey my serious appreciation for your warm and meaningful comments.
and meaningful, your continuing effort to reach out and influence the influential are more than commendable, and I see that this time you reached more readers, no small feat.
This is High Praise.
Furthermore, your review was the 15th review and it is the one that gave me the blue ribbon to recognize poetry here. And for that, I am truly grateful.
As I sit in a cubicle, my friends living room, I'm considering all that led up to now, and concentrating and condensing it into my thoughts and incorporating it into my actions.
A lot of the reviewers stated that they found it a logical clear concise and a scientifically accurate progression.
What I'm going to do is copy and paste all of the reviews that were given, and send them to you in your email.
One of the
reviewers stated the word "specificity" was the center and agreed that communication is the best way to get Everything done.
I sincerely appreciate your comment and will proceed to send those reviews to you. I will also be writing more, as I have many more chapters of my biography to write about. One of the ones I'm going to work on first is Michael and the magic Rose, Where The Roses will be talking among themselves and saying that one has been chosen for a special occasion.
It's a story about how Michael brought me that Rose and that put it in watercolor and tinted it for him and then he took it up onto the top of the Buttes in Yuba City California, and then took Sara up there and propose to her.
It will be including it some history of my interaction with him and it will be a Christmas gift for Noah
With Love, Respect, and in
His Name
🍒🍒🍒
Your Prouder Son,
Darren
Comment from harmony13
Excellent Poem! The author's words were interesting, descriptive and
thought provoking. The reader pondered on her own goals and objectives
and moving forward. The fits in to the theme of this poem well.
reply by the author on 25-Nov-2018
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Excellent Poem! The author's words were interesting, descriptive and
thought provoking. The reader pondered on her own goals and objectives
and moving forward. The fits in to the theme of this poem well.
Comment Written 25-Nov-2018
reply by the author on 25-Nov-2018
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My dear Harmony, you are a breath of fresh air and it's the polluted city; a cool drink of water and in a parched land. I appreciate your warm comments and your review a pleasure and an honor to write with you here.
Blessings,
Brother Badger
Comment from royowen
"Be quick to listen and slow to speak, sow to anger." Jame's 1;19. Is the theme of this great fee verse poem Darren. I think the impression a man leaves behind, is the measure of love and grace that lives on in the lives of others. I don't think there a reliable measure of heritage. I've only found in my life that these principles In my life have been left to me by few. Well done Darren, blessjngs, Roy
reply by the author on 25-Nov-2018
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"Be quick to listen and slow to speak, sow to anger." Jame's 1;19. Is the theme of this great fee verse poem Darren. I think the impression a man leaves behind, is the measure of love and grace that lives on in the lives of others. I don't think there a reliable measure of heritage. I've only found in my life that these principles In my life have been left to me by few. Well done Darren, blessjngs, Roy
Comment Written 24-Nov-2018
reply by the author on 25-Nov-2018
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Thank you so much for your warm, this mr. Owen I appreciate you were reviews and I hold you in high esteem here. A pleasure and an honor to ride with you here sir may the good Lord continue to bless you as you include scripture in your review I will claim Romans 8 chapter 28 which states that we know that all things work to the good for those who love God, and are called for his purpose. Which includes us.
Blessings,
Brother Badger
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As with you Darren, bless you, Roy
Comment from Sandra du Plessis
A very well-written 5-7-5 suite. We always have something we need to say even when we think we don't have anything to say. As soon as we start writing it all comes out naturally.
reply by the author on 25-Nov-2018
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A very well-written 5-7-5 suite. We always have something we need to say even when we think we don't have anything to say. As soon as we start writing it all comes out naturally.
Comment Written 24-Nov-2018
reply by the author on 25-Nov-2018
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That is a good way of putting it as when I wrote this it all came out naturally in a logical order. I really appreciate your comments and review.
Blessings,
Brother Badger
Comment from Liz O'Neill
It is quite artful. The way you carried a whole message in this poem is very skilled. I admire people who can make sense with a continuation of structured poetry. The limitations didn't seem to affect the rhythm. Communication is the key to everything here. I like the way you use capitals to emphasize your message o9f communication. You have communicate4d in many styles to many types of readers. We do improve ourselves by practicing different ways to communicate.This is well thought out.
reply by the author on 25-Nov-2018
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It is quite artful. The way you carried a whole message in this poem is very skilled. I admire people who can make sense with a continuation of structured poetry. The limitations didn't seem to affect the rhythm. Communication is the key to everything here. I like the way you use capitals to emphasize your message o9f communication. You have communicate4d in many styles to many types of readers. We do improve ourselves by practicing different ways to communicate.This is well thought out.
Comment Written 24-Nov-2018
reply by the author on 25-Nov-2018
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Thank you Liz I really appreciate your comments. You are reviews detailed structured and logical similar to the manner in which I wrote. I take it as a high compliment the way that you have structured this review and it warms my heart to know that it is Percy being perceived as something which is the stepping stone to even greater aspirations.
Blessings,
Brother Badger
Comment from Cranial Thinker
For one to sit in assurity and plot one's course to the star's that present themselves to everyone in plain open unadultratied honesty is of course the true difinition of absorbing the ticking of the hands of time simplifying every thing as life was intended to be...My Brother, you have begun anew and you have caused my being to feel elations jubilations on the highest of our dualities existance...This is a most wonderful eye opening write, thank you for sharing it...Cranial Thinker
reply by the author on 25-Nov-2018
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For one to sit in assurity and plot one's course to the star's that present themselves to everyone in plain open unadultratied honesty is of course the true difinition of absorbing the ticking of the hands of time simplifying every thing as life was intended to be...My Brother, you have begun anew and you have caused my being to feel elations jubilations on the highest of our dualities existance...This is a most wonderful eye opening write, thank you for sharing it...Cranial Thinker
Comment Written 24-Nov-2018
reply by the author on 25-Nov-2018
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Dear mr. Sticker, as usual your comments warm my heart but now more than ever you are able to ascertain Define and elaborate on the exact nuances of the meaning behind this therefore expanding both of our minds with my epiphany. I really appreciate your comments and I've see you evolving in your writing as well. Thanks so much your comments are deeply appreciated.
Blessings,
Brother Badger
Darren
Comment from tfawcus
I suppose that, by definition, writing poetry means leaving one's mark. Your poem expresses the desire that once the mark has been put down on the page there will be people who will lift it off and put it in their minds.
reply by the author on 25-Nov-2018
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I suppose that, by definition, writing poetry means leaving one's mark. Your poem expresses the desire that once the mark has been put down on the page there will be people who will lift it off and put it in their minds.
Comment Written 23-Nov-2018
reply by the author on 25-Nov-2018
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Well said, a great review to the point and I like how you said lift it off I really appreciate your comments, they help me understand how my writing is coming across to other people and that helps.
Blessings,
Brother Badger
Comment from meeshu
certainly an eclectic offering, with short punchy verses and font changes it is as much visual as aural. how to be famous 101. nice, Badger................meeshu
reply by the author on 25-Nov-2018
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certainly an eclectic offering, with short punchy verses and font changes it is as much visual as aural. how to be famous 101. nice, Badger................meeshu
Comment Written 23-Nov-2018
reply by the author on 25-Nov-2018
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Thank you that's a great review I really appreciate your comments. How to be famous 101 great title I think I would like to include that as the subtitle for this piece thank you so much for the comments.
Blessings,
Brother Badger
Comment from Sugarray77
Excellent poetry. I like the beginning ramble that primes the reader curiosity. Then you get to the point. Well done on building and putting things in a logical sequence. All the best.
Melissa
reply by the author on 25-Nov-2018
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Excellent poetry. I like the beginning ramble that primes the reader curiosity. Then you get to the point. Well done on building and putting things in a logical sequence. All the best.
Melissa
Comment Written 23-Nov-2018
reply by the author on 25-Nov-2018
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A distinct pleasure and honor to receive such a review from you. And honor to write with you here, and I really appreciate that you put logical sequence in your view because that is exactly what I intended being scientific minded thanks so much for your warm review very appreciated blessings,
Brother Badger
Comment from Bucketlist
Wow, Darren! You are being more introspective and creativity is working for you. I have worn my heart on my sleeve several times here. Once I faced the fear through needing to purge, it has set me freer than before. I can read a metamorphosis happening in you. Keep doing what you're doing, thanks for sharing.
Hugs, Trisha
reply by the author on 25-Nov-2018
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Wow, Darren! You are being more introspective and creativity is working for you. I have worn my heart on my sleeve several times here. Once I faced the fear through needing to purge, it has set me freer than before. I can read a metamorphosis happening in you. Keep doing what you're doing, thanks for sharing.
Hugs, Trisha
Comment Written 23-Nov-2018
reply by the author on 25-Nov-2018
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As usual even more so than ever your comments Touch of resonant note and certainly brighten my day. It is an awesome distinctive pleasure to have another writer Give me a review like that to let me know that I am on the right path. Thank you so much for your warm review and the generous Stars!
Warmly,
Brother Badger
