Perennials of War
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Comment from Sasha
Great job with this chapter. I like how you handled Anderson's feelings about Patricia, it was very believable. I hope Shana understands him better. I think the s'mores for desert was a terrific idea, they are my favorite too. I did't seer anything that needed fixing, correcting, or clarifying i this one.. You did a great job with this chapter.
reply by the author on 18-Nov-2018
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Great job with this chapter. I like how you handled Anderson's feelings about Patricia, it was very believable. I hope Shana understands him better. I think the s'mores for desert was a terrific idea, they are my favorite too. I did't seer anything that needed fixing, correcting, or clarifying i this one.. You did a great job with this chapter.
Comment Written 18-Nov-2018
reply by the author on 18-Nov-2018
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Thank you for the encouragement.
Comment from Gert sherwood
Hello Barb
a great chapter now we know the reason that Anderson decided he should divorce Emily and my feelings Shana is more and more willing to marry Anderson,wow then just like that you left me and I'm in suspense what the surprise that Zach has?
Gert
reply by the author on 18-Nov-2018
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Hello Barb
a great chapter now we know the reason that Anderson decided he should divorce Emily and my feelings Shana is more and more willing to marry Anderson,wow then just like that you left me and I'm in suspense what the surprise that Zach has?
Gert
Comment Written 18-Nov-2018
reply by the author on 18-Nov-2018
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Thank you for the kind review. Zack found something and thinks it and Shana need each other.
Comment from Sandra Stoner-Mitchell
That was excellent. I loved the sound of the s'mores, what a clever name, lol. At least Shana knows a little of what life was like for Drew while he was married to Patricia, and what Emily must have gone through. Such a sad waste of life. Now, what is this good news that Zachery has for Shana??? Well done again, my friend. :)) Sandra xx
reply by the author on 18-Nov-2018
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That was excellent. I loved the sound of the s'mores, what a clever name, lol. At least Shana knows a little of what life was like for Drew while he was married to Patricia, and what Emily must have gone through. Such a sad waste of life. Now, what is this good news that Zachery has for Shana??? Well done again, my friend. :)) Sandra xx
Comment Written 18-Nov-2018
reply by the author on 18-Nov-2018
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Thank you for the encouragement.
Comment from Mastery
Hi, Barbara. I must admit, I was somewhat surprised to see the same theme and plot under way that you have been working on for over a year now, it seems. Same character "Shauna" and her lost artifacts. But, it is a good chapter so keep on going as long as you can, I say. Bob
reply by the author on 18-Nov-2018
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Hi, Barbara. I must admit, I was somewhat surprised to see the same theme and plot under way that you have been working on for over a year now, it seems. Same character "Shauna" and her lost artifacts. But, it is a good chapter so keep on going as long as you can, I say. Bob
Comment Written 18-Nov-2018
reply by the author on 18-Nov-2018
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I only post about 500 words at a time, so yes it does go on FOREVER!!! I am almost finished with this story and ready to start another one. Thank you for dropping by.
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I'm sorry, Barb, but that is what you were saying when i was here weeks ago. You were wrapping it up. I personally would enjoy something new that begins with chapter one. Bob
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I think the final post will be around 2/10/19. I have it finished but, like I said only post about 500 words at a time. I guess you can wait until I start the new novel. It's about St. Louis. I have 10 chapters written.
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That will be great, Barbara. :) Bob
Comment from Sankey
This was a lovely chapter. Bob Hartson (Mastery) said why can't I give SIXES even with errors so here you go! SIXES plus a swag of suggestions and Spagarama!©G.C.Moore2015 Oops in the intro...Drew discuss(es) his marriage to Patricia.
"I feel like I'm being ganged up (on?)."
"All total, I think we live(d) as a married couple
reply by the author on 18-Nov-2018
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This was a lovely chapter. Bob Hartson (Mastery) said why can't I give SIXES even with errors so here you go! SIXES plus a swag of suggestions and Spagarama!©G.C.Moore2015 Oops in the intro...Drew discuss(es) his marriage to Patricia.
"I feel like I'm being ganged up (on?)."
"All total, I think we live(d) as a married couple
Comment Written 18-Nov-2018
reply by the author on 18-Nov-2018
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Thank you for the catches.
Comment from royowen
The boys are quite taken by Shana's culinary skills, as enhanced by Jeff's patted tummy, Anderson complaining he's only had one. They ask her where she obtained her skills, she tells them from her grandmother and mother, as all Jewish girls do. Zack comes later confessing he has good news. Good ending Barbara, well done, good scribing, blessings, Roy
Typo : Emily, so(,) who knows.
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reply by the author on 18-Nov-2018
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The boys are quite taken by Shana's culinary skills, as enhanced by Jeff's patted tummy, Anderson complaining he's only had one. They ask her where she obtained her skills, she tells them from her grandmother and mother, as all Jewish girls do. Zack comes later confessing he has good news. Good ending Barbara, well done, good scribing, blessings, Roy
Typo : Emily, so(,) who knows.
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Comment Written 18-Nov-2018
reply by the author on 18-Nov-2018
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I have fixed the error. Thank you for the catch.
Comment from tfawcus
Always good to end with a surprise in store! LOL
I've been looking forward to reading this next installment this. I like the way you use the initial dialogue about biscuits and dessert, then about the guitar playing, to put Anderson enough at his ease to start talking about the issues in his first marriage. The chapter hangs together very nicely.
Just one thing - isn't there always! - "I feel like I'm being ganged up" should read "I feel like I'm being ganged up on".
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reply by the author on 18-Nov-2018
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Always good to end with a surprise in store! LOL
I've been looking forward to reading this next installment this. I like the way you use the initial dialogue about biscuits and dessert, then about the guitar playing, to put Anderson enough at his ease to start talking about the issues in his first marriage. The chapter hangs together very nicely.
Just one thing - isn't there always! - "I feel like I'm being ganged up" should read "I feel like I'm being ganged up on".
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Comment Written 18-Nov-2018
reply by the author on 18-Nov-2018
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I have added 'on'. I have a bad habit of leaving the little words out and then when I read it, I read it as though it's there. Thank you for the catch.
