Perennials of War
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Comment from Sandra Stoner-Mitchell
This was a semi-serious, and fun chapter, Barbara. I loved the banter between the three of them. It's true, what Drew said, they are never alone. I think Shana does love Drew, but she also loves her father who she would hate to upset. She is in a dilemma, but one that will most likely be overcome if Drew has his way. Well done, my friend, loved this part. :)) Sandra xx
reply by the author on 12-Nov-2018
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This was a semi-serious, and fun chapter, Barbara. I loved the banter between the three of them. It's true, what Drew said, they are never alone. I think Shana does love Drew, but she also loves her father who she would hate to upset. She is in a dilemma, but one that will most likely be overcome if Drew has his way. Well done, my friend, loved this part. :)) Sandra xx
Comment Written 12-Nov-2018
reply by the author on 12-Nov-2018
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Thank you for the kind review. We are going to watch Shana do some growing from now on.
Comment from giraffmang
Hi there,
I think Shana makes a great point here. Anderson does appear to be very needy himself. Relationships borne of high pressure situations rarely stand the time.
Most of them wanted to make the little girls look too grownup - I think in this instance grown up should be two separate words.
Shana stood. "They just came from the oven. They're hot. Be careful or you'll burn yourself." - this struck me as a little redundant given Jeff's just taken them out.
reply by the author on 12-Nov-2018
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Hi there,
I think Shana makes a great point here. Anderson does appear to be very needy himself. Relationships borne of high pressure situations rarely stand the time.
Most of them wanted to make the little girls look too grownup - I think in this instance grown up should be two separate words.
Shana stood. "They just came from the oven. They're hot. Be careful or you'll burn yourself." - this struck me as a little redundant given Jeff's just taken them out.
Comment Written 12-Nov-2018
reply by the author on 12-Nov-2018
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I went to my dictionary for grown-up and it's hyphenated.I have rewritten the oven sentence. Thank you, once again for your help.
Comment from Sankey
More exciting too and fro. Still not sure where the romance is yet. She is still pretty stuck in Judaism. No spags and loved the little girl in the dress. Keep it up.
reply by the author on 11-Nov-2018
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More exciting too and fro. Still not sure where the romance is yet. She is still pretty stuck in Judaism. No spags and loved the little girl in the dress. Keep it up.
Comment Written 11-Nov-2018
reply by the author on 11-Nov-2018
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You will find the romance, I promise. LOL Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from Gert sherwood
Hello Barb
I don't believe what Jeff said that Anderson is so concerned for Shanan's protection.
I know that I like the feeling of Stan protecting me, it makes me feel secure.
Barb, there is one place where you wrote that I was wondering about--
"Drew." (( don't you mean Anderson))?
Shana chewed on her lower lip. There's no way we can overcome the Jewish/Gentile issue.
reply by the author on 11-Nov-2018
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Hello Barb
I don't believe what Jeff said that Anderson is so concerned for Shanan's protection.
I know that I like the feeling of Stan protecting me, it makes me feel secure.
Barb, there is one place where you wrote that I was wondering about--
"Drew." (( don't you mean Anderson))?
Shana chewed on her lower lip. There's no way we can overcome the Jewish/Gentile issue.
Comment Written 11-Nov-2018
reply by the author on 11-Nov-2018
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Yes, his name is Anderson, but his friends and family call him Drew. They have since the beginning of the novel. Thank you for the kind review.
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You are welcome, looks like the family likes to call him Anderson or Drew
I'm just wondering if someone who is new reading your novel, know that Anderson can be called by either name.
Gert
Comment from c_lucas
It looks as if Drew will have to rework his imagination. Shana in a swimsuit will destroy his imagination with a view of the real thing. This is very well written with very good imagery.
reply by the author on 11-Nov-2018
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It looks as if Drew will have to rework his imagination. Shana in a swimsuit will destroy his imagination with a view of the real thing. This is very well written with very good imagery.
Comment Written 11-Nov-2018
reply by the author on 11-Nov-2018
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LOL Could be but I have a feeling Drew doesn't care. LOL
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If that's the way you want to write it.
Comment from Sasha
I really enjoyed this chapter. Terrific dialogue, as always and I enjoyed the clever and humorous banter between Drew and his brother. He expressed his feelings very well and there is no way Shana can talk him out of how he feels about her.
reply by the author on 11-Nov-2018
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I really enjoyed this chapter. Terrific dialogue, as always and I enjoyed the clever and humorous banter between Drew and his brother. He expressed his feelings very well and there is no way Shana can talk him out of how he feels about her.
Comment Written 11-Nov-2018
reply by the author on 11-Nov-2018
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True Shana, I feel is in over her head. Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from Mustang Patty
Hi, Barbara,
So, I'm thinking Drew is going to offer to convert to Judaism. It's the only solution I can see and it happened a lot in the area where I grew up. My brother dated a Jewish girl, but when it looked like it was getting serious, her father sent her to upstate NY to go to some college.
My brother was heartbroken for a while, but he moved on. I often wonder what it would have been like though.
Shana has to realize Drew's love is huge, and she'd be foolish to walk away from it,
~MP~
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reply by the author on 11-Nov-2018
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Hi, Barbara,
So, I'm thinking Drew is going to offer to convert to Judaism. It's the only solution I can see and it happened a lot in the area where I grew up. My brother dated a Jewish girl, but when it looked like it was getting serious, her father sent her to upstate NY to go to some college.
My brother was heartbroken for a while, but he moved on. I often wonder what it would have been like though.
Shana has to realize Drew's love is huge, and she'd be foolish to walk away from it,
~MP~
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Comment Written 11-Nov-2018
reply by the author on 11-Nov-2018
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I am thinking we might need a miracle to get Shana to come to her sense. We'll just have to wait and see. Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from judiverse
Great chapter. Nice development about Shana buying the bathing suits and offering to teach Emily how to swim. Shana's still holding back because of the Jew-Gentile issue. Maybe she'll learn to get over it. Jeff certainly seems free to speak his mind to Drew. If the Mafia is still plotting, will it be safe for Shana to go swimming? One thing--I thought there might be some reference to Patricia in this, considering what just happened to her. Maybe it will come up later. judi
reply by the author on 11-Nov-2018
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Great chapter. Nice development about Shana buying the bathing suits and offering to teach Emily how to swim. Shana's still holding back because of the Jew-Gentile issue. Maybe she'll learn to get over it. Jeff certainly seems free to speak his mind to Drew. If the Mafia is still plotting, will it be safe for Shana to go swimming? One thing--I thought there might be some reference to Patricia in this, considering what just happened to her. Maybe it will come up later. judi
Comment Written 11-Nov-2018
reply by the author on 11-Nov-2018
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Patricia's story is coming up. I promise! I appreciate the kind review.
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You're very welcome. I hope the pressure at school has eased up a bit. judi
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It's getting another a second first grade teacher is out being treated for anxiety and depression. A prek teacher had a stroke and isn't dong well. A few others are trying to resign but they won't allow them to break their contract.
Comment from Ulla
So here goes another six. Well, I think Shana has to losen up as well. It's starting to get annoying. If she's that religious and traditional then the story has come to an end. Period. I give it a six for writing, but not for content. What I feel like saying to Shana is 'get a life' or go back to where you come from. End of. All best. Ulla:)))
reply by the author on 11-Nov-2018
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So here goes another six. Well, I think Shana has to losen up as well. It's starting to get annoying. If she's that religious and traditional then the story has come to an end. Period. I give it a six for writing, but not for content. What I feel like saying to Shana is 'get a life' or go back to where you come from. End of. All best. Ulla:)))
Comment Written 11-Nov-2018
reply by the author on 11-Nov-2018
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I think Shana is going to realize her real feeling before long. I really do, but when you been indoctrinated for that many years it won't just happen. Thank you for the kind and honest review.
Comment from SLMorrical
Awesome as always. I can see the interaction with the characters, and understand what they are thinking and feeling. I understand how a man can misunderstand protecting someone as loving someone. When a man loves a woman, and depending on the man, they want to protect that woman, and feel its their job to do so. Every chapter I have read of your story is believable, even though its fiction. Well done again. You have shown why you are at #8 on the rankings. Look forward to the next chapter.
reply by the author on 11-Nov-2018
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Awesome as always. I can see the interaction with the characters, and understand what they are thinking and feeling. I understand how a man can misunderstand protecting someone as loving someone. When a man loves a woman, and depending on the man, they want to protect that woman, and feel its their job to do so. Every chapter I have read of your story is believable, even though its fiction. Well done again. You have shown why you are at #8 on the rankings. Look forward to the next chapter.
Comment Written 11-Nov-2018
reply by the author on 11-Nov-2018
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Thank you for the encouraging review.
