A Moment of Sudden Understanding
The confession of a bad review23 total reviews
Comment from Y. M. Roger
Wow -- really enjoyed this write! It is very well structured to follow the 'confession' as well as the experience leading up to such...a very compelling essay, sir! I especially like your use of 'Erudite Fever' -- made me smile on a Monday morning!! :) ;) Thanx for sharing with everyone!! :) ;) Yvette -- P.S. Welcome back!! :)
Have listed below a few grammatical catches -- employ or ignore as you like. :) ;) ;)
"Then while riding" -- 'Then, while riding'
"resolution I learned increased" -- 'resolution, I learned, increased'
"I got from" -- 'I had gotten from' OR 'I had received from'
"For me, applying that act, the result of a persuasive cocktail, accepted from my new certainty, caused a condition" -- 'For me, applying that act - the result of a persuasive cocktail accepted from my new certainty - caused a condition'
"audience literary" -- 'audience's literary'
reply by the author on 12-Nov-2018
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Wow -- really enjoyed this write! It is very well structured to follow the 'confession' as well as the experience leading up to such...a very compelling essay, sir! I especially like your use of 'Erudite Fever' -- made me smile on a Monday morning!! :) ;) Thanx for sharing with everyone!! :) ;) Yvette -- P.S. Welcome back!! :)
Have listed below a few grammatical catches -- employ or ignore as you like. :) ;) ;)
"Then while riding" -- 'Then, while riding'
"resolution I learned increased" -- 'resolution, I learned, increased'
"I got from" -- 'I had gotten from' OR 'I had received from'
"For me, applying that act, the result of a persuasive cocktail, accepted from my new certainty, caused a condition" -- 'For me, applying that act - the result of a persuasive cocktail accepted from my new certainty - caused a condition'
"audience literary" -- 'audience's literary'
Comment Written 12-Nov-2018
reply by the author on 12-Nov-2018
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Grammer is my biggest problem, Yvette. I will make those corrections. I feared I ran off support by writing this piece. Thanks a bunch.
Phillip
Comment from Loredana
I hear what you say and I understand how hard it must be. I don't see many mistakes in this essay, though. I actually don't see mistakes at all. I'm a grammarian and a teacher who marks a lot. I use Grammarly when I write only though. It helps with checking before I save it. Showing our writing to the public has its ups and downs.
But don't stress. Famous authors have editors, so we can't compare ourselves to them.
reply by the author on 12-Nov-2018
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I hear what you say and I understand how hard it must be. I don't see many mistakes in this essay, though. I actually don't see mistakes at all. I'm a grammarian and a teacher who marks a lot. I use Grammarly when I write only though. It helps with checking before I save it. Showing our writing to the public has its ups and downs.
But don't stress. Famous authors have editors, so we can't compare ourselves to them.
Comment Written 12-Nov-2018
reply by the author on 12-Nov-2018
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Thanks a lot, Loredana. Yes, indeed, Showing writing to mean people who know grammar is your weakness is never good.
Phillip
Comment from apky
"It disgusted me to study and to realize that I had not grown as a writer." ~ This is far from the truth, Phillip. I've been on FanStory since February 2017 and began reading your work from then on till now. You were one of the first few "fans" I acquired here and still have. That is to say, I've followed your writing for more one and a half years. And I can tell from the bottom of my heart, dear friend: your writing has improved by leaps and bounds, and is still improving immensely. As witnessed by this very article now.
As they say, you've come along way. Simply keep going without beating yourself. It is of course always helpful and good to look at your own work with a critical eye. But you're allowed to pat yourself on the back too, for your great leap forward.
Because of a major (delete-the) change that occurred in my life, normal now relaxes me.
Keep it up!
reply by the author on 12-Nov-2018
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"It disgusted me to study and to realize that I had not grown as a writer." ~ This is far from the truth, Phillip. I've been on FanStory since February 2017 and began reading your work from then on till now. You were one of the first few "fans" I acquired here and still have. That is to say, I've followed your writing for more one and a half years. And I can tell from the bottom of my heart, dear friend: your writing has improved by leaps and bounds, and is still improving immensely. As witnessed by this very article now.
As they say, you've come along way. Simply keep going without beating yourself. It is of course always helpful and good to look at your own work with a critical eye. But you're allowed to pat yourself on the back too, for your great leap forward.
Because of a major (delete-the) change that occurred in my life, normal now relaxes me.
Keep it up!
Comment Written 12-Nov-2018
reply by the author on 12-Nov-2018
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Thanks a lot, Aki. I'm not the bragging type. For me, it's bad luck. But, to be honest, Aki, you inspired this piece. You have been a major influencer to my writing efforts while a few look forward to causing agony. One day, I think last week, I was getting crossed while reading your work. I was mentally exhausted. The words were not making sense to me and I wrote you explaining the many uses of your pronouns and I had trouble determining the main character. You did not respond to the note, so I believed you were offended after supporting me all this time. As a consequence, I wrote this piece. Don't put a lot of stock in taking it to heart because I don't have to heart to offend you. I needed something to write and this came easy. Forgive me, Aki. Because you are a sweet lady, the piece could have been a little callous, I thought. Right now, I have a doctor's appointment, so I have to get ready and catch the bus and train. I will review your piece when I return.
Phillip
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Yes, I got your note in my inbox, Phillip, and no, I wasn't at all offended. I just didn't know how to assist you with understanding my work - I know they are complicated especially when you miss a few chapters in between or when I take a long time to post the next chapter. The same thing happens to me with some writers here who write about genres I'm not familiar with, such as technological fantasy; I always get lost in the sequences or even gist of the story.
So don't worry if you can't review my chapters - I'll understand.
Warmest regards,
Aki
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It bothers me if I can't understand. I will work harder. The problem is me and I realize that, so thanks for your kindness. I should do better, that's all it is. The next person who has that problem, tell them to try harder, Aki. It won't kill them.
Phillip
Comment from Bill Schott
This essay, A Moment of Sudden Understanding, is so interesting as it follows your self-aware struggles to understand your own motivations, your audience of choice, and what improvements can be employed to make what is good - great.
reply by the author on 11-Nov-2018
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This essay, A Moment of Sudden Understanding, is so interesting as it follows your self-aware struggles to understand your own motivations, your audience of choice, and what improvements can be employed to make what is good - great.
Comment Written 11-Nov-2018
reply by the author on 11-Nov-2018
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Thanks, Bill, for reading, I've been trying to keep up with all the great writing here. I will become a fan of yours again, and see how well you continue to do.
Phillip
Comment from lyenochka
Such a great way to say it! And don't feel bad as we all have experienced "Erudite Fever." I think it's natural that we want to practice what we learn - I do anyway, because that's the only way the information sticks.
Thanks for sharing your learning here, Phillip!
reply by the author on 11-Nov-2018
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Such a great way to say it! And don't feel bad as we all have experienced "Erudite Fever." I think it's natural that we want to practice what we learn - I do anyway, because that's the only way the information sticks.
Thanks for sharing your learning here, Phillip!
Comment Written 11-Nov-2018
reply by the author on 11-Nov-2018
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Thanks for the corrections, Lyenochka. Your help is always welcome.
Phillip
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I removed my comments since you fixed the sentences (that first sentence, I copied the wrong part but you corrected the right verb) Great job!
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You always help me, Lyenochka. I trust you mean well. I'm lucky to know you. I'm not a sociable person. I enjoy this odyssey, learning from great people here.
Phillip
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I think lots of writers are not social. I consider myself an introvert myself but in writing, I'm more free to be myself. So thankful that I can be of help. Please be free to choose to accept and ignore my comments. You always have the final say on your works. I have learned a lot here, too.
Blessings always!
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You are kind, Lyenochka. Thanks.
Phillip
Comment from Sandra Stoner-Mitchell
I think you wrote an excellent piece here, Phillip, I couldn't fault it. I agree with you about practicing, but writing is also about enjoying it as well. If we are too wrapped up in getting things perfect, we lose the heart in what we are writing. It works both ways. I think you write from the heart, and I would much rather read something written that way than a clinical piece of cold, boring in your face writing. You keep doing what you are doing and enjoy yourself. Every word you put down, is furthering your knowledge anyway. Big hugs, my friend. :)) Sandra xxx
reply by the author on 11-Nov-2018
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I think you wrote an excellent piece here, Phillip, I couldn't fault it. I agree with you about practicing, but writing is also about enjoying it as well. If we are too wrapped up in getting things perfect, we lose the heart in what we are writing. It works both ways. I think you write from the heart, and I would much rather read something written that way than a clinical piece of cold, boring in your face writing. You keep doing what you are doing and enjoy yourself. Every word you put down, is furthering your knowledge anyway. Big hugs, my friend. :)) Sandra xxx
Comment Written 11-Nov-2018
reply by the author on 11-Nov-2018
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Thanks, Sandra, I pretty much got rid of a thought. Hopefully, my skin will grow another layer after learning others suffer the same error issue, which I think I make more of the easy ones.
Phillip
Comment from country ranch writer
When we think wemaremdoing so great we find out that we are just meadeocero, were not as smart as they claim wemaremandnreceivemso many rejections than we can count whomismright and who is wrong. How can we become a good writer when we are given nothing but lies.
reply by the author on 11-Nov-2018
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When we think wemaremdoing so great we find out that we are just meadeocero, were not as smart as they claim wemaremandnreceivemso many rejections than we can count whomismright and who is wrong. How can we become a good writer when we are given nothing but lies.
Comment Written 11-Nov-2018
reply by the author on 11-Nov-2018
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I'm beginning to think, thick-skinniness is part of the end result when reaching for objectives such as this one. As in all endeavors, for strange reasons, everyone will have a reason not to see you as you would like. We live in times where your worst feeling is viewed as a good thing. Thanks for reading, Country Ranch Writer.
Phillip
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So much for honesty on Fanstoryiesnpart
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So much for honesty on Fanstorians
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Wow, Country Ranch Writer.
Phillip
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Smiles
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Smiles.
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lol
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I can't argue with that, CRW.
Phillip
Comment from Heather Knight
Hi there,
We're all human, Phillip and major changes in our life affect the way we write. When I'm sad, I tend to stay away from my computer. But we have to keep at it. Practice makes perfect.
Thanks for sharing.
reply by the author on 11-Nov-2018
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Hi there,
We're all human, Phillip and major changes in our life affect the way we write. When I'm sad, I tend to stay away from my computer. But we have to keep at it. Practice makes perfect.
Thanks for sharing.
Comment Written 11-Nov-2018
reply by the author on 11-Nov-2018
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Thanks for reading, Maria. Believe it or not, I wish I write could write good enough to express anything I wanted. The problem is more of a frustration than sadness.
Phillip
Comment from oorwull
I think you had more than a moment of understanding. You seem to have recognized many points for improvement. I also get a feeling from time to time that I should not have rated a piece. I look at the "points" causing a decision to continue or retract. Didn't have that thought here.
Willie
reply by the author on 11-Nov-2018
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I think you had more than a moment of understanding. You seem to have recognized many points for improvement. I also get a feeling from time to time that I should not have rated a piece. I look at the "points" causing a decision to continue or retract. Didn't have that thought here.
Willie
Comment Written 11-Nov-2018
reply by the author on 11-Nov-2018
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I feel human knowing someone had the same feeling. Thanks for Oarwull.
Phillip
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Keep up the good work
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Thanks, Oorwull.
Phillip
Comment from Mastery
Excellent essay and analysis, Phillip. I fear I was one of those offering my unsolicited advice and my only aim was to help. You will learn to sift "the good stuff" from the luke warm offerings of advice though and further glean the good and worthwhile from the not-so-good. bless you, my friend. Bob
reply by the author on 11-Nov-2018
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Excellent essay and analysis, Phillip. I fear I was one of those offering my unsolicited advice and my only aim was to help. You will learn to sift "the good stuff" from the luke warm offerings of advice though and further glean the good and worthwhile from the not-so-good. bless you, my friend. Bob
Comment Written 11-Nov-2018
reply by the author on 11-Nov-2018
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Don't worry about regarding yourself as the subject of the piece, I think everyone has fallen into this arena at one time or another. I never set out to cause harm to anyone in any way, shape, form, or fashion. Sometimes things come about without a target. For me, I was lost for anything better to write. Come to think about it, the singer, Taylor Swift, Rap artists, and young entertainers today do that sort of thing. I never envisage me doing such a thing. Wow. I think we are on to something, Bob.
Phillip
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:) Bob
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Your corrections are always welcome, Bob
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Thank you, my friend. Bob
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No problem, Bob. I doing the best that I know.
Phillip
