A Moment of Sudden Understanding
The confession of a bad review23 total reviews
Comment from JudyE
This is very well-written so I do hope you never give up on your writing. Grammar can be learnt, or you can employ an editor if need be, but writing interesting content is another matter. Everyone misses small points in their own work. I think, too, you need to read the reviews, think about them, then decide if the remarks are justified or not, because not all may be.
reply by the author on 21-Aug-2019
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This is very well-written so I do hope you never give up on your writing. Grammar can be learnt, or you can employ an editor if need be, but writing interesting content is another matter. Everyone misses small points in their own work. I think, too, you need to read the reviews, think about them, then decide if the remarks are justified or not, because not all may be.
Comment Written 21-Aug-2019
reply by the author on 21-Aug-2019
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It's hard for me to read my previous writing. The writing was very poor and I don't remember most of them. I struggled because of the grammar which I'm working on now. Sentence patterns, in particular, is giving me heck. Thanks for reading, Judy. You are encouraging.
Phillip
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You're welcome.
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Sure.
Comment from Dawn Munro
typo - add an 's' to Ribbon(s).
First of all, I don't think this is poor writing at all! Why do you say so (in your first paragraph)? I've seen much worse, and we all start somewhere. Practice is what works, and reading good authors, and I'm sure you know this... But saying what you did within that first paragraph might put some reviewers off.
I had to smile at your description of what you called "Erudite Fever" too -- I doubt there's a writer alive that hasn't experienced it at one time or another.
Well done.
reply by the author on 03-May-2019
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typo - add an 's' to Ribbon(s).
First of all, I don't think this is poor writing at all! Why do you say so (in your first paragraph)? I've seen much worse, and we all start somewhere. Practice is what works, and reading good authors, and I'm sure you know this... But saying what you did within that first paragraph might put some reviewers off.
I had to smile at your description of what you called "Erudite Fever" too -- I doubt there's a writer alive that hasn't experienced it at one time or another.
Well done.
Comment Written 03-May-2019
reply by the author on 03-May-2019
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Thanks for the encouragement, Dawn. When someone reads an early post of mine, it straightens me up out of the funk I've developed from not writing. I have a lot of respect for the writers here. Your words mean a lot to me.
Phillip
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You're very welcome.
Comment from Sally Law
I just saw that you fanned me so I thought I would check you out. This was painfully honest and raw. I enjoyed it because the key to success in writing is the willingness to learn from others and learn from mistakes. I love to write and write every day. I am blind--most people on FanStory don't know this. We all have things that can limit us.
My advice, if I may. Stay with it. Write every chance you get whether you post it or not. I log all my writings on an IPad Pro Notebook. I am predominantly a prose short works writer, and secondly, a poet. Prose comes more naturally to me, so I give myself more to prose.
Thanks for fanning me and I hope to see more of your writing in the days ahead.
All my best with kind regards,
Sally :+)
reply by the author on 31-Mar-2019
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I just saw that you fanned me so I thought I would check you out. This was painfully honest and raw. I enjoyed it because the key to success in writing is the willingness to learn from others and learn from mistakes. I love to write and write every day. I am blind--most people on FanStory don't know this. We all have things that can limit us.
My advice, if I may. Stay with it. Write every chance you get whether you post it or not. I log all my writings on an IPad Pro Notebook. I am predominantly a prose short works writer, and secondly, a poet. Prose comes more naturally to me, so I give myself more to prose.
Thanks for fanning me and I hope to see more of your writing in the days ahead.
All my best with kind regards,
Sally :+)
Comment Written 30-Mar-2019
reply by the author on 31-Mar-2019
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Thanks, Sally for checking me out. To be honest, I feel as if I'm going backward with the writing journey. But your kindness and thoughtfulness have encouraged me to view my efforts differently. Also, your work is excellent even with your condition. I appreciate your time.
Phillip
Comment from Sasha
Don't take it personally but drop 'the' in this sentence "Because of a major the change ..." I am the worst when it comes to using correct grammar. No matter how much time I spend editing, I miss all the missing comas and the too many comas I have used. I think of myself as a lost cause and turned to writing Rambles with my own rules at the top. For some strange reason it caught on and I have written dozens of Rambles that have been well received.
reply by the author on 14-Dec-2018
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Don't take it personally but drop 'the' in this sentence "Because of a major the change ..." I am the worst when it comes to using correct grammar. No matter how much time I spend editing, I miss all the missing comas and the too many comas I have used. I think of myself as a lost cause and turned to writing Rambles with my own rules at the top. For some strange reason it caught on and I have written dozens of Rambles that have been well received.
Comment Written 14-Dec-2018
reply by the author on 14-Dec-2018
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I'm not a strong writer, so don't worry about correcting me. I need the help. Thanks, Sasha.
Phillip
Comment from royowen
To coin a phrase. "I'm only as good as my next work", to a baseballer, "I'm only as good as my next inning".
The truth is, although we walk sometimes on "ego" inducements, that same road can be really rocky. Since joining Fanstory, my writing has grown, (I hope) but I think the potential and gifting has to be the there already. But self chastisement and praise are a funny mix, one debases, the other exalts, a toxic mix! Well done, congratulations, you're human, none of us can be high handed. But cheer up, I'm your friend, we share a common journey. Bless you, Roy
reply by the author on 14-Nov-2018
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To coin a phrase. "I'm only as good as my next work", to a baseballer, "I'm only as good as my next inning".
The truth is, although we walk sometimes on "ego" inducements, that same road can be really rocky. Since joining Fanstory, my writing has grown, (I hope) but I think the potential and gifting has to be the there already. But self chastisement and praise are a funny mix, one debases, the other exalts, a toxic mix! Well done, congratulations, you're human, none of us can be high handed. But cheer up, I'm your friend, we share a common journey. Bless you, Roy
Comment Written 14-Nov-2018
reply by the author on 14-Nov-2018
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Wow, Roy. Cleary, your skill with a word is encouraging. Thanks,
Phillip
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Thank you, go well dear friend.
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Thanks.
Comment from Thomas Bowling
The mistakes that hurt most were the ones I knew but didn't study my work before posting the piece.
There are a lot of these. I was review by someone who said I didn't put in enough information about my main character. I explained the when I wrote a novel, I gave very little information when the character was introduced, then added more over time. That's the way it is when you meet someone. She reviewed the next chapter and said I still didn't completely flesh out the character.
reply by the author on 13-Nov-2018
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The mistakes that hurt most were the ones I knew but didn't study my work before posting the piece.
There are a lot of these. I was review by someone who said I didn't put in enough information about my main character. I explained the when I wrote a novel, I gave very little information when the character was introduced, then added more over time. That's the way it is when you meet someone. She reviewed the next chapter and said I still didn't completely flesh out the character.
Comment Written 13-Nov-2018
reply by the author on 13-Nov-2018
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I clearly understand the character's intro, although I learned later than you guys. It's what help make the story more engaging, I think.
Phillip
Comment from robyn corum
Phillip,
One of the things I like so much about you, dear friend, is your humility and your commitment to your craft. If only everyone here were so like-minded! Wow.
We could really open up so many powerful dialogues and really start some amazing conversations on how to help each other grow as writers. *smile* As it is, everyone is just too scared of saying something that will scorch tender nerves and earn them a blistering. ha!
I think you sell yourself short, of course, as usual. But that is part of what makes you, YOU. Keep doing you, Phillip, and I'll keep reading -- well, as often as I can, anyway, now that my second grandgirl has entered my life. --sigh--
Thanks for sharing! Have a marvelous week!
reply by the author on 13-Nov-2018
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Phillip,
One of the things I like so much about you, dear friend, is your humility and your commitment to your craft. If only everyone here were so like-minded! Wow.
We could really open up so many powerful dialogues and really start some amazing conversations on how to help each other grow as writers. *smile* As it is, everyone is just too scared of saying something that will scorch tender nerves and earn them a blistering. ha!
I think you sell yourself short, of course, as usual. But that is part of what makes you, YOU. Keep doing you, Phillip, and I'll keep reading -- well, as often as I can, anyway, now that my second grandgirl has entered my life. --sigh--
Thanks for sharing! Have a marvelous week!
Comment Written 13-Nov-2018
reply by the author on 13-Nov-2018
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I'm sure your life or domain requires you to alter, amend, or adjust to its manner. I know mine has and this writing business is no game either. For instance, I think I've grown another layer of skin. Feedback from my attempt to keep up with the "Big Dogs" or you guys draw in the piranhas to my failed efforts. On one of my pieces, their sharp teeth ripped into me nearly reaching the bone. If it were not for that extra layer of skin, my, my, my. Can you imagine the damage it would have had?
Phillip
Comment from Mustang Patty
Hi, Phillip,
Thank you for sharing this personal journey with us. If nothing else, I was informed of how much you yearn to write well.
You are on the right track. You need to write and study and READ. Read your favorite authors and then branch out into different authors.
You've already come a long way.
MP
reply by the author on 13-Nov-2018
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Hi, Phillip,
Thank you for sharing this personal journey with us. If nothing else, I was informed of how much you yearn to write well.
You are on the right track. You need to write and study and READ. Read your favorite authors and then branch out into different authors.
You've already come a long way.
MP
Comment Written 13-Nov-2018
reply by the author on 13-Nov-2018
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Now, I ready do appreciate those words, Patty. That, I'm sure, took a lot to say. I've never heard a compliment as sweet as that from you. I think you better go and rinse your mouth out right away. That kind of behavior will make your tongue turn rainbow-like.
Phillip
Comment from jack silver
Ha! ha! Have something similar. My Pet Peeve is people telling me I made a whole lot of grammatical errors (Not spelling)... And guess what they can't even provide me 1 example. Great if I didn't notice it before... How am I going to know what to fix when I don't even know what I am supposed to look for. I have a number of disabilities. Sensory overload. I get easily stressed out. So trying to find errors like this... Impossible. And guess what I get super stressed. So yeah non-specific reviews are not helpful! What do you think? Fair point eh? And when I respond it is very difficult to hold back... When I reply I step back and look at my replies so they can't say I am attacking their reviews. I wonder how many other writers on this site have the same views. Other times I think some are trying to provoke.
As you can tell I have been holding these thoughts in for a while.
Anyway, this sort of thing gets all of the writers on fanstory thinking. Well said.
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Jack
reply by the author on 13-Nov-2018
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Ha! ha! Have something similar. My Pet Peeve is people telling me I made a whole lot of grammatical errors (Not spelling)... And guess what they can't even provide me 1 example. Great if I didn't notice it before... How am I going to know what to fix when I don't even know what I am supposed to look for. I have a number of disabilities. Sensory overload. I get easily stressed out. So trying to find errors like this... Impossible. And guess what I get super stressed. So yeah non-specific reviews are not helpful! What do you think? Fair point eh? And when I respond it is very difficult to hold back... When I reply I step back and look at my replies so they can't say I am attacking their reviews. I wonder how many other writers on this site have the same views. Other times I think some are trying to provoke.
As you can tell I have been holding these thoughts in for a while.
Anyway, this sort of thing gets all of the writers on fanstory thinking. Well said.
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Jack
Comment Written 13-Nov-2018
reply by the author on 13-Nov-2018
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Thanks, Jack.
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no probs. As you can probably tell I've needed to get that out.
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Hahahaha!
Phillip
Comment from Spitfire
One of your best writings yet, Phillip. Excellent opening sentence followed by a clear example in paragraph two. You can learn the grammar part, but having a good story is more important than the technical aspects, I feel. Great use of hyperbole with the swollen head.
yet the writer's work was above my level of writing experience--I understand this. It's true for many of the reviewer's on site who haven't studied the craft. Brave of you to admit it.
I don't judge poetry much because it's not my expertise.
A Six rating on this and I hope other writers can analyze their efforts as well as you do.
reply by the author on 13-Nov-2018
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One of your best writings yet, Phillip. Excellent opening sentence followed by a clear example in paragraph two. You can learn the grammar part, but having a good story is more important than the technical aspects, I feel. Great use of hyperbole with the swollen head.
yet the writer's work was above my level of writing experience--I understand this. It's true for many of the reviewer's on site who haven't studied the craft. Brave of you to admit it.
I don't judge poetry much because it's not my expertise.
A Six rating on this and I hope other writers can analyze their efforts as well as you do.
Comment Written 13-Nov-2018
reply by the author on 13-Nov-2018
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Thanks, Shari.
Phillip
