Curiouser & Curiouser
A peculiar exchange student17 total reviews
Comment from Loredana
Absolutely great!!! I didn't expect the 'Mars' part. I thought maybe from a completely far away country, but not another planet. It's amazing how these short fictions have the potential to turn into longer fictions.
One comment, I would change 'in Mars' to 'on Mars' as she's 'on' the planet. The rest is absolutely great.
reply by the author on 16-Nov-2018
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Absolutely great!!! I didn't expect the 'Mars' part. I thought maybe from a completely far away country, but not another planet. It's amazing how these short fictions have the potential to turn into longer fictions.
One comment, I would change 'in Mars' to 'on Mars' as she's 'on' the planet. The rest is absolutely great.
Comment Written 11-Nov-2018
reply by the author on 16-Nov-2018
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Thanks so much for reading and for your generous rating.
Comment from Bucketlist
This is my best guess, either this is a parity of Mork and Mindy, or a from a child's fairy tale Alice in Wonderland. Either way it reads like a conversation I'd have with another member of my family! Thanks for sharing,
Hugs, Trisha
reply by the author on 16-Nov-2018
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This is my best guess, either this is a parity of Mork and Mindy, or a from a child's fairy tale Alice in Wonderland. Either way it reads like a conversation I'd have with another member of my family! Thanks for sharing,
Hugs, Trisha
Comment Written 11-Nov-2018
reply by the author on 16-Nov-2018
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Thanks so much for reading.
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Welcome back, no problem
Comment from Pearl Edwards
You nailed it with this conversation Maria, it certainly would be tiring, all those questions. I particularly enjoyed the explanation of the cup of tea. Well done.
cheers
valda
reply by the author on 16-Nov-2018
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You nailed it with this conversation Maria, it certainly would be tiring, all those questions. I particularly enjoyed the explanation of the cup of tea. Well done.
cheers
valda
Comment Written 11-Nov-2018
reply by the author on 16-Nov-2018
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Thanks so much for reading.
Comment from Jim Hirtle
Flawless flow. Never a doubt as to who was speaking, both characters exposing unique thoughts. I wanted to keep reading but a little disappointed the antagonist was a Martian.
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reply by the author on 16-Nov-2018
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Flawless flow. Never a doubt as to who was speaking, both characters exposing unique thoughts. I wanted to keep reading but a little disappointed the antagonist was a Martian.
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The highest and the lowest rating are not included in calculations.
Comment Written 10-Nov-2018
reply by the author on 16-Nov-2018
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Thanks so much for reading.
Comment from pbomar1115
You write the cleverest shorts as a routine. After all this time you showed me what consistency and practice does. I just notice that this is a "Dialogue Only Writing Contest." Good luck, I hope you win.
Phillip
reply by the author on 16-Nov-2018
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You write the cleverest shorts as a routine. After all this time you showed me what consistency and practice does. I just notice that this is a "Dialogue Only Writing Contest." Good luck, I hope you win.
Phillip
Comment Written 09-Nov-2018
reply by the author on 16-Nov-2018
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Thanks so much for reading.
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You're welcome.
Comment from Sandra du Plessis
A very well-written dialogue between a mother and her child when the inquisitive child asks question about everything around him and mom just have to find acceptable answers.
reply by the author on 16-Nov-2018
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A very well-written dialogue between a mother and her child when the inquisitive child asks question about everything around him and mom just have to find acceptable answers.
Comment Written 09-Nov-2018
reply by the author on 16-Nov-2018
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Thanks so much for reading.
Comment from Jannypan (Jan)
This is a fun contest entry, Maria. I enjoyed reading it. You did a good job with the prompt. I never expected the dialogue to be between the woman and one from Mars. But it works. Sounds like Mars kids are inquisitive like Earth kids. Thanks for sharing and best wishes. Jan
reply by the author on 16-Nov-2018
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This is a fun contest entry, Maria. I enjoyed reading it. You did a good job with the prompt. I never expected the dialogue to be between the woman and one from Mars. But it works. Sounds like Mars kids are inquisitive like Earth kids. Thanks for sharing and best wishes. Jan
Comment Written 08-Nov-2018
reply by the author on 16-Nov-2018
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Thanks so much for reading.
Comment from BeasPeas
So this is a little story about an interplanetary exchange student from Mars. Clever and cute. One day we may have some sort of exchange in the time machine. Sounds exhausting. Good luck in the dialogue contest. Marilyn
reply by the author on 16-Nov-2018
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So this is a little story about an interplanetary exchange student from Mars. Clever and cute. One day we may have some sort of exchange in the time machine. Sounds exhausting. Good luck in the dialogue contest. Marilyn
Comment Written 08-Nov-2018
reply by the author on 16-Nov-2018
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Thanks so much for reading.
Comment from Ulla
Hi Maria Jose this is a great entry and a great story through dialogue only. But you've got a problem:
I finished my shower. Eh? Why are you sitting on top of the television? I'm afraid you can't have : 'I finished my shower.' It has to go. Somehow you have to show in dialogue that you've got out of the shower.
What about something like this: My word, why are you sitting on top of the television? I've only been away five minutes and now this.
I would hate to see you disqualified. It's a great entry.
Good luck. Ulla:)))
reply by the author on 16-Nov-2018
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Hi Maria Jose this is a great entry and a great story through dialogue only. But you've got a problem:
I finished my shower. Eh? Why are you sitting on top of the television? I'm afraid you can't have : 'I finished my shower.' It has to go. Somehow you have to show in dialogue that you've got out of the shower.
What about something like this: My word, why are you sitting on top of the television? I've only been away five minutes and now this.
I would hate to see you disqualified. It's a great entry.
Good luck. Ulla:)))
Comment Written 08-Nov-2018
reply by the author on 16-Nov-2018
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Thanks for reading and for your suggestion.
Comment from Teri7
Maria! lol This is just too cute what you have penned for the Dialogue Only Writing contest. You used great descriptive words that had me interesting from start to finish. The imagery you chose went well with your words. Best wishes in the contest my friend! love and blessings, Teri
reply by the author on 16-Nov-2018
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Maria! lol This is just too cute what you have penned for the Dialogue Only Writing contest. You used great descriptive words that had me interesting from start to finish. The imagery you chose went well with your words. Best wishes in the contest my friend! love and blessings, Teri
Comment Written 08-Nov-2018
reply by the author on 16-Nov-2018
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Thanks so much for reading.
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you are so welcome!
