Comment from Donka Kristeva

Excellent

Amen! This talks of heaven and its permanent joy-- in being in the presence of God. As it says in your notes, we can find harmony and peace here on earth. It is to reach out to Jesus our Saviour who is always with us.

 Comment Written 08-Nov-2018

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reply by the author on 09-Nov-2018

Thank you so much for the excellent review and I am glad the poem resonated so strongly for you, validating the work I put into it. I really wanted to get across this sense of looking beyond the physical and the man made to reach the sublime and the spiritual, the eternal. I appreciate the comments and perspective estory

Comment from Dolly'sPoems

Excellent

There is great imagery here of an ideal dream place for us all to rest and have peace, I liked your thoughts, a joy to read, churched filled with sunlight sounds wonderful, love Dolly x

 Comment Written 08-Nov-2018

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reply by the author on 09-Nov-2018

Thanks so much for the excellent review and your wonderful comments supporting this poem. I am glad you enjoyed it and found it so uplifting. I really wanted this to have a hopeful, positive feel. Glad you enjoyed the imagery...estory

Comment from rama devi

Excellent

Nice imagery. Unique voicing. Fine free verse style. Definitely hopeful.
I love your intent of inclusiveness and unity. Fine flow and tone.

Some suggestions:

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Where one can see the stars
And where one can listen to the sea,


Suggest trimming out WHERE ONE CAN repeat so it reads:


Where one can see the stars
And listen to the sea,

(to me, it sounds better read aloud--tighter, more polished).


Here, the repetition works poetically well (and nice phonics of S and L sounds):

A light illuminates a city made of glass,
A city made of glass
Like gold

I like the AHA effect of the closing lines:

Somewhere passed the last exit,
The last planet in the sky


The tone and tenor of sublime. Bravo.

Enjoyed.

Warmly, rd

 Comment Written 07-Nov-2018

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reply by the author on 07-Nov-2018

Thanks as always for the comments and suggestions supporting my poetry, I am glad you enjoyed it and found it inspiring, I really intended it as a simple piece of reflecting on the hope of the resurrection, eternal life, reuniting with lost loved ones and peace and harmony. The main thing about the poem that I wanted to get across was the need to look beyond the physical and the man made, to attain these things. The tone and tenor of sublime, that describes it perfectly. thanks again, estory

reply by rama devi on 07-Nov-2018

:-))))

Comment from patcelaw

Excellent

Being one who is losing my visual health, I am always so excited to know that one sweet day, when I am in the heavenly Kingdom, my sight will be perfect. Keep writing such lovely words of encouragement. Patricia

 Comment Written 06-Nov-2018

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reply by the author on 07-Nov-2018

Thanks so much for the excellent review and your wonderful perspective on the poem. I am glad that you enjoyed it and that it meant so much to you personally; rarely do poems make this kind of connection, and I think its encouraging that one of my poems was able to be so uplifting for you. estory

Comment from Six-Star Writer

Excellent

Reminds me of the song Somewhere Over the Rainbow. I like that movie, though it's very disturbing. But the reason I gave this 5 stars was for the poem's few lines. I liked the planet reference.

 Comment Written 06-Nov-2018

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reply by the author on 07-Nov-2018

Thanks so much for the five stars and your perspective on this poem. I am glad that you found it upbeat, and had a connection with at least one of those images. estory

reply by Six-Star Writer on 07-Nov-2018

Comment from royowen

Excellent

Of course, people are the church. I can remember the time before I was just another agnostic going about my daily business, and the atmosphere of Heaven surrounded me, it was pure, greater than the wildest imaginings of man, Joy beyond imagination, all I know is it certainly won't be quiet, bliss isn't sufficient to describe it, al I know is, eternity is a long time, mine lasted seconds. Scripture says, "Eye has never seen, ear has never heard, nor mind ever conceived, the things God has prepared for those that love Him." 1Corinthians 2:9. Be prepared to be surprised. Beautifully written my friend, I have never written on what my version of Heaven is. Blessings, Roy

 Comment Written 06-Nov-2018

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reply by the author on 07-Nov-2018

Thanks so much for this excellent review and your perspective on the poem. I am so glad the poem was able to make a connection with you so personally on this level. That is what writing is all about, and I found your comments very interesting and uplifting, in step with my poem. The main thing I wanted was something upbeat, hopeful, and something looking beyond the physical and the man made. estory

reply by royowen on 07-Nov-2018

Well done with this

Comment from Ulla

Excellent

Hi estory, yes I liked your free style poem painting a wonderful picture of what you believe is to come in the afterlife. What will happen after we leave our mortal soul back on earth. I must say I don't believe in any of it, but that doesn't mean I don't enjoy reading your lovely poem. I'm glad you have the belief. All the best. Ulla:)))

 Comment Written 06-Nov-2018

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reply by the author on 07-Nov-2018

Thanks so much for the excellent review and your perspective on the poem. For me, life without faith is a life without hope. What is this life about, if not for the hope of the afterlife? Without God, and love, life is a meaningless struggle across a hollow landscape. But through love, that struggle is transformed into a struggle out of the physical and into the spiritual, out of the constraints of life and death into the eternal, and out of the despair and into the hope. Out of sin and into purity. That is the message of Christ. estory

Comment from tfawcus

Excellent

I guess we all have our different concepts of the afterlife, if there is such a thing. You have articulated yours well in this poem, capturing something of the ethereal essence of the unknown - a poem filled both with hope and promise.

 Comment Written 06-Nov-2018

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reply by the author on 07-Nov-2018

Thanks so much for your excellent review and your perspective on this poem. I am glad you found it so hopeful. estory

Comment from Teri7

Excellent

This is a very nice and very well written poem about somewhere. You used very good descriptive words and very good imagery of what is going on with your words also. Blessings, Teri

 Comment Written 06-Nov-2018

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reply by the author on 07-Nov-2018

Thanks so much for the five stars and your wonderful comments supporting this poem. I am glad you enjoyed it and found it so colorful and uplifting. I appreciate the support, estory

Comment from Kelly Hanna

Excellent

Hi estory. I enjoyed this free verse. You describe a serene setting in your poem. You used the senses of seeing and hearing in the Beginning, which helped set up a nice descriptive scene. Your version of heaven seems peaceful and quiet. This was a nice, relaxing read. Good job!

 Comment Written 06-Nov-2018

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reply by the author on 07-Nov-2018

Thanks so much for the excellent review and all your comments supporting this piece. I am glad you enjoyed it and found it so uplifting, and peaceful. The main thing I wanted to convey is hope, and a need to see beyond the physical to the spiritual, a need to get beyond the man made and into the Godly. estory