Guilt By Association, Chapter Three
Matters of the heart unfold.12 total reviews
Comment from Rosemary Everson1
Well, I read it even though it was the ending of chapter 3. It was a great story in the making or while it lasted. Good Job Sally! What happened that it quit? No one writing or interested?
reply by the author on 03-Dec-2019
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Well, I read it even though it was the ending of chapter 3. It was a great story in the making or while it lasted. Good Job Sally! What happened that it quit? No one writing or interested?
Comment Written 03-Dec-2019
reply by the author on 03-Dec-2019
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FanStory cancelled the contest due to lack of entries, I think. They stopped offering this kind of contest. I had fun, not was I upset at all. I learned so much. Thanks for the wonderful review and kindness. Sally xoxo
Comment from Liberty Justice
LOVELY descriptions of flowers and nature. It is so true that people can be charged or seen as being guilty by association, merely by the company they keep. Your characters are very dramatic and interesting. I just gave you my thumbs up that launched you into a 1st place tie, right now. Good luck. Check some of mine out also and my 2 books in my profile. lolol liberty justice
reply by the author on 02-Dec-2018
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LOVELY descriptions of flowers and nature. It is so true that people can be charged or seen as being guilty by association, merely by the company they keep. Your characters are very dramatic and interesting. I just gave you my thumbs up that launched you into a 1st place tie, right now. Good luck. Check some of mine out also and my 2 books in my profile. lolol liberty justice
Comment Written 02-Dec-2018
reply by the author on 02-Dec-2018
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Thank you so much, Liberty, for the excellent review and kind support! I will check out your writing as soon as I am able. I hope you are well and good and blessed with Christmas joy!
All my best,
Sally
Comment from country ranch writer
Nice photo for this story things are starting to heat up on both sides here and hope things don't get out of control anytime soon.
reply by the author on 09-Nov-2018
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Nice photo for this story things are starting to heat up on both sides here and hope things don't get out of control anytime soon.
Comment Written 08-Nov-2018
reply by the author on 09-Nov-2018
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Thank you for giving my long read your attention! I appreciate you so much! Matters of the heart always come to a boil sooner or later. Stay tuned!
All my best,
Sal
Comment from DonandVicki
I haven't read or reviewed much Spiritual Fiction on this web site, It is very refreshing to do so. I wish there was more of it. Thank you. Don and Vicki.
reply by the author on 08-Nov-2018
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I haven't read or reviewed much Spiritual Fiction on this web site, It is very refreshing to do so. I wish there was more of it. Thank you. Don and Vicki.
Comment Written 08-Nov-2018
reply by the author on 08-Nov-2018
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Thank you Don and Vicki that means so much to much! I am so glad you enjoyed my novella. Most of my works have a God theme or humor. I enjoy writing, period. I hope you are both well and good!
Sally
Comment from jeanne2011
Top notch. Very well written and intriguing story that held my interest. At first I thought maybe it was a little slow, but it really started to pop when Clovis came on the scene. I like your descriptions, I like your setting and I like the plot that you have set up so far. I will become a fan so I can read the next chapter.
reply by the author on 08-Nov-2018
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Top notch. Very well written and intriguing story that held my interest. At first I thought maybe it was a little slow, but it really started to pop when Clovis came on the scene. I like your descriptions, I like your setting and I like the plot that you have set up so far. I will become a fan so I can read the next chapter.
Comment Written 08-Nov-2018
reply by the author on 08-Nov-2018
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Thank you Jeanne! It was so good of you to stop by! I appreciate the review and kind comments. I hope when you have time you can check out chapter one and two.
All my best,
Sally
Comment from heart of Lou
Great story! I think I will have to back and read the beginning of this, but I do wonder how everything will go, now that one of the witnesses is doing an about-face. Meeting a twin for the first time would be exciting! As a child, I used to wish I had a twin so that I'd always have someone my own age to play with.
reply by the author on 07-Nov-2018
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Great story! I think I will have to back and read the beginning of this, but I do wonder how everything will go, now that one of the witnesses is doing an about-face. Meeting a twin for the first time would be exciting! As a child, I used to wish I had a twin so that I'd always have someone my own age to play with.
Comment Written 07-Nov-2018
reply by the author on 07-Nov-2018
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Thank you so much Lou for your kind review and interest. I value your opinion so much! Chapter one actually won first place and chapter two, second. Number two was too long and I see that now. FanStory has a hard time overall with long pieces, even novellas. I thought chapter three was just right. What do you think a out the length?
All my best,
Sal
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I think the length is perfect. I made the same mistake in the beginning and was quickly told in no uncertain terms that it's too long. :) It says you can post up to 6000 I think, but most people don't want to review long pieces.
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I agree. Thank you!
Comment from Nanny 6
This is a great chapter. It shows the characters personalities and emotions clearly. Your description of the cabin where Clovis is holed up brings a vivid picture to the mind of the reader... I anticipate what happens next... good job!
Judy
reply by the author on 06-Nov-2018
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This is a great chapter. It shows the characters personalities and emotions clearly. Your description of the cabin where Clovis is holed up brings a vivid picture to the mind of the reader... I anticipate what happens next... good job!
Judy
Comment Written 06-Nov-2018
reply by the author on 06-Nov-2018
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Thank you, Nanny! I appreciate your review and comments so much! I am enjoying this novelette and I am glad you are too! Clovis is a real mess, is he not?
All my best,
Sally
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Yes he is. I?m enjoying it too, I?m thinking that 5 chapters isn?t enough. I?m really enjoying your story Sally
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I am so honored! Thanks, again! Sal :+)
Comment from jules4jesus
wow what lovely writing i loved the way you painted the scene of the road that they were on and the hopes of the son and the friendship of the partner loving him like a son then it twisted and you get a detective and a crook its briilliant i struggle with stories a little but whats hard next year for my writers group i have to do a whos done it without revealing who it was would love to read the whole story
reply by the author on 05-Nov-2018
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wow what lovely writing i loved the way you painted the scene of the road that they were on and the hopes of the son and the friendship of the partner loving him like a son then it twisted and you get a detective and a crook its briilliant i struggle with stories a little but whats hard next year for my writers group i have to do a whos done it without revealing who it was would love to read the whole story
Comment Written 05-Nov-2018
reply by the author on 05-Nov-2018
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Thank you for the excellent review of my novelette! My characters all have a spiritual thing God is doing in their lives, just like real life! I am so touched you gave me so much attention on your busy day today! Thank you, again!
Big hug,
Sal
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my pleasure it was very much enjoyable time
Comment from AngieDee
I am intrigued...waiting for what happens next. I really like your story, very well written and pulls the reader along. Good luck in the contest.
AngieDee
reply by the author on 04-Nov-2018
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I am intrigued...waiting for what happens next. I really like your story, very well written and pulls the reader along. Good luck in the contest.
AngieDee
Comment Written 04-Nov-2018
reply by the author on 04-Nov-2018
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Thank you Angie for your excellent review and kind comments. I am so glad you liked it. I appreciate you so much!
All my best,
Sally
Comment from ciliverde
This is excellent writing, even though I'm jumping into the middle of your novelette I was drawn into the story.
Your first sentence has a nit: They we're (were) driving in the hills now. This was the only error I noticed.
The 5 o'clock gridlock would be best avoided by going through the rural Georgia backwoods - this is something I'd love to do! Drive through the Georgia woods in the fall.
Your descriptions of Clovis and his mental anguish are also very good.
Well done,
Carol
reply by the author on 04-Nov-2018
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This is excellent writing, even though I'm jumping into the middle of your novelette I was drawn into the story.
Your first sentence has a nit: They we're (were) driving in the hills now. This was the only error I noticed.
The 5 o'clock gridlock would be best avoided by going through the rural Georgia backwoods - this is something I'd love to do! Drive through the Georgia woods in the fall.
Your descriptions of Clovis and his mental anguish are also very good.
Well done,
Carol
Comment Written 04-Nov-2018
reply by the author on 04-Nov-2018
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Thank you so much for the excellent review and comments. I am blind and missed the typo in the first sentence! Thank you for that! I write with a voice activated I-pad pro and it gives me selections instead of what I actually want sometimes. I appreciate you stopping by!
All my best,
Sally
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I figured it was something like that - not that I knew you were blind but I know how our devices offer suggestions and they are not always what we want!
