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House left to decay.26 total reviews
Comment from Kerry Foley Robinson
Hello there, Kay, its so nice to see you. Hope you're doing well. This is a beautiful poem you've penned. I love this beginning to end. You make the house sound so lived in and sad with this verse:
My shutters bang back with wind
Eyes on the world misted panes
I was happy to see this turn into such a happy ending with a family reunion, love and happiness just in time for the holidays. Wonderfully done! Happy holidays, my friend. -Kerry
reply by the author on 19-Nov-2018
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Hello there, Kay, its so nice to see you. Hope you're doing well. This is a beautiful poem you've penned. I love this beginning to end. You make the house sound so lived in and sad with this verse:
My shutters bang back with wind
Eyes on the world misted panes
I was happy to see this turn into such a happy ending with a family reunion, love and happiness just in time for the holidays. Wonderfully done! Happy holidays, my friend. -Kerry
Comment Written 18-Nov-2018
reply by the author on 19-Nov-2018
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Kerry, You have made my day! I needed one review for all time best, you gave that to me, thanks so much! And thanks so much for reading and so pleased you enjoyed the little house story. Not on holidays until Christmas. I hope you and yours have a wonderful Christmas my friend. Love, Kay XX
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My pleasure:) Happy Thanksgiving and Merry Christmas!
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Hello Kerry, We don't do Thanksgiving cause we live in Australia! Hope your celebrations go well and you get to carve the turkey! Love, Kay.
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Kerry, Aussies don't have Thanksgiving. Every day I thank Him for His blessings. Love, K.
Comment from Dean Kuch
It's funny how a structure such as a home, an old schoolhouse, or a once popular restaurant we used to hang out at as teens, etc., can harbor so many memories.
We revisit these places of our youth from time to time and for just a moment we're young again.
Seasons like Christmas give these places an even greater significance and special place in our hearts.
Wonderfully well done, Kay.
Happy Holidays!
~Dean
reply by the author on 14-Nov-2018
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It's funny how a structure such as a home, an old schoolhouse, or a once popular restaurant we used to hang out at as teens, etc., can harbor so many memories.
We revisit these places of our youth from time to time and for just a moment we're young again.
Seasons like Christmas give these places an even greater significance and special place in our hearts.
Wonderfully well done, Kay.
Happy Holidays!
~Dean
Comment Written 13-Nov-2018
reply by the author on 14-Nov-2018
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Dean, Thank you so much for reading and the six star rating. Christmas is coming up fast. Yes, old houses etc hold energy from previous tenants. Bless you and a Happy Christmas to you and Gidget! Love, Kay.
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My pleasure, Kay.
Same to you!
~Dean
Comment from JanPerry
Family is so important to you but they are away and let you down.
I grew so tired of family. We don't speak to each other. I took it as a sign to get interests, get out and about, join a club. I made friends.
Maybe you should too!
reply by the author on 12-Nov-2018
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Family is so important to you but they are away and let you down.
I grew so tired of family. We don't speak to each other. I took it as a sign to get interests, get out and about, join a club. I made friends.
Maybe you should too!
Comment Written 12-Nov-2018
reply by the author on 12-Nov-2018
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Er...what has your review got to do with my poem about an empty house? The house is speaking about the family that left it abandoned. I don't need to get out and about because I have an electric wheelchair and a carer takes me out. Thank you. K.
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Jan you wrote to me but there was no text from you? love, Kay
Comment from Wetbelly01
What a neat poem!... Brings to mind the old adage- " If these walls
could talk, what a tale they could tell"... I like the concept!
No pesky 'glitches' along the way... Your rhythm and rhyme flows along nicely...
My compliments on a very well written piece!
reply by the author on 12-Nov-2018
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What a neat poem!... Brings to mind the old adage- " If these walls
could talk, what a tale they could tell"... I like the concept!
No pesky 'glitches' along the way... Your rhythm and rhyme flows along nicely...
My compliments on a very well written piece!
Comment Written 11-Nov-2018
reply by the author on 12-Nov-2018
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Thanks so much for your kind review, much appreciated. Blessings, K.
Comment from C. Gale Burnett
I absolutely love this poem. I could actually feel what the house was feeling. From beginning to end, you painted a beautiful, sweet-ending story. Love how the house ended up being filled with love, care and joys of having a family to dwell inside it. Awesome poem. Well illustrated.
reply by the author on 12-Nov-2018
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I absolutely love this poem. I could actually feel what the house was feeling. From beginning to end, you painted a beautiful, sweet-ending story. Love how the house ended up being filled with love, care and joys of having a family to dwell inside it. Awesome poem. Well illustrated.
Comment Written 11-Nov-2018
reply by the author on 12-Nov-2018
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Thank you friend for your kind review. Glad you enjoyed the poem. Blessings, K.
Comment from nancyjam
I enjoyed reading your poem - the personification of the house
that misses the life of a family and is finally fixed up and happy again
to be their protector.
Lovely descriptions throughout.
Nancy
reply by the author on 11-Nov-2018
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I enjoyed reading your poem - the personification of the house
that misses the life of a family and is finally fixed up and happy again
to be their protector.
Lovely descriptions throughout.
Nancy
Comment Written 10-Nov-2018
reply by the author on 11-Nov-2018
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Hello Nancy, Thanks so much for reading and glad you enjoyed. Blessings, Kay.
Comment from l.raven
HI Kace, homes have feelings too...
and you would be surprised the stories they could tell...very well written Sweetie Pie...and I would truly love to own that home...fix it up...love your poem my sweet friend...love your picture...love you lots...Linda xxoo
reply by the author on 10-Nov-2018
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HI Kace, homes have feelings too...
and you would be surprised the stories they could tell...very well written Sweetie Pie...and I would truly love to own that home...fix it up...love your poem my sweet friend...love your picture...love you lots...Linda xxoo
Comment Written 09-Nov-2018
reply by the author on 10-Nov-2018
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Hello Wombat, Thanks for reviewing and glad you liked it. We have unique Queenslander homes here, built off the ground because of the heat. Love you lots too! XXX:-))
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really!!!! I didn't know that...sooooo welcome my sweet friend...always...big smiles back at you....and lots of love...xxxooo
Comment from PoemsOfDD
K, this is an excellent poem that offers the reader an insight to feelings that an empty and unloved house may feel. The description is very effective to pull at the heart strings. On the sad and lonely side - Loneliness breaking timbers apart. On the happier side...after finally being loved - Lit from inside, merry face - Fire dancing in my heart. Excellent work and so worthy of a six shower. ~DD
reply by the author on 08-Nov-2018
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K, this is an excellent poem that offers the reader an insight to feelings that an empty and unloved house may feel. The description is very effective to pull at the heart strings. On the sad and lonely side - Loneliness breaking timbers apart. On the happier side...after finally being loved - Lit from inside, merry face - Fire dancing in my heart. Excellent work and so worthy of a six shower. ~DD
Comment Written 08-Nov-2018
reply by the author on 08-Nov-2018
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DD, thanks so much for your kind review. I'm more than pleased you enjoyed it enough to give a sixer. Bless you, Kay XX
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All my pleasure Kay. I felt the house. ~DDxx
Comment from Debbie Pope
I love this, Aussie. How refreshing to have this poem told by the house. Your images are so expressive. My favorite is "loneliness breaking timbers apart." And, I like the children who are blind to their stones. So, the house is not bitter. It even understands the ignorance of the children who throw stones at it.
Thank you for the happy final verses. The juxtaposition of the sad and happy increases the emotional appeal of each. The entire poem is simply well done.
The only thing that I would change is to capitalize Come in your title.
Good job. I enjoyed it very much.
reply by the author on 08-Nov-2018
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I love this, Aussie. How refreshing to have this poem told by the house. Your images are so expressive. My favorite is "loneliness breaking timbers apart." And, I like the children who are blind to their stones. So, the house is not bitter. It even understands the ignorance of the children who throw stones at it.
Thank you for the happy final verses. The juxtaposition of the sad and happy increases the emotional appeal of each. The entire poem is simply well done.
The only thing that I would change is to capitalize Come in your title.
Good job. I enjoyed it very much.
Comment Written 07-Nov-2018
reply by the author on 08-Nov-2018
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Hello Debbie, I think I remember you from long ago, you're not a newbie are you? Thanks so much for your kind review my friend. Blessings, Kay. XX
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I'm not new to FanStory. I joined last January. I consider myself very new to writing poetry though. Still learning so much.
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Glad you are enjoying the friendship on site. I have been here eight years! I'm an oldie at 73 :-)
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Since we are tellin, I?m a spring chicken of 66
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For some unknown reason, your name rang a bell with me; thought I knew you? Love, Kay.
Comment from Dy-Dy
You have a true and Ahhh-mazing talent, Aussie!!! I enjoyed every bit of this poem about a house getting it's face fixed and longing for a family to dwell within. It's really good! Very well done, mate!
reply by the author on 08-Nov-2018
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You have a true and Ahhh-mazing talent, Aussie!!! I enjoyed every bit of this poem about a house getting it's face fixed and longing for a family to dwell within. It's really good! Very well done, mate!
Comment Written 07-Nov-2018
reply by the author on 08-Nov-2018
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G'day Dy-Dy, Thanks so much for reading and I am glad you enjoyed! Blessings, Kay.
