Should Our Two Paths Cross
For Hope of Reconciliation34 total reviews
Comment from Janice Canerdy
This excellent, skillfully-written sonnet is lovely and REALISTIC--concerning
relationships. Before the happiest of days--new joy--can be enjoyed
old hurts most be addressed and resolved
reply by the author on 13-Jan-2019
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This excellent, skillfully-written sonnet is lovely and REALISTIC--concerning
relationships. Before the happiest of days--new joy--can be enjoyed
old hurts most be addressed and resolved
Comment Written 13-Jan-2019
reply by the author on 13-Jan-2019
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Hello Janice!
Thank you for your excellent rating and complimentary review!
This was sonnet was a labor of love; that's for certain!
So pleased it resonated with you!
Thank you!
diane
Comment from Sandra du Plessis
A very well-written sonnet about the question of should two paths cross what we would like to see happening. We dream it will work out well but we will not really know until it happens.
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A very well-written sonnet about the question of should two paths cross what we would like to see happening. We dream it will work out well but we will not really know until it happens.
Comment Written 13-Jan-2019
Comment from Joy Graham
Hello Mrs. KT,
You always amaze me with your versatility to write in many poetry forms and flavors :) You are definitely a fluent poet and writer to inspire us all.
I love the picture you chose. It has a sunny feel to cheer little old me. I'm sitting by a sunny window as I read, and I'm feeling a burst of vitamin D and that makes me feel happy. Oh Happy Day!
You have a fine theme for your sonnet with sensible rhymes, good turn in stanza three, and good closing couplet.
You always impress me with your meter. Although, I had trouble reconciling your meter in line 12 today. I tend to pronounce it for - GIVE - ness, but had to say FOR - give - NESS to make that line work today. I guess we all pronounce words in our own way. Please forgive me for not getting it today.
Best wishes in the contest.
Joy xx
reply by the author on 13-Jan-2019
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Hello Mrs. KT,
You always amaze me with your versatility to write in many poetry forms and flavors :) You are definitely a fluent poet and writer to inspire us all.
I love the picture you chose. It has a sunny feel to cheer little old me. I'm sitting by a sunny window as I read, and I'm feeling a burst of vitamin D and that makes me feel happy. Oh Happy Day!
You have a fine theme for your sonnet with sensible rhymes, good turn in stanza three, and good closing couplet.
You always impress me with your meter. Although, I had trouble reconciling your meter in line 12 today. I tend to pronounce it for - GIVE - ness, but had to say FOR - give - NESS to make that line work today. I guess we all pronounce words in our own way. Please forgive me for not getting it today.
Best wishes in the contest.
Joy xx
Comment Written 13-Jan-2019
reply by the author on 13-Jan-2019
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Hello Joy!
I am so thankful for our excellent rating and thoughtful review.
I played with that line again. How about:
With faith and love's mercy guiding my/our way?
I think that might do it! Whew!
Thank you again!
diane
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Oh you are going to hate me. That line falls apart at mercy.
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Mercy!
I though it did, too, as I was just now taking a shower and saying it aloud!
My husband thinks I?ve gone batty!
No worries! I?ll kero plugging away! At least I?m clean now!!!!
😳😬😘💕
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By George! I think I've got it:
With faith and mercy's love to guide my way...
Yes? :)
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Yes :) That works. Yay!
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Whew!
:)
Comment from Sam Saylor
This piece invokes a lot of imagery for me the reader and and is encapsulated in a feeling of not knowing what may come.
The only thing i wonder about is wether Years truly rhymes with fears. I don't know if this is important to you but thought I'd mention I'd noticed it doesn't really do so.
Otherwise a really nicely constructed and satisfying piece
Great work
Sam
reply by the author on 13-Jan-2019
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This piece invokes a lot of imagery for me the reader and and is encapsulated in a feeling of not knowing what may come.
The only thing i wonder about is wether Years truly rhymes with fears. I don't know if this is important to you but thought I'd mention I'd noticed it doesn't really do so.
Otherwise a really nicely constructed and satisfying piece
Great work
Sam
Comment Written 13-Jan-2019
reply by the author on 13-Jan-2019
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Hello Sam,
Thank you for your excellent rating and complimentary review.
I live in northern Michigan in the United States.
"Fears" rhymes with "years." But here are three sources that also confirm that rhyming partnership:
http://rhymezone.com/r/rhyme.cgi?typeofrhyme=perfect&Word=fears
https://rhymer.com/fears.html
https://www.enow.com/search?s_pt=source2&s_it=aolsem&s_chn=225&s_gl=US&q=words%20that%20rhyme%20fear
Thank you for stopping by.
P.S.
My son-in-law is British. He was born in Chester, England. I just asked him if to his ear "fears" and "years" rhyme. He assured me they do.
diane
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Broken brain I must have ;) thanks for the piece :)
Comment from Dean Kuch
A very lovely, well composed Shakespearean sonnet you have managed to create here, diane.
Ah, and I also see that it's an entry in the Sonnet Poetry contest.
I hope your luck is far better than my own in these site-sponsored extravaganzas.
Good luck...
reply by the author on 13-Jan-2019
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A very lovely, well composed Shakespearean sonnet you have managed to create here, diane.
Ah, and I also see that it's an entry in the Sonnet Poetry contest.
I hope your luck is far better than my own in these site-sponsored extravaganzas.
Good luck...
Comment Written 13-Jan-2019
reply by the author on 13-Jan-2019
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Oh Dean!
This little gem was a challenge to pen!
I believe that it is my second or third sonnet that I have ever attempted! Tricky buggers! Between the meter and rhyme, I think I've aged ten years! But I promised myself in December that I was going to attempt to write one, and well, this is the result of my efforts! Whew!
Thank you for your excellent rating and complimentary review!
Just hope that "William" isn't rolling over in his grave at the moment!
Take Care!
diane
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You 2...
Comment from victor 66
Yes real love, is enduring. And if you can, it is well to keep as much negativity out of remembered, precious moments as you can. Late in life I've developed the philosophy of "give those you love the benefit of the doubt". This was a very nice read. Best wishes.
reply by the author on 13-Jan-2019
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Yes real love, is enduring. And if you can, it is well to keep as much negativity out of remembered, precious moments as you can. Late in life I've developed the philosophy of "give those you love the benefit of the doubt". This was a very nice read. Best wishes.
Comment Written 13-Jan-2019
reply by the author on 13-Jan-2019
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Hello Victor!
Thank you for your excellent rating and thoughtful review.
So pleased my words resonated with you!
diane
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As always, Diane, you are most welcome.
Comment from Janet Foor
A lovely sonnet Diane and a wonderful picture to compliment your well chosen words.
I loved the ending couplet to this beautiful piece.
Well done.
Blessings
Janet
reply by the author on 13-Jan-2019
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A lovely sonnet Diane and a wonderful picture to compliment your well chosen words.
I loved the ending couplet to this beautiful piece.
Well done.
Blessings
Janet
Comment Written 13-Jan-2019
reply by the author on 13-Jan-2019
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Good Morning, Janet!
So very pleased you enjoyed!
What a challening format!
Thank you for your excellent rating and complimentary review!
diane
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Good Morning, Janet!
So very pleased you enjoyed!
What a challening format!
Thank you for your excellent rating and complimentary review!
diane
Comment from Y. M. Roger
Wow -- there's a lot that's hidden just beyond those words there, Diane and you have penned it so expertly that the reader's filling them in causes a little lump to form and a tear to threaten. So many people have regrets they have 'squirreled away' and you use just the right words to paint a picture of reunion without being too specific of the details...allowing the reader to participate with their own pains, hurts, and disappointments. :) Great job, ma'am, and best of luck to everyone else that has to go up against this! :) ;) Yvette :)
reply by the author on 13-Jan-2019
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Wow -- there's a lot that's hidden just beyond those words there, Diane and you have penned it so expertly that the reader's filling them in causes a little lump to form and a tear to threaten. So many people have regrets they have 'squirreled away' and you use just the right words to paint a picture of reunion without being too specific of the details...allowing the reader to participate with their own pains, hurts, and disappointments. :) Great job, ma'am, and best of luck to everyone else that has to go up against this! :) ;) Yvette :)
Comment Written 13-Jan-2019
reply by the author on 13-Jan-2019
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Good Morning, Yvette!
Woah!
I am honored and humbled by your exceptional rating and thoughtful review!
A most challenging but rewarding format to attempt; that's for sure!
So pleased my words resonated with you!
Wishing you a beautiful Sunday!
diane
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Good Morning, Yvette!
Woah!
I am honored and humbled by your exceptional rating and thoughtful review!
A most challenging but rewarding format to attempt; that's for sure!
So pleased my words resonated with you!
Wishing you a beautiful Sunday!
diane
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Same to you, ma'am -- blessings! ;)
Comment from F. Wehr3
Absolutely beautiful, diane. The reason for the four stars is the rhyme scheme is off. It should be abab cdcd etc. Let me know if you want me to re-rate this. You still have five days.
Take care,
Russell
reviewed again 1/13
Diane, this looks perfect to me. Good luck in the contest!
reply by the author on 13-Jan-2019
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Absolutely beautiful, diane. The reason for the four stars is the rhyme scheme is off. It should be abab cdcd etc. Let me know if you want me to re-rate this. You still have five days.
Take care,
Russell
reviewed again 1/13
Diane, this looks perfect to me. Good luck in the contest!
Comment Written 13-Jan-2019
reply by the author on 13-Jan-2019
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Bless you, Russell!
Good Lord!
I have no idea what I was thinking, but I have repaired the rhyme scheme, and I would so appreciate your taking another look at it - not because of the stars - but because of the form itself. Must have been a "senior moment."
Thank you again for alerting me of my snafu! With apologies to you and William!
diane
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You're welcome, diane, lol. I reviewed it again. looks great. Good Luck!
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Good Lord, Russell!
I think I just aged another ten years!
Thank you again, friend!
Comment from Miss Sherry
What a very nice offering of forgiveness and restoration of an injured relationship. It is offered gently and with the reassurance of some type of mending. The gorgeous artwork offers the perfect setting for "making up".
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What a very nice offering of forgiveness and restoration of an injured relationship. It is offered gently and with the reassurance of some type of mending. The gorgeous artwork offers the perfect setting for "making up".
Comment Written 13-Jan-2019
reply by the author on 13-Jan-2019
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Hello Sherry!
So pleased you enjoyed!
Thank you for your excellent rating and thoughtful review!
diane
