monster of their dreams
Halloween contest entry11 total reviews
Comment from brenda faye curtis
This is not only brilliantly funny and perfect for Halloween, it has a catch rhythm that makes it an easily flowing smooth read. The only way to improve it would be to pair it with some wicked-looking artwork
reply by the author on 26-Jul-2019
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This is not only brilliantly funny and perfect for Halloween, it has a catch rhythm that makes it an easily flowing smooth read. The only way to improve it would be to pair it with some wicked-looking artwork
Comment Written 25-Jul-2019
reply by the author on 26-Jul-2019
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Thank you for the awesome review. I agree with the artwork, don't remember why I didn't add any.
God bless
Steve
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You are most welcome.
Comment from Sandra du Plessis
A very well-written Halloween poem that is very creepy to think the monster of children's dreams have just told us that he killed his neighbor Bob and noone will ever suspect him.
reply by the author on 01-Nov-2018
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A very well-written Halloween poem that is very creepy to think the monster of children's dreams have just told us that he killed his neighbor Bob and noone will ever suspect him.
Comment Written 31-Oct-2018
reply by the author on 01-Nov-2018
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Thank you Sandra for the awesome review.
God bless
Steve
Comment from Wabigoon
Steve--
Really strong and creepy. I do not want you to be so creepy. Frankly. There are a few extra words used here maybe, like:
they'll hold their ground; they will not run
for them, the fear's part of the fun
How about simply saying "the fear's the fun"?
Otherwise excellent. I wonder about the impulse, inspiration for this -- do you believe it? Should it be? Who or what has the power to evoke this?
Best
Wabigoon/Jeff
reply by the author on 30-Oct-2018
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Steve--
Really strong and creepy. I do not want you to be so creepy. Frankly. There are a few extra words used here maybe, like:
they'll hold their ground; they will not run
for them, the fear's part of the fun
How about simply saying "the fear's the fun"?
Otherwise excellent. I wonder about the impulse, inspiration for this -- do you believe it? Should it be? Who or what has the power to evoke this?
Best
Wabigoon/Jeff
Comment Written 30-Oct-2018
reply by the author on 30-Oct-2018
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Thank you for this most exceptional review Jeff. Love the six stars and advice. I do love this time of the year my friend.
God bless
Steve
Comment from royowen
Well done Steve, the kids here don't seem to celebrate Halloween as vociferously as the US, I've vpbeen there when they did, and I live here. Good job with this one, articulate and smooth, good imagery and a super job, you've done, great theme, I think you're right, anything goes. In tetrametric quatrains and aabb rhyming, well done, blessings, Roy
reply by the author on 30-Oct-2018
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Well done Steve, the kids here don't seem to celebrate Halloween as vociferously as the US, I've vpbeen there when they did, and I live here. Good job with this one, articulate and smooth, good imagery and a super job, you've done, great theme, I think you're right, anything goes. In tetrametric quatrains and aabb rhyming, well done, blessings, Roy
Comment Written 30-Oct-2018
reply by the author on 30-Oct-2018
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Thank you Roy for this excellent review my friend. The folks around here are a bit more cautious these days, with all the crazies out there and such.
God bless
Steve
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Well done Steve
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Thank you Roy
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Welcome Steve
Comment from tbacha58
What a wonderful way of writing this Halloween poem. The way you described that same evening when all what you wrote will definitely happen. It was so beautiful reading this poem. The rhyming gave it a sensational meaning and finding out what will happen on that day. Good Luck. Terry xoxo
reply by the author on 30-Oct-2018
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What a wonderful way of writing this Halloween poem. The way you described that same evening when all what you wrote will definitely happen. It was so beautiful reading this poem. The rhyming gave it a sensational meaning and finding out what will happen on that day. Good Luck. Terry xoxo
Comment Written 30-Oct-2018
reply by the author on 30-Oct-2018
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Thank you Terry for this awesome review my friend.
God bless
Steve
Comment from Mrs. KT
Holy Toledo!
"Creepy" doesn't begin to describe this well-crafted Halloween poem. Yikes! We live in the woods, and things go "bump in the night" not just on Halloween. Won't be getting much sleep tonight...or tomorrow night either! Lots of visual and imaginative imagery in your well-crafted poem. I did not expect the ending! Chilling!
thank you for sharing!
diane
reply by the author on 30-Oct-2018
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Holy Toledo!
"Creepy" doesn't begin to describe this well-crafted Halloween poem. Yikes! We live in the woods, and things go "bump in the night" not just on Halloween. Won't be getting much sleep tonight...or tomorrow night either! Lots of visual and imaginative imagery in your well-crafted poem. I did not expect the ending! Chilling!
thank you for sharing!
diane
Comment Written 30-Oct-2018
reply by the author on 30-Oct-2018
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Thank you Diane for the awesome review. I love this time of the year, but it certainly can get a bit scary lol.
God bless
Steve
Comment from Dawnya
Extremely creepy. I thought it was fairly innocent at first. An adult relishing in participating in the trick or treat fun. But then I started to suspect something more, but the gruesome act was unexpected. A great thrill and Halloween appropriate!
reply by the author on 30-Oct-2018
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Extremely creepy. I thought it was fairly innocent at first. An adult relishing in participating in the trick or treat fun. But then I started to suspect something more, but the gruesome act was unexpected. A great thrill and Halloween appropriate!
Comment Written 30-Oct-2018
reply by the author on 30-Oct-2018
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Awesome review Dawnya, thank you.
I love twists lol.
God bless
Steve
Comment from georgelebard
This is an appropriate poem for Halloween. Kids are willing to do just about anything for a sweet treat, including scaring themselves half to death. But, I also feel scaring themselves is a kid thing to do. The part about Bob was a little too violent for me, but you warned that there would be violence.
reply by the author on 30-Oct-2018
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This is an appropriate poem for Halloween. Kids are willing to do just about anything for a sweet treat, including scaring themselves half to death. But, I also feel scaring themselves is a kid thing to do. The part about Bob was a little too violent for me, but you warned that there would be violence.
Comment Written 30-Oct-2018
reply by the author on 30-Oct-2018
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Thank you for the awesome review Georgelebard.
God bless
Steve
Comment from Pantygynt
An unusual Halloween poem because it looks at the world through the eyes of the 'monster' in this case a real live monster, complete with bullets and bent on evil. This one you can believe in and tremble.
reply by the author on 30-Oct-2018
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An unusual Halloween poem because it looks at the world through the eyes of the 'monster' in this case a real live monster, complete with bullets and bent on evil. This one you can believe in and tremble.
Comment Written 30-Oct-2018
reply by the author on 30-Oct-2018
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Thank you Pantygynt for the excellent review my friend. I do love this time of the year.
God bless'
Steve
Comment from meeshu
appropriately depraved for Halloween, Neonewman. the kiddies will be thrilled when see the "Get Off My Lawn" neighbor nailed to a tree................meeshu
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reply by the author on 30-Oct-2018
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appropriately depraved for Halloween, Neonewman. the kiddies will be thrilled when see the "Get Off My Lawn" neighbor nailed to a tree................meeshu
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Comment Written 30-Oct-2018
reply by the author on 30-Oct-2018
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Ha! The get off the my lawn neighbor. Thank you for this most excellent review my friend.
God bless
Steve
