Short Stories and Flash
Viewing comments for Chapter 4 "The Least of Us"Misc Fiction
21 total reviews
Comment from Pearl Edwards
Wonderful flash fiction mike about the saving of one small life in the big world that led to saving his own life. Really well written and much emotion in just 75 words. Loved it. You proved you don't have to use a lot of words to say a lot.
cheers.
valda
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Wonderful flash fiction mike about the saving of one small life in the big world that led to saving his own life. Really well written and much emotion in just 75 words. Loved it. You proved you don't have to use a lot of words to say a lot.
cheers.
valda
Comment Written 04-Nov-2018
Comment from Susanjohn
Power packed little flash fiction oozing a much deeper meaning. A reminder that all life is to be cherished. That even in the midst of despair, the human spirit tugs for more. The hope being... that someone cares, that people matter and are born with a purpose.
A perfect example that is does not take much to have a positive affect on someone. Wonderful analogy of a injured little bird that struggles to survive, reminding how precious is life.
How great it would be if we all realized he held that power within each of us and that we could be our brothers keeper.
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Power packed little flash fiction oozing a much deeper meaning. A reminder that all life is to be cherished. That even in the midst of despair, the human spirit tugs for more. The hope being... that someone cares, that people matter and are born with a purpose.
A perfect example that is does not take much to have a positive affect on someone. Wonderful analogy of a injured little bird that struggles to survive, reminding how precious is life.
How great it would be if we all realized he held that power within each of us and that we could be our brothers keeper.
Comment Written 30-Oct-2018
Comment from BOO ghost
Awe, a flash fiction contest.
Let BOO read...
Hum, BOO ate Quaker Oats this morning.
Poor little virtue. Oops! Bad word checker. Birdie as a substitute.
Guess the birdie gave him hope. If the bird had the will to live, perhaps, he had one more flight within his own wings
Excellent poem with meaning.
BOO!
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Awe, a flash fiction contest.
Let BOO read...
Hum, BOO ate Quaker Oats this morning.
Poor little virtue. Oops! Bad word checker. Birdie as a substitute.
Guess the birdie gave him hope. If the bird had the will to live, perhaps, he had one more flight within his own wings
Excellent poem with meaning.
BOO!
Comment Written 30-Oct-2018
Comment from tbacha58
OH Michael, I am so happy to back to relive with all of you what we had in the past.
You were and you are one of my sons. I loved your writings and even more with the brilliant poem you are offering for this contest. A flying bird brought back to life, by you and only you. Excellent you are the winner. Love u Mum.
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OH Michael, I am so happy to back to relive with all of you what we had in the past.
You were and you are one of my sons. I loved your writings and even more with the brilliant poem you are offering for this contest. A flying bird brought back to life, by you and only you. Excellent you are the winner. Love u Mum.
Comment Written 30-Oct-2018
Comment from Sefiros
Nothing fills you with purpose than taking care of someone else. Being kind means you have to nurture yourself in order to reply in kind. It builds self-confidence. The bird is an excellent example of this phenomenon. Good work.
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Nothing fills you with purpose than taking care of someone else. Being kind means you have to nurture yourself in order to reply in kind. It builds self-confidence. The bird is an excellent example of this phenomenon. Good work.
Comment Written 30-Oct-2018
Comment from Liz O'Neill
This is such a powerful message. Many of us have been lifted from our dark funk by having a situation set before us where we were taken out of ourselves. Readers will be invited to recall times throughout their lives where they had to forget their own difficulties to be able to help another equally or worse off than we. The ending has a sudden turn to it which will make the reader pause to be able to really take in how serious the situation may have been. using such personal touches as coffee to the beak, endears the reader to the speaker. This becomes a universal account. There are many reading this, who will identify in some or will know of similar stories. Well written. I have to give you six stars for this.
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This is such a powerful message. Many of us have been lifted from our dark funk by having a situation set before us where we were taken out of ourselves. Readers will be invited to recall times throughout their lives where they had to forget their own difficulties to be able to help another equally or worse off than we. The ending has a sudden turn to it which will make the reader pause to be able to really take in how serious the situation may have been. using such personal touches as coffee to the beak, endears the reader to the speaker. This becomes a universal account. There are many reading this, who will identify in some or will know of similar stories. Well written. I have to give you six stars for this.
Comment Written 29-Oct-2018
Comment from catch22
Wow, Mikey, this is a full story in such a short amount of words. I thought you left just enough of the detail to the reader's imagination to figure out without having gaps in the story. Its an excellent parable of mercy and compassion, as opposed to expediency. It is easier to walk away and let another creature suffer, or even kill it. It's nobler to help it to live.
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Wow, Mikey, this is a full story in such a short amount of words. I thought you left just enough of the detail to the reader's imagination to figure out without having gaps in the story. Its an excellent parable of mercy and compassion, as opposed to expediency. It is easier to walk away and let another creature suffer, or even kill it. It's nobler to help it to live.
Comment Written 28-Oct-2018
Comment from Sandra du Plessis
A very well-written seventy five word flash fiction. When we do good things for others we forget our own pain and concentrate on making their lives better.
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A very well-written seventy five word flash fiction. When we do good things for others we forget our own pain and concentrate on making their lives better.
Comment Written 28-Oct-2018
Comment from apky
This is an absolutely touching story.
I loved how you lead the reader on about saving the bird, how you played on the imagery, the vivid descriptions with such few words, and the final twist in the story's finale. Brilliant.
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This is an absolutely touching story.
I loved how you lead the reader on about saving the bird, how you played on the imagery, the vivid descriptions with such few words, and the final twist in the story's finale. Brilliant.
Comment Written 28-Oct-2018
Comment from country ranch writer
Things happen for a reason and the bird came into his life to help realize life was worth living. He nursed the bird back to health a little at atime and it became healthy and ready to fly.
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Things happen for a reason and the bird came into his life to help realize life was worth living. He nursed the bird back to health a little at atime and it became healthy and ready to fly.
Comment Written 28-Oct-2018
