The New Sheriff
A fictional story of my childhood14 total reviews
Comment from Anntonette
Great piece! I am just a little confused to why you chose that title, can you please add a summary to help readers to understand the chosen title? "Time will pass so fast" not past, one little error is okay to fix !
- Anntonette J
reply by the author on 27-Oct-2018
Great piece! I am just a little confused to why you chose that title, can you please add a summary to help readers to understand the chosen title? "Time will pass so fast" not past, one little error is okay to fix !
- Anntonette J
Comment Written 27-Oct-2018
reply by the author on 27-Oct-2018
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Thanks for the correction, Anntonette. The women have overcome men as the controlling head of the house, much like a sheriff of a town in the old western on TV.
Phillip
Comment from Mastery
Excellent job on this, Phillip. If I had a six left it would surely be yours. Your intelligent essay is thought-provoking and timely.
"Many people in society have forgotten this basic principle. Instead, they'd go look for trouble, which reminds me that good patriarch says the world has enough trouble. It needs no one to add to its cup. It's full enough. Work hard at whatever you do with your life.
Bravo! Bless you, my friend. Bob
reply by the author on 27-Oct-2018
Excellent job on this, Phillip. If I had a six left it would surely be yours. Your intelligent essay is thought-provoking and timely.
"Many people in society have forgotten this basic principle. Instead, they'd go look for trouble, which reminds me that good patriarch says the world has enough trouble. It needs no one to add to its cup. It's full enough. Work hard at whatever you do with your life.
Bravo! Bless you, my friend. Bob
Comment Written 27-Oct-2018
reply by the author on 27-Oct-2018
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Thanks for the encouragement, Bob.
Phillip
Comment from Wetbelly01
I really liked your piece... It reminded me of my own family structure
back 'In The Day'... I especially liked the last paragraph... It's so TRUE!
I caught a couple 'glitches' you might want to correct... 'Time will (pass) so
fast (you'll) wonder'...
Otherwise, my compliments... Well Done!
reply by the author on 27-Oct-2018
I really liked your piece... It reminded me of my own family structure
back 'In The Day'... I especially liked the last paragraph... It's so TRUE!
I caught a couple 'glitches' you might want to correct... 'Time will (pass) so
fast (you'll) wonder'...
Otherwise, my compliments... Well Done!
Comment Written 27-Oct-2018
reply by the author on 27-Oct-2018
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Thanks a lot for the read and corrections, Wetbelly.
Phillip
Comment from Pamusart
Hi pbomar1115. I enjoyed reading this. My father was seldom home and left us with an abusive mother. Your parents sound OK. Not perfect, but who is. Men were expected to be like your father. I did find one nit. See below. Thank you for sharing
"Time will past so fast you'd wonder where it went. ". Should be pass not past
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reply by the author on 27-Oct-2018
Hi pbomar1115. I enjoyed reading this. My father was seldom home and left us with an abusive mother. Your parents sound OK. Not perfect, but who is. Men were expected to be like your father. I did find one nit. See below. Thank you for sharing
"Time will past so fast you'd wonder where it went. ". Should be pass not past
This rating does not count towards story rating or author rank.
The highest and the lowest rating are not included in calculations.
Comment Written 27-Oct-2018
reply by the author on 27-Oct-2018
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No, Pamusart, this was not my experience in my home. This is a fictional world that I never saw but everyone knows it.
Phillip