Comment from Galactia

Excellent

Hi

LOL you do have a noisy household. Mine used to be but since my oldest son has left, I don't have 20 kids here anymore. It went from the hang out house to really quite. I got three other kids, but he was the noisiest from all of them.

Great job this is a very strong entry I feel. Good Luck :)

Regards
Tia

 Comment Written 01-Nov-2018

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reply by the author on 01-Nov-2018

Thanks so much Tia. It sounds like a wonderful, noisy brood that you have. Wonderful!! Thanks for the great review!

Comment from Joan E.

Excellent

What an intriguing picture that establishes the mood for your poem well! I certainly imagined the noise with the help of your choice of words and your rhymes. Best wishes in the Cacophony Poem contest- Joan

 Comment Written 26-Oct-2018

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reply by the author on 27-Oct-2018

Thank you Joan!

Comment from kiwijenny

Excellent

Great cacophony poem..the onomatopoeia is awesome
Booming zooming clang twang screeching shrieking howl
Jarring..notes all wrong.....
God bless

 Comment Written 23-Oct-2018

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reply by the author on 23-Oct-2018

Thanks so much Jenny. It was a fun one to write!!

Comment from Julie Pie

Excellent

I really enjoyed reading this poem and think you did a wonderful job bringing to life all of the noises. It can be so frustrating when the world will not be quiet!
Nice job,
Julie

 Comment Written 23-Oct-2018

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reply by the author on 23-Oct-2018

Thanks so much, Julie!

Comment from Kelly Grim

Excellent

Great use of sound! "big boy's toys" and "guns booming" and "race cars zooming" -- just fantastic! And I really like the last stanza, nature's noises... Excellent format, rhythm is smooth, rhyme is great. This is a terrific entry into this writing prompt contest! Very well penned!!!!

 Comment Written 23-Oct-2018

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reply by the author on 23-Oct-2018

Thanks so much Kelly for the fantastic review. I am grateful.

Comment from meeshu

Excellent

This is a very good piece, consistent rhymes with great rhythm and flow. The message is loud and clear heheh. and in Minute Form to boot..

 Comment Written 23-Oct-2018

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reply by the author on 23-Oct-2018

Thanks Meeshu! Much appreciated!!

Comment from Sandra du Plessis

Excellent

A very well-written cacaphony poem. Some people are only happy and jolly when everything is noisy around them with loud music playing and people talking while showing off their car's noisy engines.

 Comment Written 23-Oct-2018

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reply by the author on 23-Oct-2018

Thanks so much, Sandra!! Much appreciated!

Comment from Six-Star Writer

Excellent

I like the poem's tempo. Lots if energya coming through the lines. Seemed like a race car itself speeding in a 25 MPH zone. Better watch out out because poem police use radar here. Lots of poem speed traps.

 Comment Written 23-Oct-2018

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reply by the author on 23-Oct-2018

Haha. A great, fun review. Thank you for your comments.

Comment from Monica L. Moraca

Excellent

Yep, I can definitely hear the jarring sounds within your words. Well done!
The font and italic format blends well with the words you describe in your poem. A couple of guys having fun regardless the notes are played all wrong.
Best of luck in the contest!
Monica

 Comment Written 23-Oct-2018

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reply by the author on 23-Oct-2018

Thanks Monica. My head was spinning after writing it. I could imagine the noises. Ha!