Comment from Mrs. KT

Excellent

Hello Friend,
GAWD! Words cannot adequately express this horrific murder. And as I read the news yesterday, the story becomes even more convoluted and horrific.
Your four line poem certainly does bring the situation to the forefront - graphically so... What a world...

Thank you for sharing!
diane

 Comment Written 23-Oct-2018

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reply by the author on 24-Oct-2018

Thanks, Diane. What a world indeed. The most astounding thing is that the Saudis assumed (perhaps rightly) that they would suffer no real consequences for this brutal and unbjustified murder of one of their own citizens.

Steve

Comment from Rickie1

Excellent

KIWISTEVEH

Sadly and disgustingly your words ring true. The murdered him to silence him but also as a warning, terrorize, others that may speak,write, criticism of those in power.
I think there is a poem on power and freed coming out of this.

Rickie

 Comment Written 23-Oct-2018

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reply by the author on 24-Oct-2018

Rickie - thanks for reviewing and for understanding.

Steve

Comment from Insider98

Excellent

Relevant and simple. One risks his life going against powerful people. The syllables are on point of course. I think you will do great in the contest.

 Comment Written 23-Oct-2018

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reply by the author on 24-Oct-2018

Thank you. Maybe not a particularly suitable form for the viciousness of the crime, but I see it rather like a political cartoon which can draw attention to serious matters by using humour. I suspect this will not be considered suitable for a reward in the judging, but that's OK - I just wanted to put it out there.

Steve

Comment from humpwhistle

Excellent

Ah, so that's what a bone saw looks like. I'll be just as happy if I never see one again. A nice, timely entry for this odd contest.
Is a 1-5-5-9 really a thing?
Anyway, I like your cutting humor.
Best of luck.

Peace, Lee

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 Comment Written 23-Oct-2018

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reply by the author on 23-Oct-2018

I believe they come in different shapes and sizes, but yes, not a tool you want to hear your surgeon calling for.

No, like quite a few of the 'forms' they throw at us, the 1-5-5-9 would not be recognized outside of our little community.

As to the event that prompted this, I am beyond disgusted. As I suspected, the chief perpetrators will get a slap on the wrist while one or more scapegoats will pay for international outrage. Meanwhile, the sheer brazenness of the act says more than anything about the world we live in where no one dares stand up to these butchers in case they lose a business deal or push up the price of gas.

Steve

Comment from dmt1967

Excellent

This poem made me giggle, especially the end line. I liked the picture, it said so much. This sort poem with it's deadly message was very well thought out. Good luck in the contest and thank you for sharing.

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 Comment Written 23-Oct-2018

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reply by the author on 23-Oct-2018

Thank you.

Steve

Comment from A Little Bird

Exceptional

Love this poem! So humorous! Definitely gave me a chuckle! I enjoy reading fantasy books in my spare time and always feel grateful that's not me when characters are punished by the monarch!

 Comment Written 23-Oct-2018

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reply by the author on 23-Oct-2018

Thanks, Abby, Sadly this is based more on very recent reality.

PS Big welcome to FanStory. Hope you like it here.

Steve

reply by A Little Bird on 23-Oct-2018

So sorry! It sounds like I was unintentionally insensitive. Thanks for the welcome to Fanstory.

reply by the author on 24-Oct-2018

No worries. I've added a note to it now so it's clearer that it's about current events!