Comment from Michele Harber

Excellent

What a lovely and uplifting poem of faith and redemption. You use very descriptive words to make us feel your depth of despair, and then bring yourself and the reader out at the end. Your rhymes are very effective, and you perfectly follow the required 4,4,6,4,4,6 syllable pattern. Good luck in the contest.

 Comment Written 20-Oct-2018

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reply by the author on 22-Oct-2018

Thank you Michele! Thank you for reading and leaving such a wonderful review! I do appreciate it!

reply by Michele Harber on 22-Oct-2018

It's my pleasure.

Comment from Sandra du Plessis

Excellent

A very well-written uplifting poem. There is always hope no matter how dark our situation is. When we pray the darkness shatters and light shines through so that we can see the way.

 Comment Written 20-Oct-2018

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reply by the author on 20-Oct-2018

Thank you Sandra for reading and for the review! yes, there is always hope. :-)

Comment from Jannypan (Jan)

Excellent

Your poem smoothly, Mystery Author. I like the message it contains. Good job with the style of which I am not aware. However, your words fir nicely into that scheme without sounding forced. I like the picture paired with your words, too. Your poem is uplifting with a good positive message. Thanks for sharing and best wishes. Jan

 Comment Written 20-Oct-2018

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reply by the author on 20-Oct-2018

Thank you Jan, for yet another lovely review! I do appreciate you taking the time to read and review. Richard W. Jenkins created this original form. Thank you for the well wishes :-)

Comment from Terry Kay

Excellent

This is a beautifully written poem showing your love and devotion to God. He certainly helps us in those dark nights! I loved it! Good luck in the contest...

 Comment Written 20-Oct-2018

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reply by the author on 20-Oct-2018

Aw thanks Terry for taking the time to read and review! I do appreciate it.

Comment from Y. M. Roger

Excellent

A beautiful write that follows the transitioning of a hurting heart from darkness to light in the arms of the Lord...and that it happened because the soul chose to reach out and pray! :) :)Thank you for sharing! :)

 Comment Written 20-Oct-2018

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reply by the author on 20-Oct-2018

You got it!..it all comes down to letting go and let God. Thanks for reading and the review! :-)

Comment from Alcreator Litt Dear

Good

This poem tells when there is hope in the heart, everything comes alive, and darkness removes, and movement starts even if there is darkness anywhere; well said, well done. Keep Writing -- DR ALCREATOR

Please check the edits (within brackets):

Edit:
and chills my depts of soul.
(and chills my depths of soul.)

Edit:
will broken, tossed-
my heart begins to pray.

(will break, toss-
my heart begins to pray.)

Or

(will have broken, tossed-
my heart begins to pray.)

Edit:
Fours 'n Sixes/Uplifting Poetry
(Fours and Sixes/Uplifting Poetry)



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 Comment Written 20-Oct-2018

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reply by the author on 20-Oct-2018

Hello, thank you for the review. Thank you for your edits...I did correct the spelling error previously.Sorry, can't agree with your suggestions as this forn is strict in meter.Your suggestions take it out of the required meter. This form is an original form created by Richard W. Jenkins. Fours 'n Sixes is exactly how he has it written. I am also confused by your usage of a single dash.. But again, thank you for taking the time to read.

Comment from WalkerMan

Exceptional

This lovely expression of the power of faith takes us from a time of despair and searching for solace through last-resort prayer that is answered, providing hope and confidence to persevere through whatever additional difficult times may come. The illustration of a newly sprouting flower on the floor of a forest of trees still bare as winter wanes is most apt. Superb.

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reply by the author on 20-Oct-2018

Thanks Mike...as always, an exceptional review. Spot on.

reply by WalkerMan on 20-Oct-2018

You are most welcome, Susan. You express EXACTLY what prayer is for, and how it is answered when the heart is pure and open.

I see you made the minor corrections I recommended, so I have removed those comments to leave you a clean review.

Contest or not, this post IS uplifting to read. -- Mike

Comment from Anntonette

Excellent

This is very uplifting, going from black to grey. This teaches us that the days can grow from bad to good. We just need a little light in our life to pull us through the obstacles :)
- Anntonette J

 Comment Written 20-Oct-2018

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reply by the author on 20-Oct-2018

We sure do! Thanks for taking the time to read and review! I do appreciate it. :-)

Comment from Tia Attwood

Excellent

Hi

This is a great entry into the uplifting poetry form.

blackfding ? I noticed you miss spelt a word... Blackening?
Not sure but it needs to be fixed.

apart from that superb.Good Luck in the contest

Regards
Tia


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 Comment Written 20-Oct-2018

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reply by the author on 20-Oct-2018

Holy cow! You got to this fast! LOL I had it disabled..Thanks for the review :-) Much appreciated!

reply by Tia Attwood on 20-Oct-2018

No worries. I would hate you poem to not be in the race because of one lousy word. Now your good to go. :)

Black Fading of course. lol.

Good Luck

Regards
Tia
(Galactia)

reply by the author on 20-Oct-2018

Thanks again!!