A Forest Night
A Quatrain for Potlatch Poetry32 total reviews
Comment from Teri7
This is a very well written quatrain poem you have penned for the potlatch. You used great descriptive words and very nice imagery from the art work you chose to go with your words. Great job my friend! love and blessings, Teri
reply by the author on 23-Oct-2018
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This is a very well written quatrain poem you have penned for the potlatch. You used great descriptive words and very nice imagery from the art work you chose to go with your words. Great job my friend! love and blessings, Teri
Comment Written 22-Oct-2018
reply by the author on 23-Oct-2018
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T hank you so much.
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you are so welcome!
Comment from Phyllis Stewart
I like this form, and your example is especially nice. I love this line: against a golden night balloon.
I would like to see one done in chain rhyme. Are you up to it? I haven't written poetry for so many years I would not know where to start. Maybe I should, though, ,after my story is done.
reply by the author on 22-Oct-2018
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I like this form, and your example is especially nice. I love this line: against a golden night balloon.
I would like to see one done in chain rhyme. Are you up to it? I haven't written poetry for so many years I would not know where to start. Maybe I should, though, ,after my story is done.
Comment Written 21-Oct-2018
reply by the author on 22-Oct-2018
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Yes, you should. I'll do my best on a chain rhyme. I've never tried one, but now's as good as time as any, and you've given me the courage. Thank you so much.
Comment from Ann Marie Anglin
I have a collection of critters that come during the day, and a whole new batch that come around at night. Little flying squirrels come in for a landing onto the deck in search of peanuts and sunflowers. And the raccoons come, too. There's so much going on outside. A lovely poem about "the children of the night." Ann Marie
reply by the author on 22-Oct-2018
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I have a collection of critters that come during the day, and a whole new batch that come around at night. Little flying squirrels come in for a landing onto the deck in search of peanuts and sunflowers. And the raccoons come, too. There's so much going on outside. A lovely poem about "the children of the night." Ann Marie
Comment Written 21-Oct-2018
reply by the author on 22-Oct-2018
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How is it that we attract these critters, and aren't we lucky? I'm so happy you enjoyed my poem. Thank you.
Comment from Cindy McIntyre
OH, I absolutely loved the description, "golden night balloon" for representing the moon. So creative and clever. A stunning "Forest Night!" This is a well-written poem. A joy to read!
reply by the author on 21-Oct-2018
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OH, I absolutely loved the description, "golden night balloon" for representing the moon. So creative and clever. A stunning "Forest Night!" This is a well-written poem. A joy to read!
Comment Written 21-Oct-2018
reply by the author on 21-Oct-2018
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Thank you for this wonderful review!
Comment from rspoet
Hello Yvonne,
This is a wonderful Quatrain poem.
I always enjoy the way the rhyme scheme switches in the second stanza
and yours reads perfectly. I love the golden balloon moon,
and the contrast between the stark and drear of the first stanza
with the safe, deep burrows of the second, reflects the rhyme shift.
Perfect Quatrain poem
Robert
reply by the author on 21-Oct-2018
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Hello Yvonne,
This is a wonderful Quatrain poem.
I always enjoy the way the rhyme scheme switches in the second stanza
and yours reads perfectly. I love the golden balloon moon,
and the contrast between the stark and drear of the first stanza
with the safe, deep burrows of the second, reflects the rhyme shift.
Perfect Quatrain poem
Robert
Comment Written 21-Oct-2018
reply by the author on 21-Oct-2018
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Thank you. That means a lot to me.
Comment from Pam (respa)
-Very nice image and presentation.
-A well written pair of quatrains
with effective nature imagery.
-The first line is my favorite one.
-The imagery creates a serene,
and peaceful mood.
-Thanks for sharing.
reply by the author on 21-Oct-2018
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-Very nice image and presentation.
-A well written pair of quatrains
with effective nature imagery.
-The first line is my favorite one.
-The imagery creates a serene,
and peaceful mood.
-Thanks for sharing.
Comment Written 21-Oct-2018
reply by the author on 21-Oct-2018
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I'm glad you like it. Thank you.
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You are welcome.
Comment from LIJ Red
At the top of the stairs, outside my bedroom door, there was growling and crunching. My trademark possum was back, grown up, almost pure white and fat as mud. Gonna have to plug that doggy door...I can see this forest scene, a few yards behind my house, but at night when there's a moon, nobody sleeps...excellent pair of quatrains for the potlatch challenge...
reply by the author on 21-Oct-2018
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At the top of the stairs, outside my bedroom door, there was growling and crunching. My trademark possum was back, grown up, almost pure white and fat as mud. Gonna have to plug that doggy door...I can see this forest scene, a few yards behind my house, but at night when there's a moon, nobody sleeps...excellent pair of quatrains for the potlatch challenge...
Comment Written 21-Oct-2018
reply by the author on 21-Oct-2018
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Thank you. He got in your house? How funny. I have an unused doggy door for the same reason. Even though I live in town, I still get all these critters. I'm a magnet, it seems. But I love it. My outside cats get along fine with the raccoons and possums.
Comment from krys123
Cheers, Damommy;
> Fascinated by you quatrains rhyming format as it was very good in reminding me of a Petrarchan sonnet. Which if frequently With the internal lines rhyming as couplets followed by the first and fourth line rhyming..
>You did a wonderful job with this potlatch poetry is the picture was described very well in a metaphorical imagery.
> Each rhyming word was contingent and supportive to the meaning and concept of each line therefore making them rhythm to flow smoothly and the enjambment to be understood correctly.
> Thanks for sharing and take care and have a good one my dear friend.
Alx
reply by the author on 21-Oct-2018
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Cheers, Damommy;
> Fascinated by you quatrains rhyming format as it was very good in reminding me of a Petrarchan sonnet. Which if frequently With the internal lines rhyming as couplets followed by the first and fourth line rhyming..
>You did a wonderful job with this potlatch poetry is the picture was described very well in a metaphorical imagery.
> Each rhyming word was contingent and supportive to the meaning and concept of each line therefore making them rhythm to flow smoothly and the enjambment to be understood correctly.
> Thanks for sharing and take care and have a good one my dear friend.
Alx
Comment Written 21-Oct-2018
reply by the author on 21-Oct-2018
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Thank you for such a in-depth and very nice review!
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You're very welcome, Damommy.
Alx
Comment from Dean Kuch
Yeah, and they'll remain underground fast asleep until sunrise, if they know what's good for 'em!
Nicely composed Quatrain, Yvonne, very well done.
~Dean
reply by the author on 21-Oct-2018
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Yeah, and they'll remain underground fast asleep until sunrise, if they know what's good for 'em!
Nicely composed Quatrain, Yvonne, very well done.
~Dean
Comment Written 21-Oct-2018
reply by the author on 21-Oct-2018
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Thank you, Dean. Jan tells me you're in the hospital. I hope you are doing better. When can you go home?
Comment from Pantygynt
This is a neat little double quatrain poem with an abba rhyme scheme. I rather doubt if those alliterative small furry families are asleep, as most of them are nocturnal creatures themselves which is why the owls fly by night. Nature is never quite as cosy as Beatrix Potter believed.
reply by the author on 21-Oct-2018
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This is a neat little double quatrain poem with an abba rhyme scheme. I rather doubt if those alliterative small furry families are asleep, as most of them are nocturnal creatures themselves which is why the owls fly by night. Nature is never quite as cosy as Beatrix Potter believed.
Comment Written 21-Oct-2018
reply by the author on 21-Oct-2018
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You're right. But it's nice to think so, isn't it? lol. Thank you for reviewing.
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You live in a Cuddly world Yvonne. Ain'tcha lucky?
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Yes, I am. I'm happy in my own little world. Everyone knows me here. lol
