A Happy Ending.
When things are bad, a wonderful life can begin.15 total reviews
Comment from lyenochka
Such admirable people! And little Richie may not have had a typical and comfortable childhood but he gained so much more in skills and work ethic that so many never develop. Great story!
reply by the author on 24-Aug-2020
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Such admirable people! And little Richie may not have had a typical and comfortable childhood but he gained so much more in skills and work ethic that so many never develop. Great story!
Comment Written 24-Aug-2020
reply by the author on 24-Aug-2020
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Thank you so much for reading, reviewing and your great comments. Glad you enjoyed it.
Comment from BeasPeas
This is a nice little story of positive help given in a person's life that hopefully will be passed on by paying it forward. A helping hand is a grand gift to give. Good job. Marilyn
reply by the author on 18-Oct-2018
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This is a nice little story of positive help given in a person's life that hopefully will be passed on by paying it forward. A helping hand is a grand gift to give. Good job. Marilyn
Comment Written 18-Oct-2018
reply by the author on 18-Oct-2018
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Thank you so much Marilyn for reading, reviewing and your great comments.
Comment from poetwatch
Thank you Alie, for a lovely read. It's not everyday that a story moves me. It used to be to people helped people out of the kindness of their heart. Now-a-days people just look out for themselves, let our neighbors fend for themselves. thank you for sharing.
reply by the author on 18-Oct-2018
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Thank you Alie, for a lovely read. It's not everyday that a story moves me. It used to be to people helped people out of the kindness of their heart. Now-a-days people just look out for themselves, let our neighbors fend for themselves. thank you for sharing.
Comment Written 18-Oct-2018
reply by the author on 18-Oct-2018
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Thank you Jose for reading, reviewing and your super kind comments, I am glad you enjoyed it.
Comment from Mastery
Hi, Allie. What a sweet story this is an uplifting one with great character development.
Suggestions: "Richie was a brilliant five year old. (start this sentence with the pronoun, "He" instead of the proper name because you have just used his name in the previous paragraph. this will offer variety, Allie
Also: "Each day his task after school was to go to the butcher shop." Try Each day, Richie's task was.etc etc."
And: " They had been blessed with two children, " Try: "The Hardings had been blessed etc etc ."
Good job, my friend. Bob
reply by the author on 18-Oct-2018
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Hi, Allie. What a sweet story this is an uplifting one with great character development.
Suggestions: "Richie was a brilliant five year old. (start this sentence with the pronoun, "He" instead of the proper name because you have just used his name in the previous paragraph. this will offer variety, Allie
Also: "Each day his task after school was to go to the butcher shop." Try Each day, Richie's task was.etc etc."
And: " They had been blessed with two children, " Try: "The Hardings had been blessed etc etc ."
Good job, my friend. Bob
Comment Written 18-Oct-2018
reply by the author on 18-Oct-2018
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Thanks Bob for reading, reviewing and your kind comments and keen observations. I will make those corrections shortly. Blessed be.
Comment from KatyM
This was such a sweet story! Thanks for sharing. It is important to be willing to Pay it forward. This reminds me of the movie with the same name. I loved that movie. Kevin Spacey was so good in that movie and so was the little boy. Happy Writing, No additions or subtractions.
Katy
reply by the author on 17-Oct-2018
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This was such a sweet story! Thanks for sharing. It is important to be willing to Pay it forward. This reminds me of the movie with the same name. I loved that movie. Kevin Spacey was so good in that movie and so was the little boy. Happy Writing, No additions or subtractions.
Katy
Comment Written 17-Oct-2018
reply by the author on 17-Oct-2018
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Thank you Katy, for reading, reviewing and your kind comments.
Comment from Pantygynt
This was unexpected a neat little self contained tale all on its own. One of those all's well that ends well type stories. Almost rags to riches.
One thing occurred to me concerning the third bag. Would it be better to let its contents remain a mystery to readers until the mother opens it? Just a thought.
In the paragraph where Mr Harding stats to make his proposal to Ritchie. The second and third sentence should be combined as one and 'you mum' should read 'your mum'.
reply by the author on 17-Oct-2018
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This was unexpected a neat little self contained tale all on its own. One of those all's well that ends well type stories. Almost rags to riches.
One thing occurred to me concerning the third bag. Would it be better to let its contents remain a mystery to readers until the mother opens it? Just a thought.
In the paragraph where Mr Harding stats to make his proposal to Ritchie. The second and third sentence should be combined as one and 'you mum' should read 'your mum'.
Comment Written 17-Oct-2018
reply by the author on 17-Oct-2018
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Thank you for reading, reviewing and your kind comments and keen observations. I will make those corrections in a moment.
Comment from Phyllis Stewart
Upbeat story a reader can't help but enjoy. A young boy learns the value of work, and all ends better than well. I loved that his mom and he decided to rent a store front and live upstairs, so they could work together, even after winning money. :)
reply by the author on 17-Oct-2018
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Upbeat story a reader can't help but enjoy. A young boy learns the value of work, and all ends better than well. I loved that his mom and he decided to rent a store front and live upstairs, so they could work together, even after winning money. :)
Comment Written 17-Oct-2018
reply by the author on 17-Oct-2018
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Thank you Phyllis for reading, reviewing and your kind comments.
Comment from Mabaker
Ah, that brought tears to my eyes. Is it based on fact, Alie?
It reads like so many of those English stories of poverty and hardship. I was very well written (sez she!) I watch your way of writing and I took a special note of the spacings. Thank you for a lovely read. Sincerely Anne.
reply by the author on 17-Oct-2018
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Ah, that brought tears to my eyes. Is it based on fact, Alie?
It reads like so many of those English stories of poverty and hardship. I was very well written (sez she!) I watch your way of writing and I took a special note of the spacings. Thank you for a lovely read. Sincerely Anne.
Comment Written 17-Oct-2018
reply by the author on 17-Oct-2018
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Thank you so much Anne for reading, reviewing and your kind comments, I am so glad it was helpful, luv u Alie. Oh thanks for the stars.
Comment from Y. M. Roger
Oh, aryr, what a wonderfully heart-warming write!! :) :) You have put a tear in my eye, but it's a happy one, so I am so thankful!! :) :) Hooray for 'paying it forward'! :) :) Just a quick grammatical catch below -- thanx for sharing! :) Yvette :)
"had ask him the day before" --> 'had asked him the day before
reply by the author on 17-Oct-2018
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Oh, aryr, what a wonderfully heart-warming write!! :) :) You have put a tear in my eye, but it's a happy one, so I am so thankful!! :) :) Hooray for 'paying it forward'! :) :) Just a quick grammatical catch below -- thanx for sharing! :) Yvette :)
"had ask him the day before" --> 'had asked him the day before
Comment Written 17-Oct-2018
reply by the author on 17-Oct-2018
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Thank you so much Yvette for reading, reviewing and your kind comments, I will make that correction in a moment.
Comment from Spitfire
What a sweet story. I like to think that things like this do happen. Richie's mother did pay it forward by hiring three workers after she set up her own business.
reply by the author on 17-Oct-2018
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What a sweet story. I like to think that things like this do happen. Richie's mother did pay it forward by hiring three workers after she set up her own business.
Comment Written 17-Oct-2018
reply by the author on 17-Oct-2018
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Thank you for reading, reviewing and your kind comments.
