Tanka (Freedom) 25 syllables
My first tanka attempt20 total reviews
Comment from Earl Corp
Now im getting the hang of reviewing tankas. Yo certainly came in under the syllable count. The first two lines are grammatically connected. No end rhyme. Looks good to me. Good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 17-Oct-2018
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Now im getting the hang of reviewing tankas. Yo certainly came in under the syllable count. The first two lines are grammatically connected. No end rhyme. Looks good to me. Good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 17-Oct-2018
reply by the author on 17-Oct-2018
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Thank you for a great review. I'm glad you like it.
Comment from Dean Kuch
This is a very well composed tanka, Anonymous Poet, especially consindering the fact that is was your first-ever attempt.
Besides that, you sum up cemetery conditions perfectly. Crpyt to curb service ain't what it used to be.
Good luck in the contest.
~Dean
reply by the author on 17-Oct-2018
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This is a very well composed tanka, Anonymous Poet, especially consindering the fact that is was your first-ever attempt.
Besides that, you sum up cemetery conditions perfectly. Crpyt to curb service ain't what it used to be.
Good luck in the contest.
~Dean
Comment Written 17-Oct-2018
reply by the author on 17-Oct-2018
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LOL. Crypt to curb service. Good one. Thank you for a wonderful review. I appreciate it so much.
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My pleasure, you are more than welcome.
~Dean
Comment from harmony13
Excellent Poem! The author's words are interesting, festive and
creative. The reader thought about haunted houses she has
visited. The artwork is perfect and compliments this poem.
reply by the author on 17-Oct-2018
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Excellent Poem! The author's words are interesting, festive and
creative. The reader thought about haunted houses she has
visited. The artwork is perfect and compliments this poem.
Comment Written 17-Oct-2018
reply by the author on 17-Oct-2018
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Thank you for this great review.
Comment from Jannypan (Jan)
You did a good job, Mystery Author, with your first tanka. The picture is a perfect pairing with your words. The lines flow smoothly with great imagery. Thanks for the info in the author notes, too. Best wishes in the contest. This should be a contender for winning. Jan
reply by the author on 17-Oct-2018
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You did a good job, Mystery Author, with your first tanka. The picture is a perfect pairing with your words. The lines flow smoothly with great imagery. Thanks for the info in the author notes, too. Best wishes in the contest. This should be a contender for winning. Jan
Comment Written 17-Oct-2018
reply by the author on 17-Oct-2018
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Thank you so much. From your lips to the voters' ears. LOL
Comment from Kelly Hanna
You've done well to follow the rules. This is a good poem for Halloween. I liked the calmness that the first part gave me the feeling of. The next part was the freedom of that cool night in October, when we allow ourselves to play a fantasy character. You've done well! A well written piece!
reply by the author on 17-Oct-2018
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You've done well to follow the rules. This is a good poem for Halloween. I liked the calmness that the first part gave me the feeling of. The next part was the freedom of that cool night in October, when we allow ourselves to play a fantasy character. You've done well! A well written piece!
Comment Written 17-Oct-2018
reply by the author on 17-Oct-2018
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Thank you, Kelly.
Comment from Sandra du Plessis
A very welol-written Tanka about Halloween. It is the time of year when everyone seems to prepare for the one night that everyone comes together to celebrate the dead people.
reply by the author on 17-Oct-2018
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A very welol-written Tanka about Halloween. It is the time of year when everyone seems to prepare for the one night that everyone comes together to celebrate the dead people.
Comment Written 17-Oct-2018
reply by the author on 17-Oct-2018
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LOL. So True. Thank you.
Comment from Tina Crute
If this is your first try, then what hope do I have, lol. (I am just learning!)
Just a suggestion, because we are supposed to offer an idea...The last two lines are supposed to move the reader. The "night's sweet release" really does! The last line,"substandard lodgings" doesn't draw any emotion I think. I might switch the last two lines. It makes sense that way and you end with a great line. Just an idea for an already great poem. Good luck in the contest:)
reply by the author on 17-Oct-2018
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If this is your first try, then what hope do I have, lol. (I am just learning!)
Just a suggestion, because we are supposed to offer an idea...The last two lines are supposed to move the reader. The "night's sweet release" really does! The last line,"substandard lodgings" doesn't draw any emotion I think. I might switch the last two lines. It makes sense that way and you end with a great line. Just an idea for an already great poem. Good luck in the contest:)
Comment Written 17-Oct-2018
reply by the author on 17-Oct-2018
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Thank you for reviewing. Much appreciated.
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Welcome!
Comment from Sally Law
This is spooky good! Love your artwork! I am just learning about tanka poetry. Thank you for your instructional piece at the bottom. It was very helpful in understanding how to structure a tanka poem. All my best to you in the contest.
Sally
reply by the author on 17-Oct-2018
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This is spooky good! Love your artwork! I am just learning about tanka poetry. Thank you for your instructional piece at the bottom. It was very helpful in understanding how to structure a tanka poem. All my best to you in the contest.
Sally
Comment Written 17-Oct-2018
reply by the author on 17-Oct-2018
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Thank you, Sally. I appreciate your support.
Comment from heart of Lou
Halloween is just around the corner and the kindred witch spirits must be polishing their brooms and the ghosts washing their best sheets. Once a year, they get to celebrate!
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reply by the author on 17-Oct-2018
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Halloween is just around the corner and the kindred witch spirits must be polishing their brooms and the ghosts washing their best sheets. Once a year, they get to celebrate!
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Comment Written 17-Oct-2018
reply by the author on 17-Oct-2018
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Poor things. Just one night. Thank you for reviewing.
Comment from Miranda Langston
this is excellent for your first attempt at Tanka poetry. i absolutely love it as well as the picture you chose to accompany it. great job and good luck in the contest :)
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reply by the author on 17-Oct-2018
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this is excellent for your first attempt at Tanka poetry. i absolutely love it as well as the picture you chose to accompany it. great job and good luck in the contest :)
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Comment Written 17-Oct-2018
reply by the author on 17-Oct-2018
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Thank you so much. I appreciate that.
