Seeds
Loop poem5 total reviews
Comment from country ranch writer
Seeds of beauty to grow into luscious flowers for all of us to enjoy. Mother nature provides regrowth as the flowers drop their seeds for next year.
reply by the author on 21-Oct-2018
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Seeds of beauty to grow into luscious flowers for all of us to enjoy. Mother nature provides regrowth as the flowers drop their seeds for next year.
Comment Written 17-Oct-2018
reply by the author on 21-Oct-2018
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Thanks for the insightful review. I do believe compassion and empathy grow and spread when we plant those seeds. Cheers, j
Comment from rama devi
My favorite theme--kindness and compassion. Eloquently delivered. Fantastic presentation! Love the light.
This loop form is very difficult to do without it sounding forced. Using proper punctuation for enjambment in the first two stanzas would help. Examples:
Scatter seeds of kindness(--)
kindness, watch it grow,
grow in vines of empathy,
empathy in rows.
Rows of sweet compassion,
compassion that grows free(--)
free and wild this garden.
Garden peacefully.
My favorite is the third stanza:
Peacefully, the blossoms fly,
fly wide and joyfully.
Joyfully scatter those tiny seeds.
Seeds of love, sowed randomly.
Fine rhymes and flow overall. Excellent theme and imagery.
The joy is tangible. My mood is uplifted reading this!
Love,
rd
reply by the author on 22-Oct-2018
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My favorite theme--kindness and compassion. Eloquently delivered. Fantastic presentation! Love the light.
This loop form is very difficult to do without it sounding forced. Using proper punctuation for enjambment in the first two stanzas would help. Examples:
Scatter seeds of kindness(--)
kindness, watch it grow,
grow in vines of empathy,
empathy in rows.
Rows of sweet compassion,
compassion that grows free(--)
free and wild this garden.
Garden peacefully.
My favorite is the third stanza:
Peacefully, the blossoms fly,
fly wide and joyfully.
Joyfully scatter those tiny seeds.
Seeds of love, sowed randomly.
Fine rhymes and flow overall. Excellent theme and imagery.
The joy is tangible. My mood is uplifted reading this!
Love,
rd
Comment Written 17-Oct-2018
reply by the author on 22-Oct-2018
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Thanks for your wonderful and helpful review dear. I appreciate you. Cheers, j
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❤️❤️❤️ You too!
Comment from heart of Lou
This is a wonderfully, expertly done loop poem. I haven't tried it yet because they often sound contrived or don't make sense, but I love this one. It flows naturally and proclaims such a sweet message of kindness and love.
reply by the author on 22-Oct-2018
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This is a wonderfully, expertly done loop poem. I haven't tried it yet because they often sound contrived or don't make sense, but I love this one. It flows naturally and proclaims such a sweet message of kindness and love.
Comment Written 17-Oct-2018
reply by the author on 22-Oct-2018
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Thanks for the encouraging review and sparkly stars. I always try new poems at least once haha. Cheers, j
Comment from Miranda Langston
This is a truly excellent example of loop poetry. it's an excellent entry for the contest, that's for certain. good luck in the contest and keep writing :)
reply by the author on 22-Oct-2018
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This is a truly excellent example of loop poetry. it's an excellent entry for the contest, that's for certain. good luck in the contest and keep writing :)
Comment Written 17-Oct-2018
reply by the author on 22-Oct-2018
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Thanks for the encouraging review and sparkly stars. Cheers, j
Comment from lyenochka
What a perfect poem for today where there's such a need for compassion and mutual understanding. Great job with this loop poem which shows us the effect of how "seeds of kindness" can grow a fruitful garden and I like how you not only looped the words from line to line and stanza to stanza but you looped the thought of the seeds from the beginning to the end.
reply by the author on 22-Oct-2018
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What a perfect poem for today where there's such a need for compassion and mutual understanding. Great job with this loop poem which shows us the effect of how "seeds of kindness" can grow a fruitful garden and I like how you not only looped the words from line to line and stanza to stanza but you looped the thought of the seeds from the beginning to the end.
Comment Written 17-Oct-2018
reply by the author on 22-Oct-2018
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Thanks for the insightful review. You always get it. Cheers, j
