Potato Farmers
A 5-7-5 poem18 total reviews
Comment from Pantygynt
The choise of the adjective 'dirt' in the first line does more than merely stressing the poverty. It is well chosen. Again this to my mind is a senryu even though it is not by any means comedy or satire. The final line is another example of excellent word choice, both in the complex meaning of 'harvesting' and in the way 'wealth is diametrically opposed to 'dirt poor' in both meaning and physical position in the piece.
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The choise of the adjective 'dirt' in the first line does more than merely stressing the poverty. It is well chosen. Again this to my mind is a senryu even though it is not by any means comedy or satire. The final line is another example of excellent word choice, both in the complex meaning of 'harvesting' and in the way 'wealth is diametrically opposed to 'dirt poor' in both meaning and physical position in the piece.
Comment Written 17-Oct-2018
reply by the author on 17-Oct-2018
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Hi Jim. That was my intention using those words. But it took me a long time to come up with it. Thank you for your help and wonderful review
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Worth the wait.
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Thank you
Comment from Sandra du Plessis
A very well-written 5-7-5 poem. There is nothing wrong to be poor as long as we are working hard and earn the food on our table in an honest way. We do not need wealth, only God's grace is enough.
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A very well-written 5-7-5 poem. There is nothing wrong to be poor as long as we are working hard and earn the food on our table in an honest way. We do not need wealth, only God's grace is enough.
Comment Written 17-Oct-2018
reply by the author on 17-Oct-2018
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Thank you Sandra for your wonderful review
Comment from royowen
Yes, the poor don't have anything, they have to work hard to simply feed themselves, no TV, no internet or computer, and no iPhones or iPads, well done, Pam, good job, blessings, Roy
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Yes, the poor don't have anything, they have to work hard to simply feed themselves, no TV, no internet or computer, and no iPhones or iPads, well done, Pam, good job, blessings, Roy
Comment Written 17-Oct-2018
reply by the author on 17-Oct-2018
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Thank you Roy for a really nice review. I have not seen anything by you tonight.
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It's coming Heh heh
Comment from Thomas Bowling
They grow great potatoes in the Andes. I don't know how many varieties grow there, but I believe it's more than any other place in the world. I love the artwork.
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They grow great potatoes in the Andes. I don't know how many varieties grow there, but I believe it's more than any other place in the world. I love the artwork.
Comment Written 17-Oct-2018
reply by the author on 17-Oct-2018
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I think you are right about the varieties Thomas. Thank you so much for the lovely review
Comment from Lady Jane
Line one has 6 syllables I think. You could use 'tater farmers toil' maybe?
But other than that, this is a great short piece. I love that they are harvesting their wealth. What a wonderful picture also. You're only poor when you're not rich in self-motivated aspirations and ambitions.
Nice job, Pam. It's so good to see you around the site again. And those pictures LOVE THEM!
Janelle
reply by the author on 17-Oct-2018
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Line one has 6 syllables I think. You could use 'tater farmers toil' maybe?
But other than that, this is a great short piece. I love that they are harvesting their wealth. What a wonderful picture also. You're only poor when you're not rich in self-motivated aspirations and ambitions.
Nice job, Pam. It's so good to see you around the site again. And those pictures LOVE THEM!
Janelle
Comment Written 17-Oct-2018
reply by the author on 17-Oct-2018
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Crapola. Lol. I changed the first line to
dirt poor farmers toil
That makes
harvesting their wealth even more powerful. Thank you for pointing that out. There are ten other reviews. I wonder how many will point that out. An interesting experiment. Thank you so much for your suggestion/comment and for a truly lovely review
Comment from lyenochka
I like how you capture the back-breaking nature of the work in how you painted the posture of the people. And yet they are in community and talking with each other. I like your phrase, "harvesting their wealth" as their wealth is so much more than money.
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I like how you capture the back-breaking nature of the work in how you painted the posture of the people. And yet they are in community and talking with each other. I like your phrase, "harvesting their wealth" as their wealth is so much more than money.
Comment Written 17-Oct-2018
reply by the author on 17-Oct-2018
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Thank you Helen for your usual stellar review
Comment from Dean Kuch
Love the oil, Pam, and the accompanying 5-7-5 poem that goes along with it.
It must be great to be multi-talented in visual and literary arts.
Best of luck to you in the contest.
~Dean
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Love the oil, Pam, and the accompanying 5-7-5 poem that goes along with it.
It must be great to be multi-talented in visual and literary arts.
Best of luck to you in the contest.
~Dean
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Comment Written 17-Oct-2018
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Hi Dean. How are you? Nice to see you tonight. Thank you for your wonderful review
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My pleasure.
Comment from jenintorre
This is a lovely short poem. I really like it and of course the wonderful artwork as usual. Have you thought about producing a book with the artwork accompanied by the poems? Love Jen. X
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This is a lovely short poem. I really like it and of course the wonderful artwork as usual. Have you thought about producing a book with the artwork accompanied by the poems? Love Jen. X
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Comment Written 17-Oct-2018
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That is what I am aiming for Jen. But it will probably just be an album for the family archives. Thank you for suggesting that and the lovely review
