Broken You
A realization about promises.38 total reviews
Comment from Ricky1024
"Promises"are a Given Oath, A Truth Everlasting, aBond and Band-Aid Upon a Wound.'
Unfortunately I believe MissTina that in these days and times....
Promises are nothing but intentional gatherings between too flowers.
One in Bloom and one wanted to blossom.
The One in Bloom has it all and promises nothing in return, while the one wanting to Bloom?
Will lie and promise the world...
For...
'Fruitation.'
(Theology 41.05)
Doctor Ricky 1024 and..
The Doctor is out.
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reply by the author on 18-Oct-2018
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"Promises"are a Given Oath, A Truth Everlasting, aBond and Band-Aid Upon a Wound.'
Unfortunately I believe MissTina that in these days and times....
Promises are nothing but intentional gatherings between too flowers.
One in Bloom and one wanted to blossom.
The One in Bloom has it all and promises nothing in return, while the one wanting to Bloom?
Will lie and promise the world...
For...
'Fruitation.'
(Theology 41.05)
Doctor Ricky 1024 and..
The Doctor is out.
24.
Comment Written 18-Oct-2018
reply by the author on 18-Oct-2018
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You may be right. The provider's character should be reviewed before being trusted by me. I trust very few, though I love all my friends dearly. Thanks for your thoughts! I love seeing what's in other's brains!
Comment from Impromptu Scribe
This is a beautiful piece of writing and speaks to optimism despite the disappointment of feeling let down by others. I like the parallels between broken promises and shattered glass. Congratulations and good luck in the contest :) Best wishes
reply by the author on 18-Oct-2018
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This is a beautiful piece of writing and speaks to optimism despite the disappointment of feeling let down by others. I like the parallels between broken promises and shattered glass. Congratulations and good luck in the contest :) Best wishes
Comment Written 18-Oct-2018
reply by the author on 18-Oct-2018
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Thank you for your comments. It was my first Minute try. Just like promises, glass looks pretty and shiny...but fragile. You got it, totally. Thanks for sharing!
Comment from Gloria ....
Terrific job with your minute poem, Tina. You've written in pristine iambic metre with the traditional minute form rhymes and written about an important truth in the process.
Superb job and I wish you great luck with the Contest Committee.
Gloria
reply by the author on 18-Oct-2018
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Terrific job with your minute poem, Tina. You've written in pristine iambic metre with the traditional minute form rhymes and written about an important truth in the process.
Superb job and I wish you great luck with the Contest Committee.
Gloria
Comment Written 18-Oct-2018
reply by the author on 18-Oct-2018
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Thank you Gloria! I never even heard of a minute poem until a week or two ago LOL. I've written poetry for years but never delved deep into it, or thought I was any good, so this is so exciting for me and I can't wait to learn more! I really enjoyed the challenge of writing this in it touches me that you understood it and I did it right:-) Thank you so much for your nice review. I really appreciate it.
Comment from Cindy McIntyre
What a very powerful and emotional read. I agree promises are not easy to keep for those who remain, "broken." Your comparison to the broken glass as well. A well-written minute poem. Good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 18-Oct-2018
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What a very powerful and emotional read. I agree promises are not easy to keep for those who remain, "broken." Your comparison to the broken glass as well. A well-written minute poem. Good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 18-Oct-2018
reply by the author on 18-Oct-2018
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I'm glad you liked it and got the meaning. Thank you so much for reviewing my little poem!
Comment from SLMorrical
I really liked this. The picture adds to it. I can see the relation of the broken glass and the broken person. I can actually picture the person in pieces on the ground as they are broken and need repair. Well done. Keep writing.
reply by the author on 18-Oct-2018
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I really liked this. The picture adds to it. I can see the relation of the broken glass and the broken person. I can actually picture the person in pieces on the ground as they are broken and need repair. Well done. Keep writing.
Comment Written 18-Oct-2018
reply by the author on 18-Oct-2018
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Thank you so much! It's so rewarding that you can relate to my little poem. I appreciate the review so much :-)
Comment from Jannypan (Jan)
I enjoyed your minute contest entry, Tina. Good job on its style. I really like the observation you make with the promiser being broken. Thanks for sharing. Best wishes. Jan
reply by the author on 18-Oct-2018
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I enjoyed your minute contest entry, Tina. Good job on its style. I really like the observation you make with the promiser being broken. Thanks for sharing. Best wishes. Jan
Comment Written 18-Oct-2018
reply by the author on 18-Oct-2018
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I'm glad you enjoyed it! Thank you for taking the time to review my poem. I really appreciate it :-)
Comment from victor 66
A person that breaks small promises will most likely also break important promises. I like to pay attention to people when they borrow money, are done a favor or a kindness... to see how they react. Losing a few dollars is well worth the investment to find out about one's character. The trick is, not to have too much invested in someone you don't know very well. Good poem and a good lesson.
reply by the author on 18-Oct-2018
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A person that breaks small promises will most likely also break important promises. I like to pay attention to people when they borrow money, are done a favor or a kindness... to see how they react. Losing a few dollars is well worth the investment to find out about one's character. The trick is, not to have too much invested in someone you don't know very well. Good poem and a good lesson.
Comment Written 18-Oct-2018
reply by the author on 18-Oct-2018
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Yes, character and experience teach us a lot! If we aren't learning, I'm not sure we are living :-)
Good point about testing the waters. Thank you for writing a review on my poem. I really appreciate it!
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You are most welcome, Tina. Hope to read your work again.
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Comment from Mastery
Hi, Tina. Exploring your creative side is looking good on you, my friend. this is a very original piece of poetry that seems to draw the reader in, immediately.
"You can't be true
You're broken too" (If you're broken,too)
Brilliant write. Bob
reply by the author on 18-Oct-2018
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Hi, Tina. Exploring your creative side is looking good on you, my friend. this is a very original piece of poetry that seems to draw the reader in, immediately.
"You can't be true
You're broken too" (If you're broken,too)
Brilliant write. Bob
Comment Written 18-Oct-2018
reply by the author on 18-Oct-2018
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Wow, thank you so much for the vote of confidence! I appreciate the encouragement in the reading of my little poem. I don't get angry anymore when people break promises. I have empathy for them. I also don't believe everything I hear LOL.
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Good for you, Tina, Bob :)
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Living and learning go
together:)
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Yes. :)
Comment from Boogienights
Very well written poem about betrayal of trust.It s heartbreaking when someone you love let's you down. You write about this with passion and emotion, I think it comes from somewhere in your heart. Thanks for sharing.
reply by the author on 18-Oct-2018
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Very well written poem about betrayal of trust.It s heartbreaking when someone you love let's you down. You write about this with passion and emotion, I think it comes from somewhere in your heart. Thanks for sharing.
Comment Written 18-Oct-2018
reply by the author on 18-Oct-2018
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Yes, it is a lesson I learned first-hand. I was angry at first but over the years I have come to have empathy for that person because they are broken. I Now understand that they couldn't keep their promises. Good has come from it. It has made me more genuine and the things that I say. I rarely say anything offhand anymore. Thank you so much for reviewing and it means a lot that you understood emotion that I was trying to pen.Have a good evening!
Comment from harmony13
Excellent poem! The reader words were heart felt, clear and creative.
The reader pondered on the theme of this poem. Thank you for the
author's notes - you are so right. The artwork is perfect and compliments
this poem.
reply by the author on 18-Oct-2018
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Excellent poem! The reader words were heart felt, clear and creative.
The reader pondered on the theme of this poem. Thank you for the
author's notes - you are so right. The artwork is perfect and compliments
this poem.
Comment Written 18-Oct-2018
reply by the author on 18-Oct-2018
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Thank you for paying attention to my work. I am aware that the meeting could seem a little unclear, and I purposely didn't make it more specific. The reason I didn't is because the theme of promises affects different people in different ways and I wanted everyone to consider what promises meant to them and their relationships. I appreciate your input more than you know :-)
