The Secrets of Oceania
Mysterious ocean currents13 total reviews
Comment from Mustang Patty
Hi there,
This is a lovely Minute poem. These little poems are very difficult to write because, despite the site not asking for a strict iambic meter, those are the ones that usually win.
Thank you for sharing yours and good luck in the contest,
~MP~
reply by the author on 16-Oct-2018
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Hi there,
This is a lovely Minute poem. These little poems are very difficult to write because, despite the site not asking for a strict iambic meter, those are the ones that usually win.
Thank you for sharing yours and good luck in the contest,
~MP~
Comment Written 16-Oct-2018
reply by the author on 16-Oct-2018
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Thank you Patty! It is hard to write one of these and this is the second time I?ve tried iambic meter and I?m still not sure if I have gotten it right. I appreciate the review.
Comment from Ulla
This is just such a beautiful minute, and very attractive to me as I've been sailing most of my life. The sea is wondrous and still keeps so many secrets from mankind. I loved it. Good luck in the contest. All the best. Ulla:)))
reply by the author on 16-Oct-2018
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This is just such a beautiful minute, and very attractive to me as I've been sailing most of my life. The sea is wondrous and still keeps so many secrets from mankind. I loved it. Good luck in the contest. All the best. Ulla:)))
Comment Written 16-Oct-2018
reply by the author on 16-Oct-2018
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Thank you Ulla! I?m grateful for your comments.
Comment from GinnieD
The world under the sea is an amazing place. This poem contains good rhymes including "whirl/ curl," "flow/below," and "trained/constrained". The illusion painted is clear, and terms such as "shipwrecked graves" further demonstrate the theme of the poem. The first stanza enlightens the context and the third portrays the depths will not be held in. An enjoyable read.
reply by the author on 16-Oct-2018
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The world under the sea is an amazing place. This poem contains good rhymes including "whirl/ curl," "flow/below," and "trained/constrained". The illusion painted is clear, and terms such as "shipwrecked graves" further demonstrate the theme of the poem. The first stanza enlightens the context and the third portrays the depths will not be held in. An enjoyable read.
Comment Written 16-Oct-2018
reply by the author on 16-Oct-2018
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Thanks Ginnie. I appreciate your time and review.
Comment from Tia Attwood
A well written minute poem reflecting reflecting our ocean. your words flowed like the tide. perfect syllable count of 8,4,4,4 across all stanza's and perfect rhyme scheme of aabb......
great job and good luck in the contest.
regards
Tia
reply by the author on 16-Oct-2018
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A well written minute poem reflecting reflecting our ocean. your words flowed like the tide. perfect syllable count of 8,4,4,4 across all stanza's and perfect rhyme scheme of aabb......
great job and good luck in the contest.
regards
Tia
Comment Written 16-Oct-2018
reply by the author on 16-Oct-2018
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Thanks Tia. I really am grateful for your thoughts and review.
Comment from Rickie1
Sugarray77
Nice poem. I enjoyed reading it. Just the right length for a little poetry snack. Nice rhyme too. You create detailed imagery in each stanza that complement each other. You id good, as usual.
Rickie
reply by the author on 15-Oct-2018
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Sugarray77
Nice poem. I enjoyed reading it. Just the right length for a little poetry snack. Nice rhyme too. You create detailed imagery in each stanza that complement each other. You id good, as usual.
Rickie
Comment Written 15-Oct-2018
reply by the author on 15-Oct-2018
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Thanks so much Rickie, I really am grateful for your review and comments. It helps to know what the reader sees and which parts stand out to you. Thank you.
Comment from judiverse
This is powerful. You carried out the minute format perfectly. You use a lot of great action words like eddy, flow, plunge, and dance. They show the vigor of the sea. The sea is a force that can't be trained or constrained. Powerful imagery of the secrets that might lie below, such as the shipwrecks. Reference to Neptune is so appropriate. Beautifully done and worth a six. Best of luck in the contest. judi
reply by the author on 15-Oct-2018
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This is powerful. You carried out the minute format perfectly. You use a lot of great action words like eddy, flow, plunge, and dance. They show the vigor of the sea. The sea is a force that can't be trained or constrained. Powerful imagery of the secrets that might lie below, such as the shipwrecks. Reference to Neptune is so appropriate. Beautifully done and worth a six. Best of luck in the contest. judi
Comment Written 15-Oct-2018
reply by the author on 15-Oct-2018
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Thank you so much Judi. I am grateful for your review especially after reading your entry about a poet?s garden. That is a beautiful verse and in my mind should be picked for the winner. Thanks again!
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You're welcome. Yours is a really great entry. judi
Comment from Sandra du Plessis
A very well-written Minute poem the mysteries of the ocean exist since ancient times. The tides of the ocean controlled by the moon while we just see the ebb and flow.
reply by the author on 15-Oct-2018
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A very well-written Minute poem the mysteries of the ocean exist since ancient times. The tides of the ocean controlled by the moon while we just see the ebb and flow.
Comment Written 15-Oct-2018
reply by the author on 15-Oct-2018
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Thank you.
Comment from Karol Bond
Very well done. The artwork matches the piece nicely. I am a Pieces and tend to romanticize the sea. I liked the imagery good job and good luck with the contest. ;)
reply by the author on 15-Oct-2018
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Very well done. The artwork matches the piece nicely. I am a Pieces and tend to romanticize the sea. I liked the imagery good job and good luck with the contest. ;)
Comment Written 15-Oct-2018
reply by the author on 15-Oct-2018
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Thank you Karol.
Comment from phill doran
Hello Sugarray77
This is a very interesting topic for a very well presented Minute. The lower case and un-punctuated text allows the reader to determine their own pace and emphasis, but the story rolls of its own accord too. The second verse in particular is rich with imagery.
This is a tough competition, but I wish you well with, as I say, a very interesting poem.
cheers
phill
reply by the author on 15-Oct-2018
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Hello Sugarray77
This is a very interesting topic for a very well presented Minute. The lower case and un-punctuated text allows the reader to determine their own pace and emphasis, but the story rolls of its own accord too. The second verse in particular is rich with imagery.
This is a tough competition, but I wish you well with, as I say, a very interesting poem.
cheers
phill
Comment Written 15-Oct-2018
reply by the author on 15-Oct-2018
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Thank you Phill. i appreciate your review and taking time to do it. REgards. Melissa
Comment from Alexander Vasa
Hello Sugarray, I had to give this a six-star rating. It is just right. Lovely art that you've chosen, and it captured all that turbulence. I found your word combinations excellent and that is what made this a six-star poem. The dervish nature within the waves, everything works together just beautifully. Take a bow with this one, well deserved, cheers, Anastasia.
reply by the author on 15-Oct-2018
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Hello Sugarray, I had to give this a six-star rating. It is just right. Lovely art that you've chosen, and it captured all that turbulence. I found your word combinations excellent and that is what made this a six-star poem. The dervish nature within the waves, everything works together just beautifully. Take a bow with this one, well deserved, cheers, Anastasia.
Comment Written 15-Oct-2018
reply by the author on 15-Oct-2018
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Anastasia, you have made my day!! thank you for the wonderful review and stars. I?m grateful for your comments.
