~ Shelter ~
Short Poem - 5/7/516 total reviews
Comment from rspoet
Hello DD,
What a wonderful picture and poem you've written to match
with beautiful imagery and a nice touch of alliteration.
It won't be long before those little ones are flying
and raindrop will wash off their feathers
Excellent 5-7-5 poem
Best wishes to you
Robert
reply by the author on 20-Oct-2018
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Hello DD,
What a wonderful picture and poem you've written to match
with beautiful imagery and a nice touch of alliteration.
It won't be long before those little ones are flying
and raindrop will wash off their feathers
Excellent 5-7-5 poem
Best wishes to you
Robert
Comment Written 17-Oct-2018
reply by the author on 20-Oct-2018
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Robert, thank you for your encouraging review on my 5-7-5. As always, your comments are much appreciated : -) ~DD
Comment from Pam (respa)
-I love the image, DD.
-Syllable count is good.
-The imagery is vivid and
creates a picture of these
little guys trying to take
cover from the rain.
-Effective alliteration in line two.
-I also like the last line.
-Good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 20-Oct-2018
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-I love the image, DD.
-Syllable count is good.
-The imagery is vivid and
creates a picture of these
little guys trying to take
cover from the rain.
-Effective alliteration in line two.
-I also like the last line.
-Good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 17-Oct-2018
reply by the author on 20-Oct-2018
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Thank you Pam for taking time to review my short poem. As always, I much appreciate your support. ~DD
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You are very welcome, DD.
Comment from Ogden
Yes, they had better get out from under that inadequate umbrella, to a dry hole in a tree, if they give a hoot about their circumstance.
Good work, and good luck in the competition, DD!
G'day, mate,
Don
reply by the author on 16-Oct-2018
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Yes, they had better get out from under that inadequate umbrella, to a dry hole in a tree, if they give a hoot about their circumstance.
Good work, and good luck in the competition, DD!
G'day, mate,
Don
Comment Written 16-Oct-2018
reply by the author on 16-Oct-2018
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G'day Don, it's been a while since I've heard from you. I hope you are well. Thank you for popping in to take some time to review my short poem. As always, its good to hear from you. ~DD
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You're welcome, DD. I'm doing fine, and I hope you are, too. We just haven't been keeping in touch, like the good old days. :o)
G'day,
Don
Comment from Irish Rain
What a darling 5-7-5. I just adore this precious picture. And the words you've chosen make this a winner!! Best of luck to you DD. This is awesome!
Blessings...
reply by the author on 16-Oct-2018
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What a darling 5-7-5. I just adore this precious picture. And the words you've chosen make this a winner!! Best of luck to you DD. This is awesome!
Blessings...
Comment Written 15-Oct-2018
reply by the author on 16-Oct-2018
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Thank you, as always, Irish Rain. I appreciate your supportive comments on my short 5-7-5 poem. ~DD
Comment from mermaids
Your 5-7-5 form creates a picture of nature. I like the image of birds dreaming about flight. It makes them real and the pic is so cute. Your words take the reader out into nature.
reply by the author on 15-Oct-2018
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Your 5-7-5 form creates a picture of nature. I like the image of birds dreaming about flight. It makes them real and the pic is so cute. Your words take the reader out into nature.
Comment Written 15-Oct-2018
reply by the author on 15-Oct-2018
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Thank you Mermaids for taking the time to review my short poem. Your thoughtful comments are much appreciated. ~DD
Comment from Rubylou
Hello,
This little poem is absolutely wonderful.
The image caught my eye at first; so sweet, and your words bring it to a meaningful and amazing treat for the imagination.
Wonderfully done.
Rubylou
reply by the author on 15-Oct-2018
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Hello,
This little poem is absolutely wonderful.
The image caught my eye at first; so sweet, and your words bring it to a meaningful and amazing treat for the imagination.
Wonderfully done.
Rubylou
Comment Written 15-Oct-2018
reply by the author on 15-Oct-2018
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Thank you Rubylou for taking the time to review my short poem and for the wonderful six stars. Your thoughtful comments are most welcomed and much appreciated. I am happy the sweet little beings caught your attention : -) ~DD
Comment from Pantygynt
Sensible creatures. They'd be better off not taking flight really. was this how the umbrella got invented? they do say owls are supposed to be wise. They are owls or owlets, are they not?
reply by the author on 15-Oct-2018
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Sensible creatures. They'd be better off not taking flight really. was this how the umbrella got invented? they do say owls are supposed to be wise. They are owls or owlets, are they not?
Comment Written 15-Oct-2018
reply by the author on 15-Oct-2018
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Thank you Pantygynt for your review on my 5-7-5 poem. They are Birds of the night and very cute ones at that. ~DD
Comment from BeasPeas
An adorable poem with an equally charming image. Yes, the owl babes dreams of flight look like they are put on hold for now, but I hope winning the contest isn't put on hold. Good luck with this nice entry. Marilyn
reply by the author on 15-Oct-2018
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An adorable poem with an equally charming image. Yes, the owl babes dreams of flight look like they are put on hold for now, but I hope winning the contest isn't put on hold. Good luck with this nice entry. Marilyn
Comment Written 15-Oct-2018
reply by the author on 15-Oct-2018
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Thank you Marilyn. I appreciate your comments on my 5-7-5 poem. ~DD
Comment from Sandra du Plessis
A very well-written 5-7-5 poem. Birds in nature also sometimes find shelter against the rain. It seems no one likes to get wet in rainy conditions. Finding shelter is pure instinct.
reply by the author on 16-Oct-2018
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A very well-written 5-7-5 poem. Birds in nature also sometimes find shelter against the rain. It seems no one likes to get wet in rainy conditions. Finding shelter is pure instinct.
Comment Written 15-Oct-2018
reply by the author on 16-Oct-2018
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Thank you Sandra. Your comments are always appreciated. Thank you for taking the time to review my short 5-7-5 poem. ~DD
Comment from rama devi
Wonderful three liner. A strong contender, I imagine. Awesome artistic alliteration abounds. I like the word play on
while wet weather rains supreme
reigns and rains - well done.
I suggest moving the dash from line three to line two (optional).
Loved reading this aloud, especially the F and S and W sounds.
Great presentation picture too.
Bravo and good luck.
Warmly, rd
reply by the author on 16-Oct-2018
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Wonderful three liner. A strong contender, I imagine. Awesome artistic alliteration abounds. I like the word play on
while wet weather rains supreme
reigns and rains - well done.
I suggest moving the dash from line three to line two (optional).
Loved reading this aloud, especially the F and S and W sounds.
Great presentation picture too.
Bravo and good luck.
Warmly, rd
Comment Written 15-Oct-2018
reply by the author on 16-Oct-2018
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Thank you so much RD for taking the time to review my short poem. I have been short of time quite a bit lately but do appreciate your comments and popping in. Blessing ~DD
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A pleasure! Blessings, rd
