Hublot
Swiss Watch.3 total reviews
Comment from Tirzah Greene
Oops. Perhaps there was some difficulty transferring this piece over? There are no periods, which makes it really difficult to read. I think it does need some editing. Yes. :)
reply by the author on 19-Oct-2018
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Oops. Perhaps there was some difficulty transferring this piece over? There are no periods, which makes it really difficult to read. I think it does need some editing. Yes. :)
Comment Written 19-Oct-2018
reply by the author on 19-Oct-2018
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True partially done.
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Comment from Lady Jane
This is missing entire punctuation set. I can help you if you'd like, punctuate it. Just let me know. Example below:
What would you do if something amazing happened to you(?) (T)o be(,) or not to be(,) that is the mystery(.) (T)hat is (the) question reviewers as I'm heading in a wrong or right direction(.) (Sublet) is a fine watch company based in VAR Pele(,) Switzerland(.)
Let me know if you'd like further help. I will assist you. I read it, but due to the missing punctuation and disjointed sentences, it was hard to understand the gist of the story. A little TLC and you'll have a fine entry. It's quite interesting. Yes, what are the odds that something so amazing could happen :)
Take care and good luck in the contest. Once you address the punctuation, etc, if you don't desire my help, let me know so I can come back and upgrade the star count to the five it will deserve when finished. Don't forget. I will come back :)
Janelle
reply by the author on 11-Oct-2018
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This is missing entire punctuation set. I can help you if you'd like, punctuate it. Just let me know. Example below:
What would you do if something amazing happened to you(?) (T)o be(,) or not to be(,) that is the mystery(.) (T)hat is (the) question reviewers as I'm heading in a wrong or right direction(.) (Sublet) is a fine watch company based in VAR Pele(,) Switzerland(.)
Let me know if you'd like further help. I will assist you. I read it, but due to the missing punctuation and disjointed sentences, it was hard to understand the gist of the story. A little TLC and you'll have a fine entry. It's quite interesting. Yes, what are the odds that something so amazing could happen :)
Take care and good luck in the contest. Once you address the punctuation, etc, if you don't desire my help, let me know so I can come back and upgrade the star count to the five it will deserve when finished. Don't forget. I will come back :)
Janelle
Comment Written 10-Oct-2018
reply by the author on 11-Oct-2018
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Thanks and on busy on aThird book this month.
That was just a contest fluke.
Got tons of time.
Ricky...
Comment from Greg Powell
Wow. There is a lot of knowledge in this piece. Something I can relate to far as being edited. The technical jargon lost me and I wasn't sure when a sentence ended or began. As far as for the content a feel it could have been a little more organized. I 'am not trying to be overly critical I just want to comprehend the message.
reply by the author on 10-Oct-2018
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Wow. There is a lot of knowledge in this piece. Something I can relate to far as being edited. The technical jargon lost me and I wasn't sure when a sentence ended or began. As far as for the content a feel it could have been a little more organized. I 'am not trying to be overly critical I just want to comprehend the message.
Comment Written 10-Oct-2018
reply by the author on 10-Oct-2018
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Hit it again.
I didn't have time.
Doctor Ricky 1024.
