God Omnipresent Does
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Comment from BeasPeas
This is an interesting little poem which points out we are exactly where we're supposed to be and that is the place that makes us happy. We all just want tranquility. Marilyn
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This is an interesting little poem which points out we are exactly where we're supposed to be and that is the place that makes us happy. We all just want tranquility. Marilyn
Comment Written 20-Oct-2018
Comment from kiwigirl2821
Hello Alcreator. I enjoyed this little piece and your style. Poetry doesn't have to do anything but reflect the writer's thoughts and emotions. You have done that well with this piece. xoxo Kiwi
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Hello Alcreator. I enjoyed this little piece and your style. Poetry doesn't have to do anything but reflect the writer's thoughts and emotions. You have done that well with this piece. xoxo Kiwi
Comment Written 12-Oct-2018
Comment from Ann Marie Anglin
Now this is curious! One man's utopia is another man's Hell. If it sounds too good to be true, it probably is. Being of a suspicious nature myself, I'd get very paranoid if everything seemed too easy or too perfect. Since there is no such place, though, I guess we're safe. Very enjoyable. Thanks for sharing, Ann Marie
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Now this is curious! One man's utopia is another man's Hell. If it sounds too good to be true, it probably is. Being of a suspicious nature myself, I'd get very paranoid if everything seemed too easy or too perfect. Since there is no such place, though, I guess we're safe. Very enjoyable. Thanks for sharing, Ann Marie
Comment Written 12-Oct-2018
Comment from rspoet
Hello Alcreator,
This is a very fine free verse poem. It sounds a bit like Camelot
or some secret garden where humanity is the guiding principle.
You should let your poetic muse run free more often.
I think you'd find many would love to move there.
Nicely done
Robert
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Hello Alcreator,
This is a very fine free verse poem. It sounds a bit like Camelot
or some secret garden where humanity is the guiding principle.
You should let your poetic muse run free more often.
I think you'd find many would love to move there.
Nicely done
Robert
Comment Written 12-Oct-2018
Comment from Dorothy Farrell
Hi ALD, this is a well written free verse and it sounds just perfect - I'm on my way LOL! This is a rhyme about a place where life could be just fine - are you talking about Nirvana? Nice thought but highly unlikely to exist LOL! A fun write. Thanks for the read - Regards Dorothy
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Hi ALD, this is a well written free verse and it sounds just perfect - I'm on my way LOL! This is a rhyme about a place where life could be just fine - are you talking about Nirvana? Nice thought but highly unlikely to exist LOL! A fun write. Thanks for the read - Regards Dorothy
Comment Written 12-Oct-2018
Comment from Cherubel
It seems the writer is already there unless it is too hard to imagine, that's what gives this read some light and capricious mood. It is not pointless but all in all it takes you where any one wouldn't want to be and for that matter is just relevant to see. I liked that it made me go there and then it made me see how that could also be helpful in the manner of what I might need. It still left me with no other place to go. Perhaps trying to trick me with realists sarcasm. It would be plane if not for that. Still a bit dry in that accepting of whats normal or average. Modestly speaking.
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It seems the writer is already there unless it is too hard to imagine, that's what gives this read some light and capricious mood. It is not pointless but all in all it takes you where any one wouldn't want to be and for that matter is just relevant to see. I liked that it made me go there and then it made me see how that could also be helpful in the manner of what I might need. It still left me with no other place to go. Perhaps trying to trick me with realists sarcasm. It would be plane if not for that. Still a bit dry in that accepting of whats normal or average. Modestly speaking.
Comment Written 11-Oct-2018
Comment from kleck140
It was fun reading your poems and it is well worded
with a great message. Reminds me of the times I had
to move. Great to be there until the next "want it" house comes along. Thanks for sharing.
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It was fun reading your poems and it is well worded
with a great message. Reminds me of the times I had
to move. Great to be there until the next "want it" house comes along. Thanks for sharing.
Comment Written 11-Oct-2018
Comment from Joan E.
Yes, "there" sounds like paradise, and I would like to your dream country too! I especially appreciated its practice of "Humanity" and no capital punishment. I enjoyed your repeats and circularity for emphasis. Cheers- Joan
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Yes, "there" sounds like paradise, and I would like to your dream country too! I especially appreciated its practice of "Humanity" and no capital punishment. I enjoyed your repeats and circularity for emphasis. Cheers- Joan
Comment Written 11-Oct-2018
Comment from Shanbreen
It's not quite so silly in the message it creates. Your poems generally have a message even if they are not structured as poems generally are. However, in this one, you have some nice alliterations Thanks for sharing.
Come along
Come rolling
Come ringing
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It's not quite so silly in the message it creates. Your poems generally have a message even if they are not structured as poems generally are. However, in this one, you have some nice alliterations Thanks for sharing.
Come along
Come rolling
Come ringing
Comment Written 11-Oct-2018
Comment from karenina
There is a joyful abandon to this piece that is infectious. I imagine an artist painting beyond the canvas...onto the walls...across the ceiling and floor...flinging colors of joy and peace out the window to adorn our world!
Karenina
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There is a joyful abandon to this piece that is infectious. I imagine an artist painting beyond the canvas...onto the walls...across the ceiling and floor...flinging colors of joy and peace out the window to adorn our world!
Karenina
Comment Written 11-Oct-2018
