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Comment from Liz O'Neill
Your alliteration becomes marvelous onomatopoeia. This literary technique brings delight to the spirit of the poem especially if read aloud as all poetry should be. No monasteries or monastic ruled convents: "Religious places and religious institutions are not there
Know man as man by status and community there" This is wonderful. Many a reader will long for this place. Well expressed.
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Your alliteration becomes marvelous onomatopoeia. This literary technique brings delight to the spirit of the poem especially if read aloud as all poetry should be. No monasteries or monastic ruled convents: "Religious places and religious institutions are not there
Know man as man by status and community there" This is wonderful. Many a reader will long for this place. Well expressed.
Comment Written 05-Apr-2022
Comment from GWHARGIS
I like this free style of your own making. There is always that place where we think the world will be kinder, where our problems will disappear. A place where we will escape whatever is holding us back. Great step out of reality but still tethered to the real world. Good job on this. Gretchen
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I like this free style of your own making. There is always that place where we think the world will be kinder, where our problems will disappear. A place where we will escape whatever is holding us back. Great step out of reality but still tethered to the real world. Good job on this. Gretchen
Comment Written 06-Jun-2020
Comment from joycetreasures
Hello ALCREATOR,
I pray all is well with you. This is lovely written poem of a place I would love to live there. Peaceful and we can enjoy three seasons and three times vacations a year. That would be a blessing anywhere. I like how you formatted and wrote this calming poem. I wish it was a reality place. You showed heartfelt emotions in your message. It was such an enjoyable read. Thank you for this uplifting poem. Well-penned. Happy writing:-)
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Hello ALCREATOR,
I pray all is well with you. This is lovely written poem of a place I would love to live there. Peaceful and we can enjoy three seasons and three times vacations a year. That would be a blessing anywhere. I like how you formatted and wrote this calming poem. I wish it was a reality place. You showed heartfelt emotions in your message. It was such an enjoyable read. Thank you for this uplifting poem. Well-penned. Happy writing:-)
Comment Written 06-Jun-2020
Comment from mvbrooks
I'm sorry some needed author notes to enjoy the poem. When I read the title "Let's Move to There," -- this is pretty much what I expected--to read about a place we'd like to go, or dream about going, but don't always find out way to it.
Curious why the poem has the lines "let's move there" (smooth) but the title includes the word "to" -- "Let Move to There" -- for me, the title seemed awkard.
This poem reminded me of the Muppet movie song, Rainbow connection, because while the phrasing is different, the sentiment seems similar and that connection made your poem even more enjoyable to read.
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I'm sorry some needed author notes to enjoy the poem. When I read the title "Let's Move to There," -- this is pretty much what I expected--to read about a place we'd like to go, or dream about going, but don't always find out way to it.
Curious why the poem has the lines "let's move there" (smooth) but the title includes the word "to" -- "Let Move to There" -- for me, the title seemed awkard.
This poem reminded me of the Muppet movie song, Rainbow connection, because while the phrasing is different, the sentiment seems similar and that connection made your poem even more enjoyable to read.
Comment Written 06-Jun-2020
Comment from Alchera
"Countdown begins
Enjoy three seasons and three times vacations a year
Enjoy your job occupations and professions
Or vocations or avocations
Know no scams and corruptions
Free nominations for ministerial posts are not followed there
Let's move to there"
Where could this utopian heavenly place of peace and love be where all men of goodwill will no longer be hindered by inhuman barbarism and unimaginable abominable acts? Only the island of LOVE does. Great work!
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"Countdown begins
Enjoy three seasons and three times vacations a year
Enjoy your job occupations and professions
Or vocations or avocations
Know no scams and corruptions
Free nominations for ministerial posts are not followed there
Let's move to there"
Where could this utopian heavenly place of peace and love be where all men of goodwill will no longer be hindered by inhuman barbarism and unimaginable abominable acts? Only the island of LOVE does. Great work!
Comment Written 06-Jun-2020
Comment from artisart4u
Yes, in our minds we can move to there and treat each one as an equal.
In every stanza you think about moving to there, were there is peace and harmony.
This is not a silly poem, it is one to meditate on. I would call it written in a free verse poem style.
This is a nice inspiring, peaceful poem.
Congratulations on your wins.
Good luck with your poem.
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Yes, in our minds we can move to there and treat each one as an equal.
In every stanza you think about moving to there, were there is peace and harmony.
This is not a silly poem, it is one to meditate on. I would call it written in a free verse poem style.
This is a nice inspiring, peaceful poem.
Congratulations on your wins.
Good luck with your poem.
Comment Written 06-Jun-2020
Comment from Elizabeth Emerald
Wryly whimsical and clever take on grass is always greener. Amusing wordplay and alliteration--rolling. ringing, singing...eligibility...disability. Cheers. LIZ
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Wryly whimsical and clever take on grass is always greener. Amusing wordplay and alliteration--rolling. ringing, singing...eligibility...disability. Cheers. LIZ
Comment Written 06-Jun-2020
Comment from Jeffrey Ford
I think you wrote another awesome poem. It is really well written and I enjoy your poem because there is a count down that does begin to a better place than the problems of this world. Heaven is a amazing place.
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I think you wrote another awesome poem. It is really well written and I enjoy your poem because there is a count down that does begin to a better place than the problems of this world. Heaven is a amazing place.
Comment Written 05-Jun-2020
Comment from Lucy de Welles
All of us have a place we would like to go. A different reality. The beauty of being a powerful human is that we can do just that. This is a lovely expression of the author's confidence and longing to go to a fair and happy place. Where people choose peace and equality and focus on the needful things, like love and community. Yes, freedom is a choice. His prose unfolds like a flower, revealing the things that constitute freedom for him.
Lovely. Enjoying the free-flowing style of phrase.
Well done!
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All of us have a place we would like to go. A different reality. The beauty of being a powerful human is that we can do just that. This is a lovely expression of the author's confidence and longing to go to a fair and happy place. Where people choose peace and equality and focus on the needful things, like love and community. Yes, freedom is a choice. His prose unfolds like a flower, revealing the things that constitute freedom for him.
Lovely. Enjoying the free-flowing style of phrase.
Well done!
Comment Written 05-Jun-2020
Comment from harmony13
The author's words are interesting, descriptive, clear and creative. I found
this poem thought provoking and entertaining a very special there! Most of the author's words sounded like a delightful place! The author has a great imagination! Have a great weekend!
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The author's words are interesting, descriptive, clear and creative. I found
this poem thought provoking and entertaining a very special there! Most of the author's words sounded like a delightful place! The author has a great imagination! Have a great weekend!
Comment Written 05-Jun-2020
