Please Don't Read me your Poems
A wife's love of the art4 total reviews
Comment from Liz O'Neill
I like your tongue-in-cheek humor. That first line sounds like a come-on line. Pretty blunt. And then in additipon to being approached with that line, he's reading her a love poem or some other subject to be another come-on tactic. Probably not something to attempt on a barstool. She will move away and he will be his own audience. This all creates great imagery for the reader, especially if they are prone to woo women with poetry or have been schmoozed with poetry. Or they can be invited to reflect on similar experiences and how they became their own audience. Well written. I am voting for this.
reply by the author on 04-Dec-2018
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I like your tongue-in-cheek humor. That first line sounds like a come-on line. Pretty blunt. And then in additipon to being approached with that line, he's reading her a love poem or some other subject to be another come-on tactic. Probably not something to attempt on a barstool. She will move away and he will be his own audience. This all creates great imagery for the reader, especially if they are prone to woo women with poetry or have been schmoozed with poetry. Or they can be invited to reflect on similar experiences and how they became their own audience. Well written. I am voting for this.
Comment Written 10-Oct-2018
reply by the author on 04-Dec-2018
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I'm so sorry for the late reply! I was off for a while. But THANK YOU!
And thank you for such a thoughtful review. Truly.
Comment from Earl Corp
That was cool separating married are you with a comma. The prompt and the poem constraints are challenging but you did a nice job. Good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 04-Dec-2018
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That was cool separating married are you with a comma. The prompt and the poem constraints are challenging but you did a nice job. Good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 08-Oct-2018
reply by the author on 04-Dec-2018
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I'm so sorry for the late reply! I was off for a while. But THANK YOU!
Comment from kiwijenny
My hubby feigns delight well. Ha ha but I make him listen to stuff for a four year old...laugh out loud. But I need to read my poetry out loud becomes that's how the kids will hear it...it has to sound right...long suffering husband's and wives....should join a support group
God bless
reply by the author on 04-Dec-2018
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My hubby feigns delight well. Ha ha but I make him listen to stuff for a four year old...laugh out loud. But I need to read my poetry out loud becomes that's how the kids will hear it...it has to sound right...long suffering husband's and wives....should join a support group
God bless
Comment Written 08-Oct-2018
reply by the author on 04-Dec-2018
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I'm so sorry for the late reply! I was off for a while. But THANK YOU!
Really thank you Jenny, means a lot when you read
Comment from meeshu
This is a very fine piece of writing. It has a wonderful cadence and pace. Excellent verse and verbiage. Well done, Anno. my wife is a tough critic, brutal.
I wish you well in all your future endeavors.......................meeshu
reply by the author on 04-Dec-2018
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This is a very fine piece of writing. It has a wonderful cadence and pace. Excellent verse and verbiage. Well done, Anno. my wife is a tough critic, brutal.
I wish you well in all your future endeavors.......................meeshu
Comment Written 08-Oct-2018
reply by the author on 04-Dec-2018
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I'm so sorry for the late reply! I was off for a while. But THANK YOU!
