Gentle Awakening
She comes every day.6 total reviews
Comment from kathleenspalding
Nice senryu feeling in this sweet five - seven - five poem. Excellent use of artwork, colors, font, and arrangement reinforces the mood of the poem. Great job!
reply by the author on 07-Oct-2018
  |
Nice senryu feeling in this sweet five - seven - five poem. Excellent use of artwork, colors, font, and arrangement reinforces the mood of the poem. Great job!
Comment Written 07-Oct-2018
reply by the author on 07-Oct-2018
-
Thank you so much for your review and encouraging words
-
You're welcome
Comment from BermyBye50
A beautifully written verse about light. The simple fact that light gently awakens us every morning is a perfect subject for this contest.
All the best in the contest
Eugene
reply by the author on 07-Oct-2018
|
A beautifully written verse about light. The simple fact that light gently awakens us every morning is a perfect subject for this contest.
All the best in the contest
Eugene
Comment Written 07-Oct-2018
reply by the author on 07-Oct-2018
-
Thanks much for your read and encouraging words.
Comment from Bill Schott
This personification of light 5-7-5, Gentle Awakening, has the correct formatting and finds sunlight creeping into our world to rouse us and show us something new..
reply by the author on 07-Oct-2018
|
This personification of light 5-7-5, Gentle Awakening, has the correct formatting and finds sunlight creeping into our world to rouse us and show us something new..
Comment Written 07-Oct-2018
reply by the author on 07-Oct-2018
-
Thank you for your review and your comments.
Comment from Liz O'Neill
In addition to personification, you clearly have intense sensory affect. The imagery is strong. The reader is drawn in and invited to reflect on a similar experience or to imagine how that might feel. This has a beautiful sensuality. With such an appreciation for the new light welcoming the speaker, it is a fair guess that the speaker will have a positive day and if some dark situation threatens to douse the inner light, this person will be able to recapture their initial feeling of hope. Well written. I'm voting for this.
reply by the author on 07-Oct-2018
|
In addition to personification, you clearly have intense sensory affect. The imagery is strong. The reader is drawn in and invited to reflect on a similar experience or to imagine how that might feel. This has a beautiful sensuality. With such an appreciation for the new light welcoming the speaker, it is a fair guess that the speaker will have a positive day and if some dark situation threatens to douse the inner light, this person will be able to recapture their initial feeling of hope. Well written. I'm voting for this.
Comment Written 06-Oct-2018
reply by the author on 07-Oct-2018
-
Thank you for your read and thoughtful comments.
Comment from KatyM
Very sweet. I love the picture you chose for this poem. I have no additions or subtractions. I would like to think that my daughter visits me when I am asleep. She passed away from a brain tumor in 2001. She was 10 1/2 years old. Anyway, Good luck with the contest.
Happy Writing,
Katy Moffitt
reply by the author on 06-Oct-2018
|
Very sweet. I love the picture you chose for this poem. I have no additions or subtractions. I would like to think that my daughter visits me when I am asleep. She passed away from a brain tumor in 2001. She was 10 1/2 years old. Anyway, Good luck with the contest.
Happy Writing,
Katy Moffitt
Comment Written 06-Oct-2018
reply by the author on 06-Oct-2018
-
So sorry about your daughter. I'm sure you can feel her at times. Thanks for the read and the review.
Comment from Loredana
Nice Haiku about the new day... I think it's about a new day. One question only, why 'she'? Or maybe it's the light or the breeze? If it's the light or the breeze, then, 'she' is appropriate. I think I'm getting confused by the picture. :)
reply by the author on 06-Oct-2018
|
Nice Haiku about the new day... I think it's about a new day. One question only, why 'she'? Or maybe it's the light or the breeze? If it's the light or the breeze, then, 'she' is appropriate. I think I'm getting confused by the picture. :)
Comment Written 06-Oct-2018
reply by the author on 06-Oct-2018
-
Light is the element to be personified in the haiku, therefore the use of she and fingers. The picture is to show light gently entering the bedroom. Thanks for the read and the rating.
