Comment from marinaluv

Excellent

This is an innovate, thinking piece. The tone is very unique, I don't read very many pieces that sound the ay yours does in my head. While smart, it is captivating. The picture pairs well with what you have written. Overall it was a joy to read.

 Comment Written 09-Oct-2018

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reply by the author on 09-Oct-2018

Thank you very much for the delightful comments. I'm glad it seems to have struck a chord :) Craig

Comment from royowen

Excellent

One of the ladies online, Lynochka, similarly writes a series on obscure, or ancient words, or even phrases. It's amazing how language, depending on its root source, inter-flatters its origins. My wife studied something similar on Germanic language origins. Great internall rhyme, as assonancial sounds, internal rhyme, good stylisation in your expression, an excellent read, well done, blessings, Roy

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reply by the author on 09-Oct-2018

Yes, I enjoy Lyenochka's posts very much. She is very much more up with multiple languages than I am. Thank you for the most delightful comments, I'm most grateful. Craig

reply by royowen on 10-Oct-2018

Well done Craig

Comment from Sanku

Excellent

Human actions tell the story of a violent bloodline
So true .Your poems tells the story of the birth of our beautiful planet and then how we are systematically destroying it
I enjoyed the vocabulary in your poem and the alliteration annd assonance .The structure suits the theme

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reply by the author on 09-Oct-2018

Thank you very much for the thoughtful review. I am most grateful for the kind comments. Craig

Comment from Mrs. KT

Exceptional

Hello Craig,
Edgar would be most appreciative!
But that aside, I am struck by the messages found your exceptionally well-crafted poetic offering:
..."men with motives not benign.
There's a darkness on this planet, and it's mankind that began it..."

And yet, there is hope...there must be hope...that somehow mankind will overcome the "darkness" before it is too late...


Regarding the question you posted in the forum about "Earth...reflect," from a purely grammatical stance, since Earth is third person singular, it would take the singular verb, reflects. However, as I read your beautiful verse, my sense is that you are saying "... for it seems obligatory (that) Earth reflect that sun's full glory..." In that case, "Earth reflect" is appropriate. Just my thought.


Thank you again! A moving rendering.

diane

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reply by the author on 09-Oct-2018

Hi Diane,

Thanks for the exceptional rating, the wonderful comments, and for clearing up the point about "reflect". I think I didn't express myself too well in the forum, but I didn't want to drag the conversation on too much, and appear argumentative. In any case, the consensus seemed to be coming around to no "s", so it's stayed that way. I really appreciate your input, and taking the time to read and comment. Most grateful, Craig
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Comment from Dolly'sPoems

Excellent

I loved the sentiments here, letting the light in and the reflection of sunlight on the earth to light the darkness and bring with it kindness, 'we will shine', great words, love Dolly x

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reply by the author on 09-Oct-2018

Thanks so much, Dolly, for the kind words. Words of hope, not necessarily optimism :) Most grateful -- Craig

Comment from LIJ Red

Excellent

Nuke 'em till they glow so we can shoot 'em in the dark...I think the name they gave the mystery hit and run vehicle of time long gone was Theia...when Coleridge saw "the horned moon with one bright star within the nether tip" musta been a UFO...excellent post

 Comment Written 08-Oct-2018

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reply by the author on 09-Oct-2018

Thanks so much, much appreciated. Craig

Comment from rhonnie69

Excellent

HELLO CD RICHARDS: Out of your posting here arises countless questions. Questions that I, myself have no answers to. However...I know who does. Who? Our God has all of the correct answers. Those answers can be found in our Holy Bible at: GENESIS chapters...1, through chapter 4. These are not my answers. These are, our God's answers. And they are all accurate, true, and trustworthy. Trust Him, CD Richards. He is your creator, your life, and your God. May He bless you and yours. Cordially: rhonnie69.

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reply by the author on 09-Oct-2018

Hello, Rhonnie69. Were you born in 1969, or are you 69 years young? Thanks for reviewing my poem ;-) Craig

Comment from rama devi

Exceptional

Wow. This is your best poem yet, my friend. Utterly immense in meaning...and masterfully crafted, especially the internal rhymes (fresh, inventive rhymes and slant rhymes, well timed) and the rhythmic cadences as well as phonetics in phrasing. My favorite lines:


Is there hope for this, our species? Are our hearts but mere prostheses?
Just more primates hurling feces, our behaviour asinine?
Were we just to learn compassion, kindness might return to fashion,
then we'd moderate our passion; if these things we could combine.


The meter is amazing. However, I felt there were some mildly forced scansion issues in these lines:


Thus, a satellite we came by, pride of place within our night sky;
luminescent orb up on high, to the sailors, a lifeline.
Mariners at sea pay homage, to their heavenly lifeline.

And theee:

Here we cannot end this story, for it seems obligatory

Love the rhymes here:

Yes, the moon's poorly reflective, though more so than the invective
spouted by a small collective, men with motives not benign.


Perfect closing note:

When we learn to reason clearly, thought and action to combine,
some day, maybe, we will shine.

Stroke of genius phrasing: Are our hearts but mere prostheses?

Kudos! Impressive!


Warmly, rd

 Comment Written 08-Oct-2018

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reply by the author on 09-Oct-2018

Thank you so much for the wonderfully kind comments, RD, and also for the delightful rating. I accept those lines are not 100% smooth, I'll see if I can come up with something better. Most grateful, as always. Craig

reply by rama devi on 09-Oct-2018

;-)))))

Comment from Bill Schott

Exceptional

This poem, Earthshine, constructed with an ABCBBB rhyme scheme and an intricate and superior internal or midline-to-line center rhyme. The image and connection to this earthshine throws a light on our past and a beacon to our possibilities after today.

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reply by the author on 09-Oct-2018

Thanks very much for the kind comments, and the most generous rating, Bill. I'm very much grateful for both, Craig.

Comment from rjuselius

Exceptional

I am not sure if you have read the joke where the moon is wearing a doctor's mirror and tells the earth that "I'm sorry, I'm afraid you have humans." haha. of course yours is realistiç and not a joke.
Thanks for sharing!
Good luck!
Blessings and a hearty hug!
Rebekka x

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reply by the author on 09-Oct-2018

I have heard it now! Good one :) Thanks so much for sharing, and thanks for the delightful rating, Rebekka. Much appreciated -- Craig