Arise, O Great Veggies
Halloween poem17 total reviews
Comment from jenintorre
Well this Halloween poem is certainly different. It is very quirky and it is nice to read something so original.You should have entered it in the competition. Best wishes. Jen.
reply by the author on 21-Oct-2018
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Well this Halloween poem is certainly different. It is very quirky and it is nice to read something so original.You should have entered it in the competition. Best wishes. Jen.
Comment Written 20-Oct-2018
reply by the author on 21-Oct-2018
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Thanks for reading and enjoying. Elaine
Comment from Jannypan (Jan)
I enjoyed your fun poem, mermaids. There is good flow to your lines, the personification of the veggie is fun, and the last few lines sum up a fun treat filled Halloween. The next day all can return to healthy eating. Thanks for sharing. Jan
reply by the author on 21-Oct-2018
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I enjoyed your fun poem, mermaids. There is good flow to your lines, the personification of the veggie is fun, and the last few lines sum up a fun treat filled Halloween. The next day all can return to healthy eating. Thanks for sharing. Jan
Comment Written 20-Oct-2018
reply by the author on 21-Oct-2018
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Thanks for a great review. Elaine
Comment from Hugh McDowell
I love this. The title alone made me read it. A very creative take on Halloween where the veggies strike back! LOL. All good, but my favorite verse is the fourth. Still laughing as pumpkin chases vitamin c and goes over a cliff. Part of my appreciation stems from the fact that I have been a vegan for 13 years and I love to see veggies and fruit in the spotlight! Excellent. Hugh
reply by the author on 21-Oct-2018
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I love this. The title alone made me read it. A very creative take on Halloween where the veggies strike back! LOL. All good, but my favorite verse is the fourth. Still laughing as pumpkin chases vitamin c and goes over a cliff. Part of my appreciation stems from the fact that I have been a vegan for 13 years and I love to see veggies and fruit in the spotlight! Excellent. Hugh
Comment Written 20-Oct-2018
reply by the author on 21-Oct-2018
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That is great you are a vegetarian. Thanks for enjoying this unique Halloween poem. Elaine
Comment from PoemsOfDD
Mermaids, this is a great free verse poem to bring in the start of the Halloween season. I love that this has a healthy food twist with fruit and veggies to scare away the goblins. A most entertaining and enjoyable read : -) ~DD
reply by the author on 20-Oct-2018
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Mermaids, this is a great free verse poem to bring in the start of the Halloween season. I love that this has a healthy food twist with fruit and veggies to scare away the goblins. A most entertaining and enjoyable read : -) ~DD
Comment Written 15-Oct-2018
reply by the author on 20-Oct-2018
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Thanks for a great review. Elaine
Comment from Kay Seed
I like the playfulness and silliness of this poem. I think it also brings up a great point... we are promoting obesity in America by continuing to pack kids full of candy! yikes! Some grammar suggestions are Jack O Lantern should be "Jack-o'-lantern" and in the title "Arise" should have a comma after it. Overall very strong poem and imagery.
-Kay
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reply by the author on 15-Oct-2018
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I like the playfulness and silliness of this poem. I think it also brings up a great point... we are promoting obesity in America by continuing to pack kids full of candy! yikes! Some grammar suggestions are Jack O Lantern should be "Jack-o'-lantern" and in the title "Arise" should have a comma after it. Overall very strong poem and imagery.
-Kay
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Comment Written 14-Oct-2018
reply by the author on 15-Oct-2018
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Thanks for your suggestions and taking time to review. . Elaine
Comment from Alcreator Litt Dear
Great nutritious value is there, so is the welcome of veggies, there is something always healthy affair, quite natural and it comes naturally; well said, well done. Keep Writing -- DR ALCREATOR
reply by the author on 15-Oct-2018
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Great nutritious value is there, so is the welcome of veggies, there is something always healthy affair, quite natural and it comes naturally; well said, well done. Keep Writing -- DR ALCREATOR
Comment Written 14-Oct-2018
reply by the author on 15-Oct-2018
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Thanks for a great review. Elaine
Comment from Sugarray77
Too cute. This fun loving verse makes a spoof of the sugar candies and treats. You are right to say they are healthier, but we both know that isn't what Halloween is about. Very good writing that keeps the reader entertained. Well done.
reply by the author on 15-Oct-2018
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Too cute. This fun loving verse makes a spoof of the sugar candies and treats. You are right to say they are healthier, but we both know that isn't what Halloween is about. Very good writing that keeps the reader entertained. Well done.
Comment Written 14-Oct-2018
reply by the author on 15-Oct-2018
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Love your review. Thanks so much. Elaine
Comment from Lady Jane
shouting(,) we are the ones
is not suppose(d) to be
This is such a fun Halloween write. Why didn't you enter this into the Halloween contest, Mermaids? It would surely have been a fresh and unique spin on entries and might have taken first :) I love how you personified the veggies and gave them power over wee lil ones... haha. Nicely done. Thanks for sharing.
janelle
reply by the author on 14-Oct-2018
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shouting(,) we are the ones
is not suppose(d) to be
This is such a fun Halloween write. Why didn't you enter this into the Halloween contest, Mermaids? It would surely have been a fresh and unique spin on entries and might have taken first :) I love how you personified the veggies and gave them power over wee lil ones... haha. Nicely done. Thanks for sharing.
janelle
Comment Written 14-Oct-2018
reply by the author on 14-Oct-2018
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Thanks for reading and enjoying my unique Halloween tale. Elaine
Comment from Sankey
Hi, a good read very colourful picture. I have at least one of Schatzlings on my biography. They are also FS members still, I think. Came through here to see if you were still around as you were a reviewer of my biography a while ago I think checking to see who of my reviewers is still around as I do Acknowledgements. Just one small spag possibly at the end?? is not suppose(d) to be
reply by the author on 12-Oct-2018
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Hi, a good read very colourful picture. I have at least one of Schatzlings on my biography. They are also FS members still, I think. Came through here to see if you were still around as you were a reviewer of my biography a while ago I think checking to see who of my reviewers is still around as I do Acknowledgements. Just one small spag possibly at the end?? is not suppose(d) to be
Comment Written 12-Oct-2018
reply by the author on 12-Oct-2018
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Thanks for a great review. Elaine
Comment from Joan E.
Thank you for this timely chorus of produce to hail Halloween. (I believe "supposed" lost its "d" in the final line.) I relished the artwork and color presentation, along with the personification in the final stanza. Cheers- Joan
reply by the author on 08-Oct-2018
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Thank you for this timely chorus of produce to hail Halloween. (I believe "supposed" lost its "d" in the final line.) I relished the artwork and color presentation, along with the personification in the final stanza. Cheers- Joan
Comment Written 07-Oct-2018
reply by the author on 08-Oct-2018
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Thanks for reading and enjoying. Elaine
