Haunted Even At Deathbed!
67-Word General Fiction. Said! Haunted at deathbed!54 total reviews
Comment from l.d.lauritzen
Great title-it drew me in. I wonder as we get older if the haunting doesn't get stronger simply because we've experienced so much more. I hear friends say 'I'd do it differently if I had it to do over' guess I'm a fatalist, I believe if with a chance for a do-over we'd make the same choice. Keep writing.
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Great title-it drew me in. I wonder as we get older if the haunting doesn't get stronger simply because we've experienced so much more. I hear friends say 'I'd do it differently if I had it to do over' guess I'm a fatalist, I believe if with a chance for a do-over we'd make the same choice. Keep writing.
Comment Written 03-Oct-2018
Comment from Marie Werner
The second paragraph here really speaks to me - how do you let that stuff go? Interesting word choices - "follies" and "methinks" really give the story a unique flavor. Fascinating little story here, I enjoyed reading it.
Thanks for posting!
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The second paragraph here really speaks to me - how do you let that stuff go? Interesting word choices - "follies" and "methinks" really give the story a unique flavor. Fascinating little story here, I enjoyed reading it.
Thanks for posting!
Comment Written 03-Oct-2018
Comment from meeshu
very unique in form and style. a message comes through loud and clear, despite mysterious language and phrasing. a perfect combination, ALCREATOR LITT DEAR.........................meeshu
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very unique in form and style. a message comes through loud and clear, despite mysterious language and phrasing. a perfect combination, ALCREATOR LITT DEAR.........................meeshu
Comment Written 03-Oct-2018
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
I think you mean: (o man how right you are) in the opening line. I would suggest these changes for the penultimate verse:
Strange how fear engulfs me at times. I discover my folly and methinks a lifetime of mistakes could result in some big punishments! God knows when there will be changes.
Just some small changes, love Dolly x
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I think you mean: (o man how right you are) in the opening line. I would suggest these changes for the penultimate verse:
Strange how fear engulfs me at times. I discover my folly and methinks a lifetime of mistakes could result in some big punishments! God knows when there will be changes.
Just some small changes, love Dolly x
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Comment Written 03-Oct-2018
